The given chart provides the information about the holiday accommodation selected by the British in the year 2010.
Overall hotel holds the highest proportion for all regions while camping preferred the list in Schotland. However there is a similar preferrence showed for self-catering between England and Wales.
In terms of hotel, all of the regions chosen it the most with around 45%-55%.Self catering holds the second position among these four regions except Northern Ireland(12%) .The percentage is between 25%-30%.
In concern of self catering without Northern Ireland all of the areas preferred this similarly. For caravan Northern ireland chosen it after the hotel at 30%. All other regions consider it around 5%-12% which is comparetively the lowest proportion of the chart.
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#Overall – Overall(,)
hotel holds the highest proportion – hotels held the highest proportion
#all regions while – all regions(,) while
#Schotland – Scotland
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#here is a similar preferrence showed – a similar preference was shown
#In terms of hotel, all of the regions chosen it the most – unclear
#Self catering holds the second position among these four regions except Northern Ireland(12%) – Self-catering held the second position in all regions except Northern Ireland (12%)
#The percentage is between 25%-30% – sentence structure
#In concern of – avoid this connector
#self catering without Northern Ireland all of the areas preferred this similarly – unclear
#For caravan Northern ireland chosen it after the hotel at 30% – sentence making
#All other regions consider it around 5%-12% which is comparetively the lowest proportion of the chart – no clear information
The bar chart illustrates given information to the holiday accommodation chosen by the British consumar spending on four different items in the year 2010
overall,with regard to the holiday accommodation chosen by the British england had the highest proportion for hotel,whereas camping accounted for much lower ratio for this chart.However, for wales the difference of ratios betweeen caravan and camping was very minimal.
in terms of british just over 53% on england,which is the highrst shown on the chart.By contrast, northern ireland were the lowest on percentage of 45%.Conversely the england and scotland are similar persentag
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#illustrates given information to the holiday accommodation – illustrates information about holiday accommodation
#consumar – consumer
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#overall,with regard to the holiday accommodation chosen by the British england had the highest proportion for hotel – Overall, with regard to holiday accommodation, England had the highest proportion of hotel
#england – England.
#for wales the difference of ratios betweeen caravan and camping was very minimal – in Wales, the difference between caravan and camping was minimal
#wales – Wales.
#in terms of british just over 53% on england,which is the highrst shown on the chart – unclear
#highrst – highest
#By contrast, northern ireland were the lowest on percentage of 45% – By contrast, Northern Ireland had the lowest percentage at 45%
#Conversely the england and scotland are similar persentag – Conversely, England and Scotland had similar percentages
The given bar chart illustrates the information about the accommodation prefer by the British in the year 2010
Overall, with regand to the holiday ,England was the highest proportion for hotel , whereas caravan accounted for a much lower ratio for this category. However, for self-catering , the difference of ratios between England and Scotland was very minimal.
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#prefer – preferred
#regand – regard
#England was the highest proportion – England had the highest proportion
#for self-catering , the difference of ratios between England and Scotland was very minimal – sentence making
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#prefer – preferred
#regand – regard
#England was the highest proportion – England had the highest proportion
#for self-catering , the difference of ratios between England and Scotland was very minimal – sentence making
The bar graph illustrates the holiday accommodation preffered by the British in the year 2010.
Overall ,with regard to the accommodation, hotel had the highest proportion in England, whereas caravan accounted for a lower ratio in this category. However, between self-catering and camping had a similar ratio in Northern Ireland
In terms of the England, hotel had the largest proportion almost 55% followed by caravan around 7% which was the lowest ratio. Self-catering and camping ratio was around 27% and more than 10%. Moving to the Scotland, hotel had the highest ratio rath
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#preffered – preferred
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#In terms of the England – In terms of England
#almost 55% followed by caravan around 7% which was – almost 55%(,) followed by caravan around 7%(,) which was
“Self-catering and camping ratio was around 27% and more than 10%” → should be “The ratios for self-catering and camping were around 27% and slightly above 10%, respectively.” (plural “ratios,” verb agreement, more precise).
#Moving to the Scotland – Moving to Scotland
The bar chart illustrates the holiday accommodation prefferd by the British in the year 2010.
Overall, with regard to the accommodation, hotel had the largest percentage in England, whereas the ratio for self-catering and camping were similar in Northern Ireland. However, camping has less chosen accommodation in Scotland.
In terms of England, hotel accommodation represented largest share, at 55 percent, whereas self- catering was its halved. Caravan had lowest ratio at 5% , which was 7 percent more than that. Moving to Scotland has second highest proportion in hotel , at 52 percent
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#prefferd – preferred
#camping has less chosen accommodation – camping was less preferred/chosen accomodation
#represented largest share – represented the largest share
#was its halved – was half of that
#which was 7 percent more than that – missing information
#Moving to Scotland has second highest – sentence structure
The holiday accommodation liked by the British in the year 2010.
Overall,with regard to the accommodation,hotel had the highest proportion in England,whereas caravan accounted for a much lower ratio for this country.However,self-catering and camping were likely to choose in Northern Ireland similarly,having no difference in proportions.
In terms of Northern Ireland,hotel noted the largest ratio at almost 47%,followed by caravan at nearly 30%.Moreover,self-catering and camping were around similar percentage,each standing at almost 12%.Moving to England,hotel had the biggest ratio at almost 55%,
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#However,self-catering and camping were likely to choose in Northern Ireland similarly,having no difference in proportions – sentence making
The bar chart illustrates the holiday accommodation preferred by the British in the year 2010.
Overall, with all regard to the holiday accommodation, Hotel had the highest proportion in all countries, whereas camping accounted for a much lower for this field. However, for self-catering, the difference between countries was very minimal.
In terms of England, hotel was preferred by 55% British. Followed by Scotland at 52% and Wales at 49%, which was the lowest figure than that. Moreover, Caravan had the lowest ratio in all countries, while in Wales , the ratio of caravan and camping was almost similar at 8% and 15% respectively.
Regarding self-catering was almost similar in all countries with a merely difference, whereas self-catering had the lowest figure in North Ireland at 12%. In Scotland, self-catering had the highest proportion at 30%,
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#countries was very minimal – countries was minimal
#preferred by 55% British, followed by
#Regarding self-catering was almost – Regarding self-catering(,) it was almost
#with a merely difference – with a mere difference
The bar illustrates the holiday accommodation chosen by the British in the year 2010
Overall, With regard to the accommodation hotel had the highest proportion in England. Whereas Caravan and Camping accounted for much lower Ration for this.
In terms of England,hotel higest share at 55 percent,wherase self catering was it halved, lowest caravan 5 parcent,
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#With regard to the accommodation hotel had the highest proportion in England. Whereas Caravan and Camping accounted for much lower Ration for this – with regard to accommodation, hotels had the highest proportion in England, whereas caravans and camping accounted for much lower ratios
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The bar chart shows that the holiday accommondation which was chosen by the British in 2010.
Overall, with regard to the proportion of chosen accommondation ,majority of countries have the highest ratios for the chosen of hotel. However, camping are almost similar in every countries.
In England and Scotland, most was chosen hotel which almost (55%). In the same countries self catering are also almost similar which are under 30 .
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#accommondation – accommodation
#the holiday accommodation which was chosen – the percentages of holiday accommodation chosen
#majority of countries have the highest ratios – unclear
#camping are almost similar – camping was relatively similar
#most was chosen hotel which almost (55%) – most of the British chose hotel, which was almost 55%
#In the same countries self catering are also almost similar which are under 30 – , whereas self-catering had similar percentages, which accounted for less than 30%
The bar chart illustrates the information about the percentage of the
British people chosen accommodation in the year 2010.
Overall, hotel holds the highest ratios of all region, while caravan hold the least percentage . However, self-catering show a similar trend of majority nations.
In terms of hotel , showed the highest ratio at 55%, while caravan noted least proportion around 11 %
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#chosen – chose
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#hold – held
#self-catering show a similar trend of majority nations – self-catering showed a similar trend in the majority of the nations
#of hotel , showed the highest – of hotel, the highest
The bar chart demonstrates the holiday accommodation chosen by the British in the year 2010.
overall,with regard to the holiday accommodation ,the accommodation in hotel was highly preffered by all mentioned countries whereas,a lowest proportion had showen in the term of camping.However,a middle range had chosen self catering except Northern Ireland which had a least ratio.
In terms of England,the accommodation of hotel had a larger percentage at about 55% which was the highest ratio among the chart,followed by the self catering at 38%.Caraben and camping had the lowest percentage at 6% and 12%.Scotland had highest amount for hoyel and largest for camping.self cating had halved with hotel.
Regarding Wales,hotel had the highest and caraben had the lower ratio.
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#demonstrate the holiday accommodation choosen by the British in year 2010 – demonstrates the holiday accommodation chosen by the British in the year 2010.
#overall, – Overall,
#the accommodation of hotel had a larger percentage at about 55% which was the highest ratio among the chart,followed by the self catering at 38% – sentence making+unclear
#Caraben and camping had the lowest percentage at 6% and 12% – Caravan and camping had the lowest percentages at 6% and 12% respectively.
#Scotland had highest amount for hoyel and largest for camping.self cating had halved with hotel – unclear
#Regarding Wales,hotel had the highest and caraben had the lower ratio – Regarding Wales, hotels had the highest proportion, whereas caravans had the lowest.
The given chart provides the information about the holiday accommodation selected by the British in the year 2010.
Overall hotel holds the highest proportion for all regions while camping preferred the list in Schotland. However there is a similar preferrence showed for self-catering between England and Wales.
In terms of hotel, all of the regions chosen it the most with around 45%-55%.Self catering holds the second position among these four regions except Northern Ireland(12%) .The percentage is between 25%-30%.
In concern of self catering without Northern Ireland all of the areas preferred this similarly. For caravan Northern ireland chosen it after the hotel at 30%. All other regions consider it around 5%-12% which is comparetively the lowest proportion of the chart.
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#provides the information – provides information
#Overall – Overall(,)
hotel holds the highest proportion – hotels held the highest proportion
#all regions while – all regions(,) while
#Schotland – Scotland
#camping preferred the list in Schotland – unclear
#here is a similar preferrence showed – a similar preference was shown
#In terms of hotel, all of the regions chosen it the most – unclear
#Self catering holds the second position among these four regions except Northern Ireland(12%) – Self-catering held the second position in all regions except Northern Ireland (12%)
#The percentage is between 25%-30% – sentence structure
#In concern of – avoid this connector
#self catering without Northern Ireland all of the areas preferred this similarly – unclear
#For caravan Northern ireland chosen it after the hotel at 30% – sentence making
#All other regions consider it around 5%-12% which is comparetively the lowest proportion of the chart – no clear information
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The bar chart illustrates given information to the holiday accommodation chosen by the British consumar spending on four different items in the year 2010
overall,with regard to the holiday accommodation chosen by the British england had the highest proportion for hotel,whereas camping accounted for much lower ratio for this chart.However, for wales the difference of ratios betweeen caravan and camping was very minimal.
in terms of british just over 53% on england,which is the highrst shown on the chart.By contrast, northern ireland were the lowest on percentage of 45%.Conversely the england and scotland are similar persentag
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#illustrates given information to the holiday accommodation – illustrates information about holiday accommodation
#consumar – consumer
#chosen by the British consumar spending on four different items – unclear
#overall,with regard to the holiday accommodation chosen by the British england had the highest proportion for hotel – Overall, with regard to holiday accommodation, England had the highest proportion of hotel
#england – England.
#for wales the difference of ratios betweeen caravan and camping was very minimal – in Wales, the difference between caravan and camping was minimal
#wales – Wales.
#in terms of british just over 53% on england,which is the highrst shown on the chart – unclear
#highrst – highest
#By contrast, northern ireland were the lowest on percentage of 45% – By contrast, Northern Ireland had the lowest percentage at 45%
#Conversely the england and scotland are similar persentag – Conversely, England and Scotland had similar percentages
BAND – 4.5
The given bar chart illustrates the information about the accommodation prefer by the British in the year 2010
Overall, with regand to the holiday ,England was the highest proportion for hotel , whereas caravan accounted for a much lower ratio for this category. However, for self-catering , the difference of ratios between England and Scotland was very minimal.
In terms of hotel , England the
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#England was the highest proportion – England had the highest proportion
#for self-catering , the difference of ratios between England and Scotland was very minimal – sentence making
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#England was the highest proportion – England had the highest proportion
#for self-catering , the difference of ratios between England and Scotland was very minimal – sentence making
BAND – 2.5
The bar graph illustrates the holiday accommodation preffered by the British in the year 2010.
Overall ,with regard to the accommodation, hotel had the highest proportion in England, whereas caravan accounted for a lower ratio in this category. However, between self-catering and camping had a similar ratio in Northern Ireland
In terms of the England, hotel had the largest proportion almost 55% followed by caravan around 7% which was the lowest ratio. Self-catering and camping ratio was around 27% and more than 10%. Moving to the Scotland, hotel had the highest ratio rath
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#preffered – preferred
#between self-catering and camping had – structure
#In terms of the England – In terms of England
#almost 55% followed by caravan around 7% which was – almost 55%(,) followed by caravan around 7%(,) which was
“Self-catering and camping ratio was around 27% and more than 10%” → should be “The ratios for self-catering and camping were around 27% and slightly above 10%, respectively.” (plural “ratios,” verb agreement, more precise).
#Moving to the Scotland – Moving to Scotland
BAND – 4.5
The bar chart illustrates the holiday accommodation prefferd by the British in the year 2010.
Overall, with regard to the accommodation, hotel had the largest percentage in England, whereas the ratio for self-catering and camping were similar in Northern Ireland. However, camping has less chosen accommodation in Scotland.
In terms of England, hotel accommodation represented largest share, at 55 percent, whereas self- catering was its halved. Caravan had lowest ratio at 5% , which was 7 percent more than that. Moving to Scotland has second highest proportion in hotel , at 52 percent
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#prefferd – preferred
#camping has less chosen accommodation – camping was less preferred/chosen accomodation
#represented largest share – represented the largest share
#was its halved – was half of that
#which was 7 percent more than that – missing information
#Moving to Scotland has second highest – sentence structure
BAND – 4.5
The holiday accommodation liked by the British in the year 2010.
Overall,with regard to the accommodation,hotel had the highest proportion in England,whereas caravan accounted for a much lower ratio for this country.However,self-catering and camping were likely to choose in Northern Ireland similarly,having no difference in proportions.
In terms of Northern Ireland,hotel noted the largest ratio at almost 47%,followed by caravan at nearly 30%.Moreover,self-catering and camping were around similar percentage,each standing at almost 12%.Moving to England,hotel had the biggest ratio at almost 55%,
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#However,self-catering and camping were likely to choose in Northern Ireland similarly,having no difference in proportions – sentence making
BAND – 5.0
The bar chart illustrates the holiday accommodation preferred by the British in the year 2010.
Overall, with all regard to the holiday accommodation, Hotel had the highest proportion in all countries, whereas camping accounted for a much lower for this field. However, for self-catering, the difference between countries was very minimal.
In terms of England, hotel was preferred by 55% British. Followed by Scotland at 52% and Wales at 49%, which was the lowest figure than that. Moreover, Caravan had the lowest ratio in all countries, while in Wales , the ratio of caravan and camping was almost similar at 8% and 15% respectively.
Regarding self-catering was almost similar in all countries with a merely difference, whereas self-catering had the lowest figure in North Ireland at 12%. In Scotland, self-catering had the highest proportion at 30%,
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#countries was very minimal – countries was minimal
#preferred by 55% British, followed by
#Regarding self-catering was almost – Regarding self-catering(,) it was almost
#with a merely difference – with a mere difference
BAND – 6.0+
The bar illustrates the holiday accommodation chosen by the British in the year 2010
Overall, With regard to the accommodation hotel had the highest proportion in England. Whereas Caravan and Camping accounted for much lower Ration for this.
In terms of England,hotel higest share at 55 percent,wherase self catering was it halved, lowest caravan 5 parcent,
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#The bar illustrates – The bar chart illustrates
#With regard to the accommodation hotel had the highest proportion in England. Whereas Caravan and Camping accounted for much lower Ration for this – with regard to accommodation, hotels had the highest proportion in England, whereas caravans and camping accounted for much lower ratios
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BAND – 3.5
The bar chart shows that the holiday accommondation which was chosen by the British in 2010.
Overall, with regard to the proportion of chosen accommondation ,majority of countries have the highest ratios for the chosen of hotel. However, camping are almost similar in every countries.
In England and Scotland, most was chosen hotel which almost (55%). In the same countries self catering are also almost similar which are under 30 .
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#accommondation – accommodation
#the holiday accommodation which was chosen – the percentages of holiday accommodation chosen
#majority of countries have the highest ratios – unclear
#camping are almost similar – camping was relatively similar
#most was chosen hotel which almost (55%) – most of the British chose hotel, which was almost 55%
#In the same countries self catering are also almost similar which are under 30 – , whereas self-catering had similar percentages, which accounted for less than 30%
BAND – 3.5
The bar chart illustrates the information about the percentage of the
British people chosen accommodation in the year 2010.
Overall, hotel holds the highest ratios of all region, while caravan hold the least percentage . However, self-catering show a similar trend of majority nations.
In terms of hotel , showed the highest ratio at 55%, while caravan noted least proportion around 11 %
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#chosen – chose
#region – regions
#hold – held
#self-catering show a similar trend of majority nations – self-catering showed a similar trend in the majority of the nations
#of hotel , showed the highest – of hotel, the highest
BAND – 3.0
The bar chart demonstrates the holiday accommodation chosen by the British in the year 2010.
overall,with regard to the holiday accommodation ,the accommodation in hotel was highly preffered by all mentioned countries whereas,a lowest proportion had showen in the term of camping.However,a middle range had chosen self catering except Northern Ireland which had a least ratio.
In terms of England,the accommodation of hotel had a larger percentage at about 55% which was the highest ratio among the chart,followed by the self catering at 38%.Caraben and camping had the lowest percentage at 6% and 12%.Scotland had highest amount for hoyel and largest for camping.self cating had halved with hotel.
Regarding Wales,hotel had the highest and caraben had the lower ratio.
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#demonstrate the holiday accommodation choosen by the British in year 2010 – demonstrates the holiday accommodation chosen by the British in the year 2010.
#overall, – Overall,
#the accommodation of hotel had a larger percentage at about 55% which was the highest ratio among the chart,followed by the self catering at 38% – sentence making+unclear
#Caraben and camping had the lowest percentage at 6% and 12% – Caravan and camping had the lowest percentages at 6% and 12% respectively.
#Scotland had highest amount for hoyel and largest for camping.self cating had halved with hotel – unclear
#Regarding Wales,hotel had the highest and caraben had the lower ratio – Regarding Wales, hotels had the highest proportion, whereas caravans had the lowest.
BAND – 4.0