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The table below gives data on the hour of leisure time per year for people in Someland.
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The table shows information about the duration of time on free time in Someland in six categories.
Overall, the citizens of this nation spends most of the time in watching videos on TV. In the contrary, people of 60s or above has less interest in group exercise or sports whereas, people are less involved in socializing among all categories in the given table.
In terms of watching TV, teens and old aged people are more familiar with it with the amount of 1200 and 1100 respectively, while, 30s are not interested on it. However, 30s and 40s are more active in doing individual exercises. Teens are more frequent in watching cinema with holding the amount of 100 hours per year whereas, 20s and 70s are followed by them by the amount of 25 separately.
In terms of socializing with 4 or less people, 30s are the best as they carry about 300 hours per year, whereas, 40s and 50s are followed by them with the quantity of 50 separately. When comes to socializing with 4 or up, 20s and teens are in the top in list as they spends 350 hours each in a year. In contrast, people of 50s and above are doing less interaction with other people with the less amount of hours which is only 25 hours.
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The table shows the data about the hours of spare time for individuals in Someland per year.
It is evident that the teens and 70s+ people use their the most of free time to enjoy watching TV or videos, while other ages group use their leisure time on focusing other things such as socialising and exercise, along with enjoying Tv and videos.
Regarding teens and 70s+ people, they prefer watching TV and videos with their free time, which is between 1100 and 1200 hours.Conversely, teens like to spend least amount of time in cinema(100 hours), where only 75 hours are spent by individuals who are older than 70 years. .On the other hand, teens tend to socialise with four or more people, where only fewer make friends who are older then 70 years. 70s+ people usually do not exercise with group at all, rather they exercise alone, while teens exercise by both alone and with group, at around 150 and 450 hours, respectively.
In terms of people aged between 20s and 60s, also like to watch TV and videos, ranging between 400 and 700 hours, where they spend less spare time in cinema.However, 20s people focus more on exercise when they have free time, where 50s together with 60s normally do not engage in exercising. In addition, all of these aged people use their free to socialise with fewer than 4 or 4 people, when they spend less time on socialising with more than 4 people.
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The table provide the data on the hours of free time per year for people in Someland.
Overall,both teens and 70s+ ages people are passing their free by watching TV or videos on the other hand the people of 60 and 70 ages, they do not passes their time by exercise.
In term of teens , they reserved the leading position among other with watching tv or videos in their free time as the number is 1200 and this figure is followed by 70s people in their leisure time as 1100. However, 20s and 60s people are the 2nd highest number of people who are mainly passing their time by the same way and this figure is 700.
Regarding the people of 60 and 70 ages , they are not doing excercise while they are similar for doing socialising with 4 or more people as same as 50 ages as only 25. On the contrary, 40, 50 ages people are passing their free time by enjoying cinema as same number
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The table compares the information on the hour of free time per year for people in Someland.
Overall, it is clear that the highest number of people are watching tv and videos compared to other categories ,however, the lowest number of people are watching cinema.
In terms of watching TV/ videos , teens spend their leisure hours (1200) more than other age group people , where 70 age group follow to the same trend .The lowest number of 30 age group people spend their free time 400 hours to watch TV or videos. Regarding cinema higher number of people are teens whereas lower number people age are 40 and 50 to spend their free time .
Looking at the graph more details , individual exercise category 30 and 40 age people spend their more
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The table chart compares gives information on the hour of leisure time per year for people in Someland.
Overall, watching TV was greater most demandable was Teens than others people , while the lowest in socialising with 4 or more people , however, watching TV was the highest.
In terms of watching TV, was the most popular Teens 1200 hours, while, 30s leisure was the lowest at 400 hours on this , however, socialising with 4 or more people spent hour was 30s leisure time . 350 hour spent on socialising with 4 or more people Teens ans 20s was same.
On the other hand, Individual exercise 30s and 40s was at 200 hour it was same, while, group exercise was highly demandable in Teens than cinema, however, 70s was lowest in this and 40s and 50s is middle hour spent in people.
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The table chart comperes the people in Someland passed their leisure time per year.
Overall, not only teens but also 70s+ peoples also pass their highest tine on watching tv/videos. In socialising with 4 or less people 20s people pass their time less. Socialising with 4 or more 50s-60s-70s ages people spend their less time. Cinema is more popular for Teens .
In terms of watching tv or videos teens spend must time at 1200hours ,and 70s+ ager people are in the 2nd position on it. Socialising with 4 or less people 30s ager are interested at 300 hours. Socialising with 4 or more people teens are first, and 50s-60s-70s are at same rate at 25 hours.
On the other hand , resprct of Individual exercise 30s-40s people is in same level at 200 hour and they are more interested on it. 450 people are interested on group excercise. or Cinema are more interesting for the people of teens .
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The table compare the information about the data on the hour of free time per year for individuals in Someland.
Overall, watching TV or videos were the greatest hours on spent free time which was Teens people, while group and exercise or sport was the lowest by 60s and 70+ on their free time which was both similar.
Watching TV or Videos were highly demandable by Teens citizen activities hours on 1200, while ,70+ people were followed by per year spent on this ,a mere difference was 100 was observed . Moreover,20s and 60s people spent their leisure time on watching TV per hours 700 that was the highest on that. Furthermore, spent on watching TV were leisure time in per year 30s that was 400 the biggest around 30s people. Besides,40s people spent their free time on watching TV that was quite similar than 50s,a small difference on 100.
On the other hand ,schoialising with 4 or less people and schoialising 4 or more people were the lowest time on 150 that was simalr teens and 20s .
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teens spend 1200 hours per year on watching tv, which is followed by the figure of 70+ at 1100 hours.
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The table illustrate the data on the hour of free time each year for people in the area of Someland.
Overall, the highest number of teens and 70s+ people spent their free time watching tv/ videos while they both there least number of people spent free time in cinema.
In terms of socialising with 4 or less people teens, 20s are same way spent there time as well as 40s, 50s and 60s, 70+ spent there time similarly. 2nd highest number is 60s and 70+ people choose there time watching tv/ videos.
On the other hand, 60s and 70+ people least choosen there time in group exercise or sport there number of choosen is none. 30s and 40s people prefer there time spent in individual exercise, however, socialising with four or more people 50s, 60s and 70s people spent there hours similarly which was 25.
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The table provided information on the spending free time per year for people in the nations of Someland .
overall, the highest free time spent teenagers by watching tv, whereas it is followed by seventy years older people. The lowest number of time spent is cinema however, group excercise and sports were not interesting in over sixty years old people.
In terms of every year in Someland people teens was spent their leisure time by watching TV/Videos about 1200 hours while it is 100 hours greater than 70+ people.
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The table compares the peoples of some land who are passed their free time in many sector.
overall ,teenager is the highest in that table ,while ,the age of 30 s -40 s are the lowest .moreover in the age of people who are in 50s-70s similar on socialising with 4 or more people .
in terms of watching tv/ videos tanager takes the highest number of time with 1200 hours ,while 40s people is the lowest number in that category 700 .in addition,both 20s and 60s are the similar position .cinema is the lowest category in that table where teenager is the higher than any other age . in this part teenager stand on 100 hour .30s and 60s is the same position with 50 hour .more over 40s and 50s are also same position with 25 hour .20s and 70+S are the higher than the all age without teen and they are also at 75 .hour
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The given table chart compares hour of leisure time per year for people in someland.
Overall, watching TV in leisure time is highly demandable for all items except group exercise of teens, while cinema is the least of all ages. As well as group exercise of 60s and 70s+ is lowest.
In terms of watching TV, teens spend their highest leisure time 1200 hours, whereas 70s spend free time is only 100 hours lower than that. Besides, spending leisure time on watching tv by 30s,40s and 50s is 400,500 and 600 respectively, where 20s and 60s is quite similar with 700 and there are no difference. Conversely, socialising with 4 or less people is ranged between 150 and 300 for all ages.Furthermore, socialising with 4 or more people of 50s,60s and 70s spend time is quite similar with 25, where, Similarly teens,20s with 350 hours and 30s,40s with almost 50 hours.
however, spending free time on group exercise is highly demandable, as teens spend 450 hours on this, where 20s,30s,40s and 50s followed that. Alongside, 60s and 70s is quite similar with 0 hours. On the other hand, individual exercise ranged between 50 and 200 for all ages. Lastly, cinema is lowest for all ages in whole list.
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The provided table demonstrate numerous activities where people consume time as in free time.
Overall, the teens is responsible for a significant amount of time in the activity of watching tv/ videos. While the activity of group exercise / sport show not interest the people of 60s and 70s. The activity of cinema is not that well known for all ages of people.
regarding the watching tv and socialising wlith 4 or less people, watching tv is a activity which take a dramatic amount of time for the people who are teens and 70s+ ,teens responsible 1200 hours and 70s+ accounted for 11oo hours. additionally 20s and 60s consume same time which is 700 hours. 30s , 40s, 50s, used 400,500,and 600 hours respectively.socializing with people all is in the time of 300 hours.
concerning the group and individual exercise, teens like spent time in more in a group, hpwever, all ages follwed the time around 200 hours.
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The table provide the information about on the hour of free time spent in every year for people in Someland.
Overall, the highest number of people in all age prefer watching TV/videos,while cinema is the least preferd category for them. However ,group exercise became less popuplar with age.
In terms of watching tv/videos, it had the highest viewers on the age of teenagers and those who are 70+,while socialising with 4 or more people category had a .difference , the teenagers and 20s people 30s and 40s and the last three group of age had the same audience ,with 350 , 50 and 25 respectively for each. Moreover, socialising with 4 or less people and indivisual exercise hold quite similar number except in the age of 50s and 60s.
Regarding group exercise/ sport, the number of people who spent their time most in this category , are the teens , while it had 0 audience in the age of 60s ans 70s
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The table charts provide information about on the hour of maximum time spent per year for people someland .
Overall, The highest amount of teens spent leisure time on watching TV/videos .while oldest people are also watching TV or videos. However , the lowest time spent all ages people on cinema.
In terms of teens spent the highest leisure time on watching TV/Videos about 1,200 hour. while the oldest people also spent their maximum time spent on that around 1,100 hour. In Socilising with 4 or less people medium ages spent their leisure time about 300 and other ages are not .were as
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The table charts provide information about on the hour of maximum time spent per year for people someland .
Overall, The highest amount of teens spent leisure time on watching TV/videos .while oldest people are also watching TV or videos. However , the lowest time spent all ages people on cinema.
In terms of teens spent the highest leisure time on watching TV/Videos about 1,200 hour. while the oldest people also spent their maximum time spent on that around 1,100 hour. In Socilising with 4 or less people medium ages spent their leisure time about 300 and other ages are not .wereas