Some people think the manufacturers and shopping malls should sell fewer packaged products while others argue that people have the responsibility to buy products with less packaging.
Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
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Many people believe that the manufactures and shopping malls sell fewer packaged products. On the other hand, others people argue that the persons have the responsibility to buy products with less packaging. I consider that people should buy products with less packaging. Because packaging products made by plastics those polluted our environment.
First of all, in our countries market all kinds of products are packaged. Mainly, products packaged by plastic which is very harmful for our nature. Plastic causes many pollution. For this reason people suffer in many diseases and worries. Moreover, to solve this problem most people argue that the manufactures and shopping malls should launch less packaged products in market. They also think that manufacturers and shopping malls may produced less packaged product. As a result, the society will rescue from this problem. If the companies supply less packaged products, people will saved from this issues. Plastic causes air, soil which create many diseases such as, cancer, breathing problem etc. By polluted soil, the agriculture are mostly affected. For this reason, the farming percent are reduced day by day. That’s why people believe that by companies awareness , the society will rescue from all kinds of problems.
On the contrary, Some of people said that people have the responsibility to buy products with less packaging. I also believed that if people aware of buying those products which are packaged the n that will be effective. When people don’t buy packaged product , the companies will produced less packaged product. Persons awareness is most essential. However, the companies produced product by customers demand. So all of this rely on the people. When people stopped buy the packaged product , companies will stop produced this.
To sum up, people should aware of the society. People should concern about the impact of packaged product which is made by plastic. Persons awareness and steps are more essential than anything. However, the companies also should concern about the impact of plastic and they should sell less packaged product.
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#packaging products made by plastics those polluted our environment – packaged products made of plastic pollute the environment
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#market all kinds of products are packaged – most products are packaged
#plastic causes many pollution – plastic causes a lot of pollution
#people suffer in many diseases – people suffer from many diseases
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#the society will rescue from this problem – unclear
#people will saved from this issues – people will be saved from these issues
#Plastic causes air, soil which create many diseases – Plastic pollutes the air and soil, which creates many diseases
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#I also believed – I also believe
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BAND – 5.5
Although it is believed by some individuals that the manufacturers and shopping malls ought to sell fewer packaged products, another group believe that people have the responsibility to buy products with less packaging. I think shopping malls and manufacturers should produce less packaging which is made by plastic.
On the one hand, many people believe that shopping centers and companies hold greater responsibility because they can control production and distribution process. Manufacturers often utilize excessive packaging which is detrimental for environment. I believe if manufacturers produce less plastic based cover, It will helps to build eco-friendly environment.
On the other hand, some argued that customers play a crucial role. when customer choose products with minimal packaging, companies would focused it.
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BAND – 4.5
it is believed by some individuals that the manufacturers and shopping malls ought to sell fewer packaged products, another group believe that people have the responsibility to buy products with less packaging. I think,
on the on hand, many people claim that companies and shopping centers hold greater responsibility because they control the productions and distribution progresses. manufacturers often use excessive packing to make products.
one the other hand, some argue that consumers also play a crucial role. when customers actively choose products with minimal packing, companies are forced.
in my opinion, both sides share equal responsibility. but the primary burden lies with manufacturers. They have the power to make large
scale changes, invest in sustebile packaging and reduace more manufacturers .
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#on the on hand, many people claim that companies and shopping centers hold greater – I think, companies and shopping centers hold greater
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BAND – 3.5
Many individuals are think that selling fewer packaged products should do in manufactures and shopping malls, other think it’s the individual responsibility to buy less packing of this type of products. I will prefer to shopping malls because they can control it if they sell fewer the packaged products.
on the one hand side, I’m agree with that, the manufacturers and shopping malls make this type packaged products. It’s published by them, if they start to make the alternative product it can be decrease the use of packaged product. From the manufacturers and shopping malls it is easy to serve to people hand. manufacturers and shopping malls should sell fewer this type of product. packaged products are not good for the soil and natural, if we can not control, it could be harmful for us in future As a example, in China, they make a city where hundred percent packaging free area. I believe that the manufacturers and shopping malls can do it very easily.
One the other hand side, some people believe that it is everyone responsibility to careful to buying packaging products. If individual use the alternative way for this, it could be decrease very soon. Every need to make sure that they did not buy this, if it need must they will buy fewer.
However, everyone need use less this type of product. The manufacturers and shopping malls are vest way to dropping this .
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#Many individuals are think – Many individuals think
#selling fewer packaged products should do in manufactures and shopping malls – manufacturers and shopping malls should sell fewer packaged products
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#to buy less packing of this type of products – to buy products with less packaging
#I will prefer to shopping malls – avoid personal preference
#As a example – For example
#they make a city where hundred percent packaging free area – unclear
#it is everyone responsibility to careful to buying packaging products – it is everyone’s responsibility to be careful when buying packaged products
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BAND – 4.0
Although it is believed by some individuals that manufacturers and shopping malls ought to sell fewer packaged,others argue that populace have responsible to buy products with less packaging.I think that people have aware to buy packaging products because if individuals start using less packaged products such as plastic products it would be advantageous for both environment and economy.
On the one hand, it is thought by many people that manufacturers and shopping malls are mainly responsible for using more packaged products because it is a way to get profit faster and they find it as a easy way to make a lot of product by using this technique. Moreover, plastic products are using by a large number of people and so that they prefer making this kind of products more and more. If the manufacturers stop producing plastic packaged and start create and promote alternatives it will be beneficial for people .furthermore,
the company which sell row materials,if they increase the price of the products ,it will be a good step to stop packaged products.
On the other hand, if the people start using alternatives like package made jute it will be a better option rather then plastic.
In conclusion,despite many people think manufacturers are could stop using packaged products,i think that individuak
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#populace have responsible – people are responsible
#people have aware to buy packaging – people needs to be aware while buying
#start create and promote alternatives – start creating and promoting alternatives
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BAND – 5.5
Many individuals believed hat packaged products should be sold fewer by the manufacturers and shopping malls, in contrast, other people dispute that it is necessary for people’s responsibilities when buying products with less packaging. in my opinion, I entierly agree with the belife that we should buy products which are less packaging for several reason and also discuss both.
There are many posibility that make the shopping by using malls or manufacturers selling fewer packaged products.The main issue is that big impact on the environment . This can lead to many disasters such as brought by using nylon or plastic to package products. this is why many people think about the idea that package products should be should less by the manufacturers. Furthermore, reduce using these plastic thing can cause more carbon dioxide ad also increasing the amount of greenhouse gases which can effect harmful to the environment.
On the other hand, these problem is not just cause by manufacturers or shopping malls but also by human. The first ISSUE
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BAND – 4.0
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#This can lead to many disasters such as brought by using nylon or plastic to package products – This can lead to many disasters caused by using nylon or plastic to package products
#reduce using these plastic thing can cause more carbon dioxide ad also increasing the amount of greenhouse gases which can effect harmful to the environment – unclear
BAND – 4.5
A number of individuals argue that the manufactures and shopping mall should limited plastic products sell, another group believe that limited buying the plastic products. I believe, it is true that responsibility to buy products with less packaging.
There are a number of reason that why packaging malls fewer stop. One possible reason is that plastic is strongly effect our environment. Because plastic not damaged, so it is effective in society. Thus, should be ignore every time manufacturers in market products. Another reason is that many plastic inside moving in chemicals. However, it is very bad for people health. Because chemicals are not allow for people eat and many fruits are packaged plastic. Finally, it is not allow for every products manufacturing and it is ignore all of the market.
Despite another group feel that people are use less in the packaging products. Firstly, if we are not use this plastic, so slowly decrease this plastic manufacturing products. Because too much buy anyone products, markets are easily provide and sell this things. Secondly, plastic are using easily, but it is too much effect in society. So we are ignore all off plastic.
In conclusion, plastic using easily so many people useless are reducing in people but it is too muc
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#should limited – should limit
#There are a number of reason that why packaging malls fewer stop – There are a number of reasons why packaging malls produce fewer packaged goods
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BAND – 4.0
Many individuals that packaged product should be sold fewer by the manufactures and shopping malls ,in contrast ,other people dispute that it is necessary for people’s responsibilities when buying products with less packaging .In my opinion ,I agree with the belief that we should by products which are less packaging for several reason.
There are wide range of reason manufacture and shopping mall ,shopping by using malls or manufactures selling fewer packaged products.This can lead to many disasters such
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BAND – 2.0
It is thought by some individuals that the craftsman and shopping malls ought to sell less number of packaging goods, however, another group believe that people should become more responsible to purchase few amount of packaging products. In my perspective, I think that people have the responsibility to buy packaging goods because it may help to reduce our environment pollution as well as it will play a vital role in economics.
On the one hand, if the manufacturers and commercial markets produce less number of packaging elements, people can purchase their needy products without any difficulty, which is being more efficient to buy goods perfectly. A recent survey, which has carried out by BTCL, showed that 65% of shopping mall in China they prefer to sell their products without packaging, rising their customers day by day. Moreover, if craftsman produce fewer packaged goods, they can save their money, and they can focus their time on another work.
On the other hand, some people argue that people should give more focus to purchase goods with few packaging, and I argue with that because it
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# people have the responsibility to buy packaging goods – people have the responsibility to buy less packaged goods
#reduce our environment pollution – reduce environmental pollution
#if the manufacturers and commercial markets produce less number of packaging elements –
if manufacturers and commercial markets produce fewer packaging materials
#which is being more efficient to buy goods perfectly –
which makes purchasing goods more efficient
#they prefer to sell their products without packaging –
prefer to sell their products without packaging
#rising their customers day by day – rising/increasing the customers number day by day
BAND – 4.5
Many individuals opine that exchange small packaged items in the manufacturers and shopping mall, on the other hand, it is believed by others that it is the best process to purchase products with lower packaging. Both of their perspective will be narrated in the subsequent paragraphs and I will be supporting the former viewpoint because producing plastics are very harmful for effect in our modern society.
On the one hand, shopping malls always sell their product by plastics bag and other creative box. The main reason is that producing that items are very less expensive and the shop owner always choice this manufacture. For example, in the modern years some companies right now create the harmful items and it is bad effect can destruct our not only healthy body but also for our mind. Therefore, every classes of people should step to stop this problem.
On the other hand, consumer always choice product quality not the quantity. So, packing problem not effect customer system. For instance, some one buy a expensive jersey for a luxurious shop and they can not prefer for its packing. They always choice best products quality.
To sum up, administration should take control of producing harmful plastics such as bag and box. Hence, individuals also should avoid this creative items. Then, we are create a ne modern society and happiness life but some people dis use this.
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#exchange small packaged items in the manufacturers and shopping mall – manufacturers and shopping malls should reduce the sale of packaged products.
#it is the best process to purchase – unclear
#sell their product by plastics bag and other creative box – sell their products using plastic bags and other boxes
#producing that items are very less expensive – producing those items is very inexpensive
#create the harmful items – produce harmful items
#some one buy a expensive jersey – if someone buys an expensive jersey
#for a luxurious shop – from a luxury shop
BAND – 4.0
Many people want that the manufacturers and shopping malls should sell fewer package while, other people want people have the responsibility to buy products with less packaging. I think people have the responsibility to buy products with less packaging. Because when people start stop buying product with packaging, than manufacturers and shopping malls are automateiclly drop market on this product.
On the one hand, I believe that the manufacturers and shopping malls if they start selling fewer packaged products. It must be help too reduce the use of plastic. The reason is when company stop producing any product, people would easily forget about it and finding some alternative. At the first it create some problem because people are use to of carry it, and it’s very cheaper than any kind of bags. Maybe shops will drop few customer but it is not a big fact.
On the other hand, when customer stop buying packaging product, manufacturers and shopping malls drop customer. It will bad effect on their market. So they will start using alternative thing that can replace packaging. but it though because you can not explain everyone to stop buying.
To sum up, if they are successful to stop buying product. It is very helpful for our nature and our up comming genaration.
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#then manufacturers and shopping malls are automateiclly drop market on this product – then manufacturers and shopping malls will automatically drop these products from the market
#I believe that the manufacturers and shopping malls if they start selling fewer packaged products – I believe that if manufacturers and shopping malls start selling fewer packaged products
#It must be help too reduce the use of plastic – It will help reduce the use of plastic
#when company stop producing any product – when a company stops producing a product
#it create some problem – it may create some problems
people are use to of carry it – people are used to carrying it
it’s very cheaper than any kind of bags – it is much cheaper than other types of bags
#shops will drop few customer – shops will lose a few customers
#it is not a big fact – it is not a serious issue
#up comming – upcoming
BAND – 4.0
There are some individuals they argue about the manufacturers and shopping malls should sell fewer packaged while others thought people have the responsibility to buy products with less packaging. Although, I believe that the manufacturers and shopping malls should sell fewer packaged because if they will not sell packaged products people will not buy it. As well as it will help society to understand the value of less packaging.
First of all , people know that the packing products are harmful for our society , because in our country the manufacturers and shopping malls sell plastic packings. Though, the plastic has most side effects , which can harm our health as well as our environment. People suffers from many diseases such as infections, cancer and so on. It can damage lungs also. Moreover, to solve this problem , the shopping malls and the manufacturers should sell fewer packaged products so that the problems will reduce .
On the other hand , people have responsibility to buy products with less packaging. Because people also do many things with plastics that harms our environment. Such as for this problem farmers are damaged much . People fell plastic on the lands and for this the chemical from the plastic harms the land . Farmer could not able to grow crop in those land. To reduce the problem , people should aware of using plastics. However, Government also responsible for the plastic usage that harm our environment.
In conclusion , To reduce the problem, people should aware about using the plastics . Although, I think that the shopping malls should sell fewer package products because if they will not supply the package products , people will not buy the products.
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#sell fewer packaged – sell fewer packaged products
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#Though, the plastic has most side effects – Plastic has many side effects
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#people should aware about using the plastics – people should be aware of using plastic
#Because people also do many things with plastics that harms our environment. Such as – Because people also do many things with plastics that harms our environment, such as
BAND – 4.5
It is believed by some individuals that the seller should sell fewer packaged products. On the other hand, most of the individuals though that we have the responsibility to by product with less plastic covered. I believe it is people’s duty to buy product with less packaging than preferring to buy product with more packaged because the goods with less plastic consume less cost, even its more environment friendly compared than product with huge plastic cover as well as less packaging reduce bearing cost.
On the one hand, product manufacturers and shopping malls always sell there product with more cover made with plastic. According there opinion, if they sell more packaged product , it might be helpful because this way there goods became long lasting and do not damaged towards product. Again more packaged product drew more attention of customers and help to sell more product. On the other hand, another aware group argued
To conclude, in spite of having some facilities of selling fewer packaging such as it is more secure for our goods, it looks more organized and attract consumers as well as it maintain quality of our product specially individuals meal package, I believe, every individuals should purchase necessary goods with less packaged as it is more cost friendly, easy to destroy plastic package and so on. That is why some individuals prefer goods with less plastic cover.
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BAND – 4.0
Although, it is believed by many individuals that, manufactures and shopping malls ought to sell some packaged, however, other argue that individuals have the responsibility to parches products with low packaging. I think, people should aware to buy a packaged product because if individuals start using low packaged product it will be dangerous for both.
On the one hand, many people thought manufactures and shopping malls are mainly responsible for using packaged product because it is way to earn more profit and easy way to make product more and more. Moreover, different kinds of products such as plastics are using a large number of people and they prefer making this kinds of products more. However, manufacturing stop producing plastic package and start using updated way its better for them
On the other hand, some people have the responsibility to products with less packaging. If they use alternative materials this is better option rather than plastic and this is very unique
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BAND – 3.5
Although it is believed by many individuals that, manufacturers and shopping malls ought to sell some packaged, however, other argue that individuals have the responsibility to parches products with low packaging. I think people have to buy a packaging products because if individuals start using low packaged materials it’s would be advantage for both sides.
One the one hand, many people thought manufacturers and shopping malls are mainly responsible for using more packaged products because it is a way to get profit faster and it’s easy way to make a lot of products by using this way . Moreover, different kind of products such as plastic are using a large number of people and they prefer making this kind of products more and more. If the manufacturers stop producing plastic packaged and start make the alternative way its better for them.
On the other hand, some people argued that the responsible to parches materials are low packaged .If they use alternative materials this is better option rather then plastic. and this is vaey uniqe packaged products.
To sum up, despite many people think manufacture and shopping malls both side is better.
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BAND – 3.5
Although some people believed that manufacturers and shopping shopping malls should reduce the number of packaged products they sell. while some people thet excessive packaging harms the envarontment and encouragges waste,
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BAND – 1.5
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However, the packagaing people the most cry on , it is agood ideas in the the responsibility.if can the packaging are importent moment cry the beg .I most soppurt the shoping malls sell fewer prockaging products .consequently it promotes ar most importent part.
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BAND – 3.0