Some people think that shops should not be allowed to sell food or drinks that are scientifically proven to be bad for people’s health.
Do you agree or disagree?
Write at least 250 words.
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Some people think that shops should not be allowed to sell food or drinks that are scientifically proven to be bad for people’s health.
Do you agree or disagree?
Write at least 250 words.
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The selling of food and drinks that are not scientifically proven good for human’s health it would be a thread for future generation. It is thought by some individuals that shops should not be allowed to sell food or drinks that are scientifically proven to be not good for people’s health. I agree with this thought, but it need more restriction from authorities.
The process food and drinks are common food in every nations. Every individuals known about that are not good for healthy life because of they contain much oil, sugar, and salt. As a result, it will causes for heart, Liver and stomach disease. Some of popular super shop always keep this type of food and market it a gradual way, it helps to find peoples and addict to more on that. But those shop not concern about how much harmful this food and drinks for population. they do not keep eyes on that this are scientifically proven bad for people’s health. That is the reason majority people want to that shops should not allowed to sell this type of food and drink. Shops should keep the food which completely scientifically proven good and not much harmful for human’s health.
Some of shops never stop allowing this food and drink if not authorities take any action. In instance, if they o not take any action about those companies of selling food and drink they take place of every super shop and those shop will market like it run everywhere, so everyone will curious on that and buy more and more, whereas they o not concern about how much fat and salt it contains. Authorities should investigate and appeal a legal restriction for using their ingredients on those harmful food and drink, and legally noticed a ingredients list, that will concern all shop to not allow any food that scientifically proven bad for people’s health. It will much better ideas for improve health system from such this type of food and drink.
In conclusion, I totally agree with some individuals thought, but it need to more strict law notice, cause human’s health is first priority.
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# it helps to find peoples and addict to more on that. But those shop not concern about how much harmful this food and drinks for population – unclear
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BAND – 5.5
Nowadays, many people are concerned about the increasing number of unhealthy food and drinks available in the market. Some people believe that shops should be banned from selling such products because they are harmful to health. I partly agree with this view because although these items can cause health issues, banning them completely may not be the best solution.
On the one hand, it is true that unhealthy such as sugary snacks, soft drinks and fast food, can lead to serious health issues like obesity and diabetes. Many studies have shown that consuming such products regularly is dangerous for our body. If the government stops shops from selling them, people will be encouraged to eat healthier food. This can improve public health and reduce the number of diseases related to poor diet.
On the other hand, banning these products completely is not practical. People should have the freedom to choose what they want to eat and drink. Instead of banning , the government can introduce stricter regulations such as adding health warning on packaging or increasing taxes on junk food. Moreover, education about healthy lifestyle can help people and they can able to take suitable decision about their health.
To conclude, its ones personal choice to what they want to eat and drink and how they can balance their lifestyle, so in that case banning to sell food and drinks are not best idea. A better solution would be to educate people and control the sale through awareness and government policies.
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BAND 6.0
Some people thing believe that, shores should not be allowed to sell food and drinks that are scientifically proven to be not good for people’s health. In the my opinion there.
On the one hand, Some people believe that shores should not be to sell food and drinks that scientific, while they are not healthily food. This food is very common product in many countries. Especially, Asia side of this product sells for their demand. For example, the young generation are mostly drinks this attracted. Drink is very bad habit. They many drink our health demisted.
On the other hand, Not healthily food or drinks proven to be bad for people’s health. I agree this. Many food use to medicine and damage vitamin. Over drinks our health damaged. Now days, every younger people drinks.
To conclude, I think shops not allowed to sell unhealthily food or drinks product not allowed.
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BAND – 3.5
Many individuals say that the store should not sell food and drinks that are gradually proved to bed for individuals health. I agree that but I think it is not solution this problem, because they have many others way solution for this.
On the one hand, shops should do not sell food or drinks, their are have many reason, Firstly, it very dangerous for human health because this food have many sugar, fat, so on. It just make testy but it not any good things. Such as burger, pizza, it look like beautiful but it have so fat. Moreover, drinks are harmful for human health, it have so many sugar. A resent research find in the United Kingdom to 10% people eat this food and drinks, they through obese. So, it is do not prefer any shops this food and drinks.
On the other hand, I think people have another way protect this problem. They have many way. First, people should control eat this type of food and drinks, when they have lead a better health and they stay fit. Second, the government ought to increased the vet on this type of foods and drinks while people do not bought it. For example In France government growth vet this product, people do not bought this products.
In conclusion, I agree this reason but I think people protect this issue another way, and they should avoid this food and drinks, they lives a better life with a good fitness and fresh mind and body. So, it is important.
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BAND – 4.0
Many individuals believe that, stores should not sell food and drinks that scientifically proved that its not good for health. I agree but I think that it is not solution this problem because another way to solve this problem.
on the one hand, it is thought that This food is very common product in many countries. especially, Asia side of this product sells for their demand. for example, the young generation are mostly drinks this attracted. They drinks many times specially when it was sunny season. its found different shops as likes general store or many supermarket. moreover, its so many sugar so people may addicted they dont know about its effect.
On the other hand, scientist researched about this drinks they found that , its a drink people who eat or drink they are effected many diseases. For example, young people damage their heart so easily as they didnt know. firstly, people should aware about this soft drinks. secondly, we should know about people it causes many critical diseases. finally, we can action necessary steps to do about this products.
In conclusion, I believe that, people should more awarness about this issue
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BAND – 3.5
It is common that shops are usually sells food and drinks to the customers in every possible countries, while some people thought that food and drinks could be harmful for people, and shops should not be allowed to sell those products. I totally disagree with this opinion.
To begin with, food and drinks are daily need of people, without these people can’t survive and they going through lack of energy. As a result, they could be die, because of not getting any food or drinks to consume. In addition, shops are allowed to run when they have food safety licence, so shop owners are aware about unhealthy food and drinks, which may not allowed in their shops by themselves. For instance, there are no chance to sell products which may contain danger. A recent survey of BBC news, where they survey all products of more than 100 shops in the USA, surprisingly they found none of any products which might be a reason for bad health of peoples.
Moreover, if shops are closed and burden to sell products, it may brings some drawbacks and could affects the country’s economy. Firstly, there are huge employment rates in shops or supermarket. If those shops are closed, lots of employees loose their job, as a result it could be drawback for the country’s economy. A news has been published recently, shown that 30% citizens from Denmark, who work in shops or supermarket for living, and it is the top rated job compared to other jobs.
In conclusion, Although it is thought that food and drinks sold by shops are unhealthy for people, which is scientifically proven, but I disagree with this statement.
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BAND – 5.5
Many individuals say that store should not be sell food and drinks that scientifically proven to be not good for people health. I agree but i think it is not solution this problem, because others way have solution for this.
On the one hand, process food drinks are common food in every nation. Firstly it was very dangerous for human health because this food very sugar and salt. Some super shop always keep type this food and market it gradual way. It helps to find people and addicted more this food. it just testy but this food is not good for our health. Such as burger, pizza this look like very testy but so fat. Moreover drinks for human health, it so many sugar. That is reason majority people want to that shop should not allowed to sell this type food,which scientifically proven bad for people health.
On the other hand, people think really have another way this type of food. People should control this type of first food and drinks. when they have better health and they stay fit. For example young people damage their health their heart damage so easily.Firstly people avoid this type of food,Secondly we should know about people its cause many critical for health. people do not brought this product.
In conclusion, I agree but i think people protect this issue, So strongly agree with hygienic stoop this food.
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# I agree but i think it is not solution this problem, because others way have solution for this – question did not asked for solution
#Firstly it was – Firstly(,) it is
#It helps to find people and addicted more this food – unclear
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BAND – 4.0
Some individual believe that shops should not be allowed sell food or drinks that are scientifically proven to bad for peoples health. In my opinion. I completely agree with the argument because it is not a good for health. It created many disease in peoples.
One the one hand, shops should not be allowded to sell food or drink beacause shops food are very affective for human. Although, it is very delisious it is dangerous for peoples. This type of food uses unhealthy product such as formalin, uncleaned water. It is created many diseases, day by day this food and drink created different type of virus. Pizza, burgure, out side street food and drink shopes should stop sell this food. For example, in Bangladesh people are not a healthy. Every years this countris people dead ratio is 70% beacause un hygenic food and deletaries drink created dangerous disease.
Moreover, I think shops should not be allowed to sell food drinks that are scientifically proven to be bad for peoples health but peoples have a should be resposible for food and water. When they buy a food and drink they should investicate that. Furthermore, government ought to created difficult law for shops. When it created people leave this shops and shopkeaper going others work. People should eating orginal food and avoid alcohol.
In conclusion, hygenic food and drink are most important for human health, so, I strongly agree with stop un hygenic shopes. Every people and government ought to responsivility for eating food and water. Eating fresh food and evoid alcohol drink.
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BAND – 5.0
Some argue that shops should not be allowed to sell food or drinks which don’t have any scientific proven certificate. I completely agree that. There are so many terms that are not followed by some shops, so their process of manufacturing food is too unhealthy most of the time.
On the one hand, some people believe that drinks are very harmful for our health. The process of manufacturing food or drinks are too unhealthy in most of the case. If anyone continue eating these types of food which may lead to danger. There are so many issues in shops kitchen which we can’t observe from outside. Nowadays, people are fully dependent on the processed food which can’t be a good choice.
On the other hand, These contains many kinds of diseases like cholesterol, heart disease and make us unfit. This can also bring laziness. There are so many restaurants and street stalls, a lot of people visit these shops everyday. Processed food or drinks have a bad impact on human life. In my opinion, government should take steps to maintain the hygienic issues and fix them. One of the most common thing is public awareness.
In conclusion,
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BAND – 4.0
It is argued by few individuals that people will be affected various disorders if they purchase food or drinks from local shops. I completely disagree with this notion and beleive that discourging people to buy local food may create unemployment in socities and believe that local seller ensure the hygenic of foods.
One of the main reasons how purchasing groceries hold significant impact for retreating unemployment rate of any nations. For example, countries majority of people lead their lives by openning small businesses when they cannot involve with a goverment job after completing graduate. Consequently, they look forward to be an entreprenure with openning small shops, whereas they sell daily accosories din order to earning money. If local people do not purchase iteams, local sellers face challenging to maintain balanced life and coutries economy may reduce. Therefore, individuals ought to purchase product from shop by observing.
Moreover, people could be affected disorders when shopkeaper do not maintain product quality. According to a recent survey, various small areas in India, communities have affected serious disorders due to rotten food resulting in increase children morality rate. Thus, local shopowners justify about the food quality and recycled it before selling, while buyers should follow the hygenic of goods.
In conclusion, Individual ought to be concerned about local foods before purchasing, while seller ensures the food quality by recycling that mitigate the negative consequences of selling goods. So, I believe that shop should allow to sell food or drinks because of thriving economy of countries.
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BAND – 4.0
Many individual’s believe that, shops should not be allowed to sell food or drinks because it’s not good for people health. I agree that, but that is not the main reason.
On the one hand, Food and drinks are the common product around the world. The young generation is also attachment to food and drinks. Drinks are very bad for human body. When someone drinks everyday they also causes many, it also damage human body.
On other hand, some people believe that selling food that is the main reason. When the shop owner selling bad food or drinks it also causes people. If shop owner selling good food but people eat it regularly people also causes for this. Government also should take step for this shop owner. Shop owner should selling the fresh food and drinks because people cannot causes for the shop owner.
In conclusion, Everyone also take fresh food and drinks.
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BAND – 3.5
It is argued by minor group people that shops should not have the right to sell food or drinks, which are scientifically proven to cause help issues to consumer. I agree with the thought that the products which damage people’s health should be restricted in supermarkets from selling because if the these products consumed in a huge quantity, that can cause death and the person’s life can be fully destroyed.
Majority of the people think that selling foods which cause health issues to people are not alarming, and there will be no such massive consequence of it. But it is not entirely correct because a recent survey in the UK has showed that the most of the people who are facing health problems are directly victim of these unhealthy products. Therefore, I truly agree with the group of people, and the authority should also be cautious about that and take actions against it.
However, it has also some drawbacks, which is not that much concerning. firstly, if these shops get restricted to sell unhealthy products, the country would face some economical crises because most of the shops sell these products for extra profit. The companies who manufacture these products give massive benefit to the shopkeepers to sell their products. So it is also a concerning matter, and the authority should take actions about it.
In conclusion, although these products are important for countries economy, but I think this has a lot of drawbacks. So, I agree with the minority people.
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BAND – 5.5