Some people believe that students should study only subjects that will be useful for their future careers.
Others think that students should be free to study subjects they find interesting.
Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
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It is believed by some that students should study the subject that will be useful for their future career, while other think that they choose the subject which is interesting to them. In my opinion student should follow their passion because it can helps them to enjoy the subject and more dedicated in their study.
On the one hand, some pupils prefer to study the demandable subject because of numerous job opportunities. Especially many reknowned organizations prefer some specific subject in their job requirement. For example only CSE students can apply for Google company job. Additionally students study these subjects to improve their skill. Some beneficial subjects is comparetivly hard than other subjects. That is why students choose this to update their knowledge skill.
Many students study their favourite subject because it simplifies the study. when students enjoy the study it will be easier to them so they feel motivated to continue. In addition these subjects make them more dedicated on their study because these are interested to them.
to conclude
Introduction Mistakes:
other → others
that they choose → they should choose
which → that
student should → students should
it can helps → it can help
and more dedicated → and become more dedicated
Missing article: the future career → their future careers
Body1 Mistakes:
demandable subject → in-demand subjects
reknowned → renowned
prefer some specific subject → prefer specific subjects
in their job requirement → in their job requirements
Google company job → a job at Google
skill → skills
Some beneficial subjects is → Some beneficial subjects are
comparetivly → comparatively
hard → harder
choose this → choose these
knowledge skill → knowledge and skills
Body2 Mistakes:
favourite subject → favourite subjects
simplifies the study → makes studying easier
Capitalization: when → When
easier to them → easier for them
dedicated on their study → dedicated to their studies
because these are interested to them → because these subjects interest them
“Conclusion is incomplete”
In my opinion, individuals think that student ought to be free to study subjects they find interesting because it can be aid them to focused on study and make them more dedicated towards study. Which will help them to study more and more.
On the hand, some people believe that students should study only subjects that will be useful for their future and careers since every student want a better future and career. By reading only subjects that useful for future student may get bored. Also they will lost their dedication and interest from study. It is important for students to focus and dedicated through study for an good careers. It is better to choose the subject that they interested instead of selecting only subjects that will help for future and careers.
On the other hand, students shall free to study subjects that they find interesting as they will want to more interact with study. To simplify, they will study more and enjoy the subject that they interested. They remain stress free and study more time without getting bored. They will be more focused on study. As a result, they will adore study and flourish more in their life. And find a great career.
In conclusion, while students study their favourite subject t
Introduction Mistakes
individuals think → some individuals think (missing clarity)
student → students (plural)
can be aid → can aid / can help (wrong structure)
to focused → to focus (wrong verb form)
dedicated towards study → dedicated to their studies
Fragment: “Which will help them…” → must be joined to previous sentence
Body 1 Mistakes
On the hand → On the one hand
every student want → every student wants (subject–verb agreement)
By reading → By studying
subjects that useful → subjects that are useful
student may → students may (plural consistency)
lost → lose
interest from study → interest in studying
focus and dedicated → focus and be dedicated
an good careers → a good career
choose the subject that they interested → choose subjects that they are interested in
help for future and careers → help with their future careers
Body 2 Mistakes
shall free → should be free (wrong modal structure)
want to more interact with study → want to engage more with their studies
subject that they interested → subjects they are interested in
study more time → study for longer
adore study → enjoy studying (unnatural phrase)
flourish more in their life → flourish in life (remove ‘more’)
And find a great career → Fragment; avoid starting sentences with ‘And’ in academic writing
“Conclusion is complete”
it is believed by some individuals that students should be more realistic while choosing the subject they want to study, while others think that students should choose the study subject according to their liking. In my opinion students should follow their heart and study the subject they want.
On the one hand, studying the subject that will be helpful for the future can be advantageous for some aspect, such as, they can get a secure job in the future. By having a secure job the can be financially stable and provide supports for their family and make them happy.
On the other hand, by studying the subject they find interesting, students can get their desire job career, which will make them feel motivated and happy. As a result they will be more productive and will get more success in life. Doing their desire job will give them mental peace, which will lead to a healthier life, and with more success.
In conclusion, while there are some advantages on studying subjects that are more realistic and needed for the future, I think studying something that moves you and find it interesting is the best option to pick.
Introduction Mistakes + Explanations
it → It (capital letter needed)
choose the study subject → choose the subjects (remove repetition)
according to their liking → according to their interests (more academic)
In my opinion students → In my opinion, students (comma needed)
follow their heart → follow their hearts (plural)
Body 1 Mistakes + Explanations
advantageous for some aspect → advantageous in some aspects
such as, they can → such as the opportunity to get
By having a secure job the can → they can (missing word)
supports → support (uncountable)
make them happy → make their families happy (clarity)
Body 2 Mistakes + Explanations
desire job career → desired job or desired career (incorrect phrase)
get more success → achieve greater success
Doing their desire job → Doing their desired job
mental peace → peace of mind (more natural)
with more success → and even more success (needs linking)
Conclusion Mistakes + Explanations
advantages on → advantages of
studying something that moves you and find it interesting → studying something that moves you and that you find interesting (subject missing)
Some individual think that students ought to choose subjects what will be beneficial for long term careers,while others argue that students should choose subjects to study which gives them enjoy.In my perspective,people should give opportunity students to choose find them interesting subjects because it will be assist become more successful in life.
On the one hand,many people said that students should study only subjects.One main reasons is that when they enables to focus one subjects which aids to enhances their cognitive skills and become more focus their study.Another reasons is that students can be expert one subjects due to they do not keep extra pressure from different subjects.Moreover,students can face less difficulties in their life and become more flourish in life and they can e
n my
Introduction Mistakes + Explanations
Some individual think → Some individuals think (plural + verb agreement)
subjects what → subjects that
long term careers → long-term careers (hyphen)
subjects to study which gives them enjoy → subjects that they enjoy (incorrect structure)
people should give opportunity students → people should give students the opportunity
choose find them interesting subjects → to choose subjects they find interesting
it will be assist → it will assist / it will help
become more successful → them become more successful
Body 1 Mistakes + Explanations
many people said → many people say (present tense for general ideas)
study only subjects → incomplete; only study certain subjects
One main reasons is → One main reason is (singular)
when they enables → when they are able (wrong verb form)
focus one subjects → focus on one subject
aids to enhances → aids in enhancing / helps enhance
become more focus → become more focused
Another reasons is → Another reason is
students can be expert one subjects → students can become experts in one subject
keep extra pressure → face extra pressure
More flourish in life → flourish more in life
The paragraph ends abruptly: “and they can e”
“The rest is incomplete”
It is thought by some people that students ought to recite study only subject that will creat their future more bright.while others believe that students should choose this subject where they find interesting.In my openion students ought to find their interesting subject that they want to study.because it will aid us to thinking broderly.as a result they can improve their creativity also they can reduce stress and put more dedication when they are study.
on the one hand,few individuals believe that when students read their group subject that will be assist for their future careers.because at that time they just focus on the main subjest.for why it will be easier to find you future. For instance, a science group of students if they study on their main subject more sharple. as a result it can be seen they find a good job that is sustainable for their family.
yp conclude,i believe that evero
Introduction Mistakes + Explanations
recite study only subject → incorrect phrase
✔ Say: study only the subjects
creat → create
future more bright → a brighter future (comparative adjective)
while needs capital letter after a full stop
choose this subject where they find interesting → incorrect grammar
✔ Say: choose the subjects they find interesting
openion → opinion
students ought to find their interesting subject → incorrect structure
✔ Say: students ought to choose subjects that interest them
because it will aid us to thinking broderly → incorrect.
✔ Say: because it will help them think more broadly
broderly → broadly
as a result they can improve their creativity also they can reduce stress → needs linking
✔ Use: and it can help them improve creativity and reduce stress
when they are study → when they study (verb form)
Body 1 Mistakes + Explanations
on the one hand → On the one hand (capital letter)
read their group subject → study their core subjects
that will be assist → that will assist them (wrong form)
because at that time → incomplete sentence (needs connection)
main subjest → main subject
for why → therefore / as a result (wrong phrase)
find you future → find their future path (incorrect)
if they study on their main subject → if they study their main subjects
sharple → more sharply / more deeply
it can be seen they find a good job → incorrect structure
✔ Say: they are more likely to find a good job
sustainable → stable (job is stable, not sustainable)
The rest is incomplete
It is thought by some individual that students ought only that will be
helpful for their future careers. While others argue that pupils ought to be choose the subject that they want. In my opinion , individual should follow their favorite subject because it can aid them to remain stress free and put more dedication in their education.
On the one hand , some learners prefer to study useful subject. When they study demanded subject they could easily find good job. It will help them to lead a stable life. For example , when someone choose science they could find lots of option as their profession they can be a doctor, teacher ,scientist . Therefore people should study a good study as aid to build their career.
On the other hand , some student prefer to study which subject they have interest . It can remain stress free and put more dedication in their education. As a result they can got
Introduction Mistakes + Reasons
some individual → some individuals (plural)
students ought only that will be helpful → missing words; incorrect structure
While cannot start a new sentence after a full stop here
pupils ought to be choose → ought to choose (no “be”)
individual should follow → individuals should follow (plural)
favorite subject → subjects they like (more academic)
remain stress free → remain stress-free (hyphen)
put more dedication in → be more dedicated to (correct phrase)
Body 1 Mistakes + Explanations
useful subject → useful subjects (plural)
demanded subject → subjects that are in demand (correct phrase)
find good job → find a good job (article)
choose science → chooses science (correct verb form)
lots of option → lots of options
doctor, teacher ,scientist → a comma is okay, but “a teacher” is not usually a science job
Therefore people should study a good study → unclear and incorrect phrase
Body 2 Mistakes
some student → some students
study which subject they have interest → study the subjects they are interested in
It can remain stress free → They can remain stress-free
put more dedication in → be more dedicated to
they can got → they can get (verb error)
Paragraph is incomplete.
It is believed by some people that students should study only subjects that will be useful for their future careers.Others however,claim that students should be free to study subjects they find interesting.I totally agree with the latter statement ,because it provides the opportunities
to learn in a peaceful mind.
studying only subjects that will be useful for students future career is often consideres essential for learning real life knowldege.To clarify,study ing only needed subject , student can gain the knowldege from this specific subject and it mostly helpful for their future career.students could be able to learn the exact topic they for brightening their future career.For instance,a student who are good in physics and mathmatics. He can build his career instead of it.such as he could be an enginner.
On the other hand,many believe that students should be free to study they find interest.As it is essential for students to learn with peaceful mind and enjoyment.These enjoyment in study assist the students to accept this topic easily and monotomously.which knowldege they gain by it ,they never forget it.Additionlally,by reading their own intered subject ,they can choose their goal instead of their interest and it will helpful for their career.
in conclusion,while studying only subjects that will be useful for students career has minor advantages,i believe that its demerits can easily outweigh the merits.
Introduction:
It is believed by some people that students should study only subjects that will be useful for their future careers. Others however,claim → Others, however, claim
that students should be free to study subjects they find interesting. I totally agree with the latter statement ,because → , because
it provides the opportunities → the opportunity
to learn in a peaceful mind → with a peaceful mind.
Body 1 :
studying → Studying
only subjects that will be useful for students future career → students’ future careers
is often consideres → considered
essential for learning real life knowldege → real-life knowledge.
To clarify, study ing → studying
only needed subject , student can gain the knowldege → needed subjects, students can gain the knowledge
from this specific subject and it mostly helpful → these specific subjects and it is mostly helpful
for their future career.students → career. Students
could be able to → are able to
learn the exact topic they for brightening their future career. → they need to brighten their future careers.
For instance, a student who are → a student who is
good in physics and mathmatics. → mathematics.
He can build his career instead of it. → based on it,
such as he could be an enginner. → for example, he could become an engineer.
Body 2:
As it is essential for students to learn with peaceful mind → a peaceful mind
and enjoyment. These enjoyment → This enjoyment
in study assist → assists
the students to accept this topic → understand the topic
easily and monotomously. → (incorrect word — should be “effectively” or “thoroughly”)
which knowldege they gain by it ,they never forget it. → The knowledge they gain from it becomes long-lasting.
Additionlally → Additionally,
by reading their own intered subject → interested subjects,
they can choose their goal instead of their interest → goals based on their interests
and it will helpful → it will be helpful
for their career.
Conclusion:
in conclusion, → In conclusion,
while studying only subjects that will be useful for students career → students’ careers
has minor advantages, i → I
believe that its demerits can easily outweigh the merits.
It is thought by some people that students ought learn only subjects provide to benefits their future goals. While others people argue that students ought to be study subjects they entertaininig their life.I totally agree with the first statement, because it enhaces a persons cognivite skills.
On the other hand, study only subjects has become more benfefits of learners.While learners study only subjects they properly maintaining thier routine,they are deeply focus on subjects.As a result, students are fastly completed thier task and homework.In additionally,study choosen subjects of learners are increeasing their own self.For example, the learners are study only subjects,while they achieve their goals.
On the other hand, students stud
Introduction
It is thought by some people that students ought learn only subjects provide to benefits their future goals.
ought learn → ought to learn
subjects provide to benefits → subjects that provide benefits
their future goals → their future goals (okay, minor style: “their future career goals” better)
While others people argue that students ought to be study subjects they entertaininig their life.
others people → other people
ought to be study → ought to study
they entertaininig their life → they find entertaining in their life
I totally agree with the first statement, because it enhaces a persons cognivite skills.
enhaces → enhances
a persons → a person’s
cognivite → cognitive
Body Paragraph 1
On the other hand, study only subjects has become more benfefits of learners.
study only subjects → studying only certain subjects
has become more benfefits → has more benefits / provides more benefits
of learners → for learners
While learners study only subjects they properly maintaining thier routine,they are deeply focus on subjects.
properly maintaining → properly maintain
thier → their
they are deeply focus → they are deeply focused
on subjects → on these subjects (optional, for clarity)
Missing comma after “subjects” → fix spacing
As a result, students are fastly completed thier task and homework.
fastly completed → able to complete quickly / complete quickly
thier → their
In additionally,study choosen subjects of learners are increeasing their own self.
In additionally → Additionally
study choosen subjects of learners → studying their chosen subjects
are increeasing their own self → helps improve themselves / increases self-development
For example, the learners are study only subjects,while they achieve their goals.
are study → study
while → and / which helps them achieve their goals
Missing comma after “subjects”
Rest is INCOMPLETE
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on the one hand , a geart number mertis come from the first clarify in many ways. the first and simplifies point is that univesities should students choose thirs subjects devepoment laet
Sentence 1
when it comes to the issues of students should sutdy only subject this useful for future in careera, a significaenle number of different stand with kinde fo views.
when it comes to the issues of → When it comes to the issue of (capitalization + singular)
students should sutdy only subject this useful → students should study only subjects that are useful (spelling + article + verb + grammar)
for future in careera → for their future careers (spelling + plural + possessive)
a significaenle number of different stand → a significant number of people stand (spelling + word choice + verb)
with kinde fo views → with different kinds of views (spelling + word order)
Sentence 2
While agoode number of enhances tend to one subjects uessful the skills and future by education scusscefull ,othere seem to interesting for students foces this sub…
While agoode number → While a good number (spelling + article)
enhances tend to one subjects uessful the skills → people tend to choose subjects useful for developing skills (word choice + grammar + spelling)
and future by education scusscefull → and preparing for a successful future through education (word order + spelling)
othere seem to interesting → others seem to be interested (spelling + verb form)
for students foces this sub → in subjects they like (word choice + grammar)
Sentence 3
However, i am goinh to cutling botn sides of this issue give to a reasoned .
i → I (capitalization)
goinh → going (spelling)
cutling → outlining / discussing (spelling + wrong word)
botn sides → both sides (spelling)
give to a reasoned → and give a reasoned opinion / conclusion (grammar + clarity)
Sentence 4
on the one hand , a geart number mertis come from the first clarify in many ways.
on the one hand , → On the one hand, (capitalization + comma spacing)
a geart number → a great number (spelling)
mertis come from the first clarify → merits come from the first perspective / explanation (spelling + word choice + grammar)
in many ways → in several ways (optional style improvement)
Sentence 5
the first and simplifies point is that univesities should students choose thirs subjects devepoment laet.
simplifies → simple (spelling / grammar)
univesities → universities (spelling)
should students choose thirs subjects → should allow students to choose their subjects (grammar + spelling)
devepoment laet → for their development later / for their later development (spelling + word order)
Summary of Error Types
1. Grammar:
Subject–verb agreement (students should study)
Missing auxiliary verbs (should allow students to…)
Incorrect verb forms (tend to → tend, simplifies → simple)
2. Spelling:
sutdy → study
significaenle → significant
careera → careers
agoode → a good
scusscefull → successful
goinh → going
cutling → outlining
geart → great
univesities → universities
thirs → their
devepoment → development
3. Sentence structure / clarity:
Run-on sentences
Fragments (sentence 2, incomplete ideas)
Awkward phrasing (give to a reasoned → give a reasoned opinion)
4. Cohesion / Word Choice:
“foces this sub” → “in subjects they like”
“merits come from the first clarify” → “merits come from the first perspective”
It believed by some individuals that students should study only subject that will be useful for their future careers .while others argue that they ought to be free to academic subjects they academic subjects they get interesting way because it can assist their enhances cognitive skill and stress free .
on the one hand ,some people believe that it is important to study only
academic subject for student because it has some beneficial way. Firstly,
when students study their own subject , they can give their subject , they
would be able to get more time to focus in this subject like science , mathematics etc. Secondly , by studying own subject , they can obtain good result in their academic some
Sentence 1
It believed by some individuals that students should study only subject that will be useful for their future careers .
It believed → It is believed
only subject → only subjects
subject that will be useful → subjects that will be useful
extra space before period → remove space
while others argue that they ought to be free to academic subjects they academic subjects they get interesting way because it can assist their enhances cognitive skill and stress free .
while → While (capitalization at start of sentence)
ought to be free to academic subjects → ought to be free to choose academic subjects
they academic subjects they get interesting way → in subjects they find interesting
because it can assist their enhances cognitive skill → because it can enhance their cognitive skills
and stress free → and remain stress-free
period spacing → remove extra space
Sentence 2
on the one hand ,some people believe that it is important to study only academic subject for student because it has some beneficial way.
on the one hand → On the one hand (capitalization)
only academic subject → only academic subjects
for student → for students
because it has some beneficial way → because it has several benefits / because it is beneficial
Sentence 3
Firstly, when students study their own subject , they can give their subject , they would be able to get more time to focus in this subject like science , mathematics etc.
study their own subject → study their chosen subjects
they can give their subject → unclear / remove → they can focus more
get more time to focus in this subject → have more time to focus on this subject
like science , mathematics etc → like science, mathematics, etc. (punctuation + comma spacing)
Sentence 4
Secondly , by studying own subject , they can obtain good result in their academic some
by studying own subject → by studying their chosen subjects
good result → good results
in their academic some → in their academic studies / in their academics
remove extra spaces after commas
Summary of Error Types
1. Grammar:
Missing “is” in passive voice (It believed → It is believed)
Plural/singular errors (subject → subjects, student → students, result → results)
Articles missing (study only academic subject → study only the academic subjects)
Verb form errors (enhances → enhance)
2. Vocabulary / Word Choice:
give their subject → unclear, needs rephrase
get interesting way → find interesting
stress free → stress-free
academic some → academic studies
3. Punctuation / Spacing:
Commas: remove extra spaces before/after commas
Periods: remove extra spaces
Capitalization at sentence start
4. Sentence Structure / Clarity:
Repetition and awkward phrasing (they academic subjects they get interesting way → in subjects they find interesting)
Run-on sentences that need splitting
Some ideas unclear or incomplete (academic some → unclear)
It is thought by some that learners should study only subjects which will be effective for there future careers ,while others argue that they ought to be free to academic subjects they get interesting . In my opinion, students should follow their interesting way because it can assist their enhances cognitive skills and stress free .
On the one hand ,some people believe that it is important to study only academic subjects for students because it has some beneficial way. Firstly, when students study their own study subjects ,they can give their full concentrate on this subjects. As to why, if they read their subjects ,they would be able to get more time to focus in this subjects like science ,mathematics etc. Secondly , by studying own subjects ,they can obtain good result in their academic exams which is very significant for their future career. For example, a student who have a good result academic certificate ,they can apply in good quality univercities .
On the otherhand,
Introduction
It is thought by some that learners should study only subjects which will be effective for there future careers ,while others argue that they ought to be free to academic subjects they get interesting .
there → their (possessive)
free to academic subjects → free to choose academic subjects
they get interesting → they find interesting
,while → , while (spacing after comma)
extra space before period → remove
In my opinion, students should follow their interesting way because it can assist their enhances cognitive skills and stress free .
interesting way → interests / subjects they are interested in
assist their enhances cognitive skills → enhance their cognitive skills
stress free → remain stress-free
extra space before period → remove
Body Paragraph 1
On the one hand ,some people believe that it is important to study only academic subjects for students because it has some beneficial way.
On the one hand , → On the one hand, (remove space before comma)
it has some beneficial way → it has several benefits / it is beneficial
Firstly, when students study their own study subjects ,they can give their full concentrate on this subjects.
their own study subjects → their chosen subjects
give their full concentrate → concentrate fully / give their full attention
on this subjects → on these subjects
space before comma → remove
As to why, if they read their subjects ,they would be able to get more time to focus in this subjects like science ,mathematics etc.
As to why → This is because
read their subjects → study their subjects
get more time to focus in this subjects → have more time to focus on these subjects
like science ,mathematics etc → like science, mathematics, etc. (comma + spacing)
Secondly , by studying own subjects ,they can obtain good result in their academic exams which is very significant for their future career.
Secondly , → Secondly, (remove space before comma)
studying own subjects → studying their chosen subjects
good result → good results
which is very significant → which is very important / valuable
For example, a student who have a good result academic certificate ,they can apply in good quality univercities .
who have → who has
good result academic certificate → a good academic record / certificate
apply in good quality univercities → apply to good universities
comma spacing → remove
Body Paragraph 2 (incomplete)
On the otherhand,
On the otherhand → On the other hand (spelling + spacing)
Paragraph is incomplete
Summary of Error Types
1. Grammar:
Singular/plural errors (subjects → subjects, have → has)
Articles missing (good universities, an academic certificate)
Verb form errors (enhances → enhance)
Subject–verb agreement (a student who have → a student who has)
2. Vocabulary / Word Choice:
their interesting way → their interests / subjects they like
assist their enhances → enhance their
give their full concentrate → concentrate fully
read their subjects → study their subjects
good result → good results / academic record
3. Punctuation / Spacing:
Extra spaces before commas and periods
Commas missing after introductory phrases
Comma placement in lists (science ,mathematics etc → science, mathematics, etc.)
4. Sentence Structure / Clarity:
Run-on sentences
Awkward phrasing (students should follow their interesting way)
Ideas sometimes unclear or incomplete (On the otherhand → missing paragraph)
IT is thought by some individuals that people should choose study only subjects that will be benefits for their future careers.While others believe that they should be more realistic and think more about their future.in my opinion,I believe that students should study only subjects that will be useful for their future careers. One the hand, When they are study they can easily catch the study.Students are develop their knowledge thats only subjects and more benefits the edueatin.They are more students interesting this only subject and thet are most properly this topic.For example,only subjects such as Chemistry,Physices,English etc.
On the other hand,students should be free to study subjects they find interesting.To clarify,students are free to study develop their self respect,their choice and most they are very benefits essantial their study.They are attentive their subjects and succesful her life.
To conclude, i beleive t
Introduction
IT is thought by some individuals that people should choose study only subjects that will be benefits for their future careers.
IT → It (capitalization)
choose study only subjects → choose to study only subjects
will be benefits → will be beneficial
While others believe that they should be more realistic and think more about their future.
sentence fragment → combine with previous sentence or use proper subject: “Others, however, believe…”
think more about their future → think more realistically about their future
in my opinion,I believe that students should study only subjects that will be useful for their future careers.
in my opinion → In my opinion (capitalization)
I believe that students → redundancy; “I believe” already conveys opinion
extra space after comma → In my opinion, students should…
Body Paragraph 1
One the hand, When they are study they can easily catch the study.
One the hand → On the one hand
When they are study → When they study
catch the study → understand the study easily / grasp the content easily
capital W in When → lowercase if mid-sentence
Students are develop their knowledge thats only subjects and more benefits the edueatin.
are develop → develop / are developing
thats only subjects → in those subjects only
more benefits the edueatin → gain more benefits from their education / improve their education
spelling: edueatin → education
They are more students interesting this only subject and thet are most properly this topic.
They are more students interesting → They are more interested in these subjects
this only subject → these subjects only
thet → they
are most properly this topic → can focus properly on these topics
For example,only subjects such as Chemistry,Physices,English etc.
For example,only → For example, only (spacing)
Physices → Physics
comma spacing after subjects → add space after commas: Chemistry, Physics, English, etc.
Body Paragraph 2
On the other hand,students should be free to study subjects they find interesting.
comma spacing → On the other hand, students
To clarify,students are free to study develop their self respect,their choice and most they are very benefits essantial their study.
students are free to study develop → students are free to study, which helps develop
their self respect,their choice → their self-respect and personal choice
most they are very benefits essantial their study → which is very beneficial for their studies
spelling: essantial → essential
comma spacing → add proper spaces after commas
They are attentive their subjects and succesful her life.
attentive their subjects → attentive to their subjects
succesful her life → successful in life
Conclusion (incomplete)
To conclude, i beleive t
i → I
beleive → believe
t → incomplete / missing rest of sentence
Summary of Error Types
1. Grammar:
Verb errors (are study → study, are develop → develop)
Subject–verb agreement and phrasing errors
Sentence fragments (While others believe…, incomplete conclusion)
2. Vocabulary / Word Choice:
catch the study → understand the study
more benefits the edueatin → gain more benefits from education
interesting this only subject → interested in these subjects
3. Spelling:
edueatin → education
Physices → Physics
essantial → essential
beleive → believe
succesful → successful
thet → they
4. Punctuation / Spacing:
Missing spaces after commas and periods
Capitalization errors at sentence start (i, When, IT)
5. Sentence Structure / Clarity:
Awkward phrasing (most they are very benefits…, catch the study)
Run-on sentences
Incomplete ideas (To conclude, i beleive t)
it is thought by some people that student ought to more concentrate on academic subject which help them to succesful in the future, while others belive that student should persue the subject they want. In my opinion, student should choose the subject which they want to study. Because it assist them to more interested in their study.
on the one hand, some people belive it is important for student to choose subject which helpfull in the future .This is because when student choose subject like science , it assist them to get better job option in the future. Such as in the medical feild or other sector. As it enables them to get better position in the socity also improve their overall lifestyle. for example, student who are co
On the other hand , some other individuals prefard pupils ought select subject by their own preferece . Because every student have their own choice to pursue the subject they want to study . When student take their dream subject it would allow them to more concentrate in the study . As a result they enjoying the study because of that they can performed good in their exam. For instance, many people who are studied in their own prefarence they choose their career in subject related job sector.
To conclude, although many people thinks is is better for students to select the subject which better for future but i belive it is more useful for them to choose their dream subject .as it helps them to more proffeciant in the study. as a result they can be satisfied in the future.
Introduction
it is thought by some people that student ought to more concentrate on academic subject which help them to succesful in the future,
it → It (capitalization at the start of the sentence)
student → students (plural)
ought to more concentrate → ought to concentrate more
academic subject → academic subjects (plural)
which help them to succesful → which help them to be successful
while others belive that student should persue the subject they want.
belive → believe (spelling)
student → students (plural)
persue → pursue (spelling)
In my opinion, student should choose the subject which they want to study. Because it assist them to more interested in their study.
student → students (plural)
Because it assist them to more interested → because it assists them to be more interested
capitalization → “Because” should be lowercase if attached to previous sentence
Body Paragraph 1
on the one hand, some people belive it is important for student to choose subject which helpfull in the future .
on → On (capitalization)
belive → believe
student → students (plural)
subject → subjects (plural)
helpfull → helpful
space before period → remove
This is because when student choose subject like science , it assist them to get better job option in the future.
student → students (plural)
choose subject like science → choose subjects like science
it assist them → it assists them
get better job option → get better job options
space before comma → remove
Such as in the medical feild or other sector.
feild → field
Such as → For example, (sentence fragment → fix structure)
As it enables them to get better position in the socity also improve their overall lifestyle.
position → positions
socity → society
sentence structure → As it enables them to get better positions in society and also improve their overall lifestyle
for example, student who are co
for example → For example (capitalization)
student who are → students who are
co → incomplete / fragment
Body Paragraph 2
On the other hand , some other individuals prefard pupils ought select subject by their own preferece .
prefard → prefer
ought select subject → ought to select subjects
by their own preferece → according to their own preference
comma spacing → On the other hand, some other…
Because every student have their own choice to pursue the subject they want to study .
Because → remove or merge with previous sentence
student have → students have
extra space before period → remove
When student take their dream subject it would allow them to more concentrate in the study .
student → students
to more concentrate → to concentrate more
in the study → in their studies
As a result they enjoying the study because of that they can performed good in their exam.
they enjoying → they enjoy
performed good → perform well
in their exam → in their exams
sentence structure → As a result, they enjoy their studies and can perform well in their exams
For instance, many people who are studied in their own prefarence they choose their career in subject related job sector.
studied → studying
prefarence → preference
subject related job sector → subject-related job sectors
sentence structure → For instance, many people who study according to their preference choose careers in subject-related sectors
Conclusion
To conclude, although many people thinks is is better for students to select the subject which better for future but i belive it is more useful for them to choose their dream subject .
thinks is is → think it is
which better for future → which is better for the future
i belive → I believe
extra space before period → remove
as it helps them to more proffeciant in the study.
as it helps them to more proffeciant → as it helps them become more proficient
in the study → in their studies
capitalization → As it helps…
as a result they can be satisfied in the future.
as a result → As a result (capitalization)
Summary of Error Types
1. Grammar:
Subject–verb agreement (student → students, student have → students have)
Verb forms (assist → assists, enjoying → enjoy, performed → perform)
Incorrect prepositions (in the study → in their studies)
2. Vocabulary / Word Choice:
persue → pursue
prefard → prefer
proffeciant → proficient
prefarence → preference
feild → field
socity → society
3. Punctuation / Capitalization:
Missing capitalization at start of sentences
Comma placement errors
Extra spaces before periods and commas
4. Sentence Structure / Clarity:
Run-on sentences
Sentence fragments (for example, student who are co…)
Awkward phrasing (it would allow them to more concentrate in the study → it would allow them to concentrate more on their studies)
Many people think that student should read just subject that will be help for their carrer and others people think that students should be read this subject that they find enjoy . I believe that students read only study this subject that will be helpfull to their future . on the one hand , students should be study only subject that will be helpfull for their future . It will help to find a great job in their future . Students will get more knowledge if they study only subject . They will be scerious on their future and that time they will get more flowrish on their future . Students will build their own empire and they will lead a luxirious lifestyle . Students will get more important topis and they will teach to other them . Thats why the next genaration will knows how to improve their future greatly . so , its will be help to growth their future . On the other hand , students should be read this subject that they find interesting . They find willingness to study this subject thats they read this subject by enjoy . They find their happiness to read this type of saubject and they will more interested of them . Thats why they will get more knowledge and to improve their future life . In conclusion while there are some opportunites to read their this subject that they will find more interresting but if students read just only this subject thst they will help to
Many people think that student should read just subject that will be help for their carrer and others people think that students should be read this subject that they find enjoy.
Errors:
student → should be students
read just subject → incorrect structure
will be help → wrong verb form
carrer → spelling error (career)
others people → wrong phrase (other people)
be read this subject → incorrect grammar
find enjoy → wrong form (find enjoyable / enjoy)
I believe that students read only study this subject that will be helpfull to their future.
Errors:
read only study this subject → incorrect wording
helpfull → spelling (helpful)
to their future → unnatural phrase
on the one hand , students should be study only subject that will be helpfull for their future.
Errors:
on the one hand → capitalisation
be study → wrong grammar
only subject → missing plural
helpfull → spelling
It will help to find a great job in their future.
Errors:
in their future → unnecessary phrase
Students will get more knowledge if they study only subject.
Errors:
only subject → incorrect phrase; unclear meaning
Incorrect logic: studying fewer subjects does not mean more knowledge
They will be scerious on their future and that time they will get more flowrish on their future.
Errors:
scerious → spelling (serious)
serious on → wrong preposition (serious about)
flowrish → spelling (flourish)
The whole sentence is unclear and incorrect in meaning
Students will get more important topis and they will teach to other them.
Errors:
topis → spelling (topics)
important topics → unclear what you mean
teach to other them → incorrect structure
In conclusion while there are some opportunites to read their this subject that they will find more interresting but if students read just only this subject thst they will help to
Errors:
Sentence incomplete
opportunites → spelling
read their this subject → incorrect grammar
interresting → spelling
just only → redundant
thst → spelling
Missing conclusion structure
Band Score: Overall 4.5 ( No paragraphing & several errors )
it believed by some individuals that students should study only subject that will be useful for their future careers.while others aruge that they o
out be ought to be subject interesthig .
on the hand; some individulas believe it is improtent for student to choses subject which helpful in the future careers.like subject science, others are of the that should be concene about their future. because it can aid them to remain stress free and more dedication in the work.
on the other hand;students should be free to study subject they find intersting.
it believed by some individuals that students should study only subject that will be useful for their future careers.
Errors:
it believed → missing subject (It is believed)
only subject → should be plural (only subjects)
useful for their future careers → correct but could be clearer
while others aruge that they o
out be ought to be subject interesthig .
Errors:
aruge → spelling (argue)
they o out be ought to be → completely incorrect grammar
subject interesthig → should be (subjects that interest them)
Capitalisation missing after period
on the hand; some individulas believe it is improtent for student to choses subject which helpful in the future careers.
Errors:
on the hand → incorrect (On the one hand)
individulas → spelling (individuals)
importent → spelling (important)
student → plural (students)
choses → wrong form (choose)
subject → plural
which helpful → missing verb (which are helpful)
future careers → correct but repetitive
like subject science, others are of the that should be concene about their future.
Errors:
like subject science → incorrect phrasing (such as science)
others are of the that → missing words (others are of the opinion that)
concene → spelling (concerned)
should be concerned about their future → unclear reference
on the other hand;students should be free to study subject they find intersting.
Errors:
on the other hand → capitalisation
subject → plural (subjects)
intersting → spelling (interesting)
Missing space after semicolon
Grammar could be more formal
Band Score 3.5 ( No paragraphing & Incomplete )
Some individuals perceive that pupils should only this subjects that will helpful for their future careers. While others believe that students should be free to study subjects that they will be find something interesting. I believe that, pupils ought to study only subject because it can aid them to reach their goal.
One the other hand, there are many benefits when students follow only subjects. They can more focus this subject and learn many things. Therefore, students wants to build their career because they can able to their future. For e
Some individuals perceive that pupils should only this subjects that will helpful for their future careers.
Errors Highlighted:
only this subjects → ❌ wrong word + plural
will helpful → ❌ missing verb
perceive → okay, but believe fits better
While others believe that students should be free to study subjects that they will be find something interesting.
Errors Highlighted:
will be find → ❌ incorrect tense
something interesting → unnecessary phrase
Sentence structure is unnatural
I believe that, pupils ought to study only subject because it can aid them to reach their goal.
Errors Highlighted:
study only subject → ❌ missing plural
aid them to reach → slightly unnatural
Unnecessary comma after I believe that
One the other hand, there are many benefits when students follow only subjects.
Errors Highlighted:
One the other hand → ❌ wrong connector
follow only subjects → ❌ unnatural wording
only subjects → vague
Therefore, students wants to build their career because they can able to their future.
Errors Highlighted:
students wants → ❌ subject–verb disagreement
can able → ❌ cannot use can + able together
to their future → ❌ incomplete / unclear meaning
Band score 3.5 ( Incomplete and several errors )
It is thought by some individuals think that learners should study subjects that will be useful for their future careers while, believe that students choose be study subjects they find interesting. In my opinion, only students choose free to study subjects they can comfortable for their study.
Now a days education is more important .Some pupils choose free to study subjects because most of the people can not afford university tutor tree that why a lots of students can not study . For example ,public choose to their subject they can interest for their study . additionally students reed to their choose subjects they can focus their study.
On the other hand , many people believe that pupils should study only subjects that will be good careers ..The main advantages side students choose study
It is thought by some individuals think that learners should study subjects that will be useful for their future careers while, believe that students choose be study subjects they find interesting.
Errors & Explanations:
It is thought by some individuals think
❌ double subject → you used “it is thought” and “think”, which repeat the same meaning.
Correct form: “It is thought by some individuals that…” OR “Some individuals think that…”
while, believe that
❌ Missing subject after while.
❌ Incorrect comma placement.
Should be: “while others believe that…”
students choose be study
❌ Wrong word order.
❌ Wrong verb form (choose to study, not choose be study).
subjects they find interesting
This part is correct, only the beginning is wrong
In my opinion, only students choose free to study subjects they can comfortable for their study.
Errors & Explanations:
only students choose free
❌ Wrong order → only is in the wrong place.
❌ “choose free” is incorrect → should be “students should be free to choose”
subjects they can comfortable
❌ Missing verb → should be “subjects they feel comfortable with”
for their study
❌ Unnatural phrasing → grammatically correct but unnatural in English.
Now a days education is more important .Some pupils choose free to study subjects because most of the people can not afford university tutor tree that why a lots of students can not study .
Errors & Explanations:
Now a days
❌ Wrong spelling → Nowadays
education is more important .Some
❌ Missing space after period.
❌ “more important” → more important than what? Needs context.
choose free to study subjects
❌ Wrong phrase → should be “choose to study subjects freely” or “want the freedom to choose subjects”
most of the people can not afford university tutor tree
❌ tutor tree → This is incorrect English.
You likely meant tuition fees.
that why
❌ Missing is → should be “that is why”
a lots of
❌ Wrong form → “a lot of”
students can not study .
❌ Too general; unclear what they cannot study.
For example ,public choose to their subject they can interest for their study . additionally students reed to their choose subjects they can focus their study.
Errors & Explanations:
public choose to their subject
❌ “public” → wrong word; should be “students”
❌ “choose to their subject” → incorrect grammar → choose their subjects
they can interest
❌ Wrong grammar → should be “they are interested in”
additionally students reed
❌ “reed” → spelling mistake → “read”
But read is still incorrect here → choose
their choose subjects
❌ Wrong structure → should be “the subjects they choose”
they can focus their study
❌ Missing preposition → focus on their studies
On the other hand , many people believe that pupils should study only subjects that will be good careers ..The main advantages side students choose study
Errors & Explanations:
On the other hand ,
❌ Extra space before comma.
subjects that will be good careers
❌ Grammatically incorrect → subjects cannot “be” careers.
Correct: subjects that lead to good careers
..The
❌ Double period
❌ Capital letter follows incorrectly placed punctuation
The main advantages side students choose study
❌ Completely ungrammatical and unclear
Should be: “The main advantage of this view is that students can prepare for better careers.”
Errors & Explanations:
public choose to their subject
❌ “public” → wrong word; should be “students”
❌ “choose to their subject” → incorrect grammar → choose their subjects
they can interest
❌ Wrong grammar → should be “they are interested in”
additionally students reed
❌ “reed” → spelling mistake → “read”
But read is still incorrect here → choose
their choose subjects
❌ Wrong structure → should be “the subjects they choose”
they can focus their study
❌ Missing preposition → focus on their studies
Band Score 4 ( Incomplete & Several Errors )
Many people think that student should read just subject that will be help for their carrer and others people think that students should be read this subject that they find enjoy . I believe that students read only study this subject that will be helpfull to their future . on the one hand , students should be study only subject that will be helpfull for their future . It will help to find a great job in their future . Students will get more knowledge if they study only subject . They will be scerious on their future and that time they will get more flowrish on their future . Students will build their own empire and they will lead a luxirious lifestyle . Students will get more important topis and they will teach to other them . Thats why the next genaration will knows how to improve their future greatly . so , its will be help to growth their future . On the other hand , students should be read this subject that they find interesting . They find willingness to study this subject thats they read this subject by enjoy . They find their happiness to read this type of saubject and they will more interested of them . Thats why they will get more knowledge and to improve their future life . In conclusion while there are some opportunites to read their this subject that they will find more interresting but if students read just only this subject thst they will help to
It is thought by some individuals think that learners should study subjects that will be useful for their future careers while, believe that students choose be study subjects they find interesting.
Errors & Explanations:
It is thought by some individuals think
❌ Redundant verbs (“thought” + “think”)
Correction: “It is thought by some individuals that…” or “Some individuals think that…”
while, believe that students choose be study subjects
❌ Missing subject after while
❌ Wrong verb structure: “choose be study” → should be “should study”
❌ Comma after while is incorrect
Correction: “while others believe that students should study subjects…”
In my opinion, only students choose free to study subjects they can comfortable for their study.
Errors & Explanations:
only students choose free
❌ Incorrect word order; “choose free” is unnatural
✅ Correction: “students should be free to choose…”
subjects they can comfortable
❌ Wrong form; “comfortable” → needs verb: “feel comfortable with”
✅ Correction: “subjects they feel comfortable studying”
for their study
❌ Awkward phrasing → redundant after “comfortable studying”
Now a days education is more important .Some pupils choose free to study subjects because most of the people can not afford university tutor tree that why a lots of students can not study .
Errors & Explanations:
Now a days → ❌ Spelling: Nowadays
education is more important → ❌ Comparative without reference; unnatural → “education is very important”
.Some → ❌ Missing space after period
choose free to study subjects → ❌ Incorrect phrasing → “want the freedom to choose subjects”
most of the people can not afford university tutor tree → ❌ “tutor tree” is meaningless; should be tuition fees
that why a lots of students can not study → ❌ Missing is: “that is why”; ❌ “a lots” → a lot; ❌ “can not study” → unnatural
For example ,public choose to their subject they can interest for their study . additionally students reed to their choose subjects they can focus their study.
Errors & Explanations:
public choose to their subject → ❌ Wrong word → should be students choose their subjects
they can interest → ❌ Wrong verb; should be they are interested in
additionally students reed → ❌ “reed” → spelling error → read or better: choose
their choose subjects → ❌ Wrong grammar → the subjects they choose
they can focus their study → ❌ Missing preposition → focus on their studies
On the other hand , many people believe that pupils should study only subjects that will be good careers ..The main advantages side students choose study
Errors & Explanations:
On the other hand , → ❌ Extra space before comma
subjects that will be good careers → ❌ Grammatically wrong → should be subjects that lead to good careers
..The → ❌ Double period + wrong capitalization
The main advantages side students choose study → ❌ Unclear, ungrammatical → The main advantage of this view is that students can prepare for better careers
Band score is 4.5 ( No paragraphing & Multiple mistakes )
It is thought by some individuals think that learners should study subjects that will be useful for their future careers while, believe that students choose be study subjects they find interesting.
Errors & Explanations:
It is thought by some individuals think
❌ Redundant verbs (“thought” + “think”)
Correction: “It is thought by some individuals that…” or “Some individuals think that…”
while, believe that students choose be study subjects
❌ Missing subject after while
❌ Wrong verb structure: “choose be study” → should be “should study”
❌ Comma after while is incorrect
Correction: “while others believe that students should study subjects…”
In my opinion, only students choose free to study subjects they can comfortable for their study.
Errors & Explanations:
only students choose free
❌ Incorrect word order; “choose free” is unnatural
✅ Correction: “students should be free to choose…”
subjects they can comfortable
❌ Wrong form; “comfortable” → needs verb: “feel comfortable with”
✅ Correction: “subjects they feel comfortable studying”
for their study
❌ Awkward phrasing → redundant after “comfortable studying”
Now a days education is more important .Some pupils choose free to study subjects because most of the people can not afford university tutor tree that why a lots of students can not study .
Errors & Explanations:
Now a days → ❌ Spelling: Nowadays
education is more important → ❌ Comparative without reference; unnatural → “education is very important”
.Some → ❌ Missing space after period
choose free to study subjects → ❌ Incorrect phrasing → “want the freedom to choose subjects”
most of the people can not afford university tutor tree → ❌ “tutor tree” is meaningless; should be tuition fees
that why a lots of students can not study → ❌ Missing is: “that is why”; ❌ “a lots” → a lot; ❌ “can not study” → unnatural
For example ,public choose to their subject they can interest for their study . additionally students reed to their choose subjects they can focus their study.
Errors & Explanations:
public choose to their subject → ❌ Wrong word → should be students choose their subjects
they can interest → ❌ Wrong verb; should be they are interested in
additionally students reed → ❌ “reed” → spelling error → read or better: choose
their choose subjects → ❌ Wrong grammar → the subjects they choose
they can focus their study → ❌ Missing preposition → focus on their studies
On the other hand , many people believe that pupils should study only subjects that will be good careers ..The main advantages side students choose study
Errors & Explanations:
On the other hand , → ❌ Extra space before comma
subjects that will be good careers → ❌ Grammatically wrong → should be subjects that lead to good careers
..The → ❌ Double period + wrong capitalization
The main advantages side students choose study → ❌ Unclear, ungrammatical → The main advantage of this view is that students can prepare for better careers
Band score is 4.5 ( No paragraphing & Multiple mistakes )