The pie chart compares the proportion of second language classes taken by Australian secondary school students in two different cities during 2017.
It is evident that both Mandarin as well as Japanese were the most highly learned languages as a second language in the two major urban area such as Melbourne and Sydney in Australia. Indonesian and Italian were least popular languages to learn in Sydney, while Indonesian and other languages were in Melbourne.
In terms of Melbourne, Mandarin was learned as a second language by the 40% of the secondary school students, which was highest compared to other languages. However, Japanese was second highest in the concern of learning it as a second language, which was 25%.Conversely, 15% students learned Italian, where Indonesian and other languages were quite similar with the number of students, which was 10%.
In contrast, 45% of the total secondary students population of Sydney were learning Mandarin as a second language, while 30% students were taught Japanese as their second language. On the contrary, both Indonesian and Italian were quite same with the ratio of students who were learning, which was 5%.However, 15% students were focused on other languages.
The pie chart below depicts the second language classes taken by the Australian secondary school students in two different cities in 2017.
It’s evident that the students took the highest amount of classes in the Mandarin language in both cities. Japanese follows Mandarin as the second most learned second language by the students in these cities.
In terms of Melbourne, the students took more classes in Mandarin compared to the other languages. Japanese followed Mandarin just by fifteen percent. On the contrary the number of students that took classes in Italian, Indonesian and other languages were merely 15,10 and 10 percent.
On the other hand, the most learned language in Sydney by the students was Mandarin, followed by Japanese by 10 percent. Unlike in Melbourne the number of students studied Italian in Sydney was merely 5 percent. Indonesian followed Italian by the same numbers. contrary, the number of students learned other languages was pretty much high than in Melbourne.
THE BAR CHART COMPARES THE PERCENTAGE OF SECOND LANGUAGE CLASSES BY AUSTRALIAN SECONDARY SCHOOL STUDENTS IN TWO DIFFERENT CITIES IN THE YEAR 2017.
OVARALL, BOTH OF CITIES TAKEN MOST SIGNIFICANT PERCENTAGE BY STUDENTS ON MANDARIN WAS 40% AND 45% RESPECTIVELY. ALONGSIDE, BOTH OF THEM TAKING A LITTLE LOW PERCENTAGE ON ITALIAN,INDONESIAN AND OTHERS. LASTLY, BOTH OF CITIES TAKEN A LITTLE MEDIUM PERCENTAGE ON JAPANESE.
IN TERMS OF MELBOURNE, THE AMOUNT OF PERCENTAGE WHICH WAS TAKEN BY MELBOURNE ON INDONESIAN WAS 10%, WHILE TAKING ON OTHER WAS QUITE SIMILAR ,AND THERE ARE NO DIFFERENCE HERE. BESIDES, MARDARIN USED UP 40% BY MELBOURNE ,WEHERAS TAKING ON JAPANESE WAS 15% LOWER THAN THAT. IN ADDITION, TAKING ON ITALIAN A LITTLE MEDIUM WAS 15%.
HOWEVER, SYDNEY TAKEN MOST LOWEST SIGNIFICANT PERCENTAGE ON OTHER ,INDONESIAN AND ITALIAN BY SYDNEY WHICH WAS 15% ,5% AND 5% RESPECTIVELY. FURTHERMORE, TAKING ON MANDARIN BY SYDNEY WAS ALMOST 45% , THOUGH TAKING ON JAPANESE WAS 15% LOWER THAN THAT.
1. The pie chart compares the proportion of second language classes of secondary school students from two different areas of Australia such as Melbourne and Sydney in the year of 2017.
Overall, Mandarin was the highest taken language both in Melbourne and Sydney while Indonesian and other was in the bottom list in Melbourne, and Italian and Indonesian was the least spoken in Sydney.
It is cleared that, Mandarin was taken by most of the students in both areas and its percentages were 40% and 45% for Melbourne and Sydney respectfully. However, about 25% and 30% students chose Japanese as their language in Melbourne and Sydney whereas 15% Italian and 15% other languages were also taken in both of the cities.
In Melbourne, Indonesian and other languages proportion was 10% and 10% separately . In the contrary, in Sydney 5% Italian and 5% Indonesian was noticeable between the students.
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The pie charts compare the proportion of second language classes taken by Australian secondary school students in two different cities in the 2017.
Overall, Sydney were the greater than Melbourne was demandable class in Australia, while mandarin was the highest in Sydney than Melbourne. However, Sydney was lowest for Indonesian than Melbourne.
In tarms of, Mandarin was the most popular for second language classes in Sydney at 45% , while Japanese and other classes students at 30% and 15% respectively. However, Italian and Indonesian was the same percentage in Sydney at 5% and 5% .
On the other hand, 40% was the highest for mandarin from Melbourne , while Indonesian and other students are same 10% respectively. Moreover, Japanese language classes was 25% and Italian 15% .
The pie chart compares the proportion of second language classes taken by Australian secondary school students in Melbourne and Sydney in the year 2017.
overall, the number of students in both cities were higher in Mandarin, while Indonesian had the least student. However, the proportion of Indonesian and other were same in Melbourne, Sydney had the same number of student in Italian and Indonesian.
In terms of Melbourne, Mandarin students had the significant number, which was 40% , while the members of Japanese were 15% less than it. However, 15% students were Italian whereas, Indonesian and other had the similar number of student , with only 10%.
In respect of Sydney, around 45% student were in Mandarin , which is 15% greater than Japanese student. Moreover ,Sydney had the similar number of student in Italian and Indonesian , holding only 5%, while other members were 15%.
The given pie chart displayed the number of second language classes taken by Australian secondary school students in the city of Melboure and the Sydney in the year of 2017.
Overall, both of city taked class on mandaen was highest. Indonesian and Itallian were the least for the the city of Sydney .Not only Indonesian but also mandarin was lowest for the Melbourne .
in terms of Melbourne ,Mandarin was the highly teaching subject in that year .at 40%.while japansese the 2nd highest in the Melbourne.at 25%. Moreover, the students were teached the l Italian language by the teacher it was 15%. other and Indonesian were the lowest in the given chart . and both were similar position at 10%
in respect of Sydney , indonesian and Italian language was the lowest number in that city which was at 5% .other was stand on at 15% . japanese was the 2nd higest for that city in that period at 30%. moreover Madarin was the highest in that time at 45%.
The pie chart compares the proportion of second language classes taken by Australian scondray schools lerner in two different town in the year 2017.
Overall, in Melbourne and sydney cities lerners greater amount of mandarin and Japanese expect Italian,others and Indonesian. While mandarin was the demandable rate of the Australian students came from Sydney ,however, the lowest amount of Italian come from Sydney compared to Melbourne Indonesian and other.
In the terms of Melbourne, secondary school students language mandarin was the most of the demandable amount of 40% on this, while japanese language was followed that, a mere deference was 15% observerd . Other was learn on language quite similar the indonesian language almost 10%. On contrary the least of the learner study on Italian almost 15%.
In contrast, learn on mandarin language in the Sydney cities people was highly demandable to the Australian came from 45%.Moreover,30% students of the Australian country learn on Japanese language by 30%,however,15% less than comes from others . Conversely, Italian and Indonesian were quite similar around 5% also which were the lowest amount of entire char.
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In this pie chart shows the percentage of second language classes taked by Australian secondary school students between two different cities (Melbourne and Sydney) in 2017.
Overall, in both city Mandarin was the highest percentage and Indonesian was the lowest. Japanese was the 2nd percentage position in both country. Not only Japanese lower than Mandarin but also higher than Italian and Other.
In terms of , Melbourne was took the highest teaching subject Mandarin 40%, and Sydney also took 45%. Than Japanese took the 2nd position in both city 25% and 30%. IN Melbourne Italian took 15% and IN Sydney it toked 5% that is similar with Indonesian .In Melbourne Italian took 15% and other toked 10% similar with Indonesian. Lastly Sydneys Other toked 15% .
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The pie charts compare the proportion of second language classes taken by Australian secondary students in two different cities such as Melbourne and Sydney in the year 2017.
overall, it is clear that Mandarin language was learned by highest percentage of students in both Melbourne as well as Sydney cities. Indonesian language was least popular among both urban areas.
Looking at the graphs in more details, Mandarin was learned by higher percentage of students in both cities ,Melbourne was 40 % and Sydney was 45 % respectively. The second highest class taken language was Japanese which was learned by students 25% in Melbourne and 30 % in Sydney.
Regarding of Melbourne, Indonesian and other languages were taught by students was similar proportion, whereas Italian and Indonesian were taught in Sydney
followed a similar trend. Other language were taught in Sydney at 15 % , while, 15 %of Italian language was taught in Melbourne.
The provided pie chart illustrates the proportion of a another language classes provided an Australian high school pupils in Melbourne and Sydney in the year of 2017.
Overall, the percentage of Mandarin learners were the highest in the both cities. while Indonesians and others were a minimal proportion in Sydney. additionally in Melbourne were a average pupils who learns second language in the same as Sydney.
Concerning the Mandarin and Japanese in both city, Mandarin follows a great amount of leaners which was 40% in Melbourne and 45% in Sydney.
japanese were almost same and medium proportion around 25%amd 30% in Melbourne and Sydney respectively.
Regarding the three other languages , first of all Italian in Melbourne 15% and others in Sydney 15% were same learners who are interested to learn.
In Melbourne the Indonesian and Others were same 15%, while Italian and Indonesian were 5% in both in Sydney. The Melbourne were experienced same proportion in Indonesian and Others 10%.
The pie charts display the time was spent by people on smartphones and tablets in six different sectors.
It is evident that people waste their time on both smartphones and tablets by playing games, whereas social networking is the second way of spending time. Conversely, people use least amount of time on smartphones for reading news, where people use their time on tablets for utilities.
Regarding smartphones, 35% people spend their time by playing games, which is highest amount of time people spend on smartphones. On the contrary, social networking consumes 29% of the people’s time. However, 20% of the time people spend on smartphones is because of their utilities purpose, while only 8% of the time is spent for listening music and watching videos. People spent least amount of their time to read news, where 5% of their is consumed by other stuffs.
In terms of tablets, games take the most of their time , which is 57%, while social networking wastes 15% of the inhabitants’ time. Many spend their time by hearing music and seeing videos, which take 13% of their time. Moreover, both utilities and news consume 3% and 4% of their time respectively. At last, 8% of the time need for other things.
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The pie charts compare time spent on mobile phones and tablets .
Overall, tablets were the greater than smartphones is most popular games, while the highest proportion of category is games than utilities in tablets. However, smartphones is highest for games than lowest news.
In terms of, smartphones is most popular for games at 35% is the highest than social networking at 29% , while the utilities, music and videos and other is average of smartphones at 20%,8% and 5% respectively. However, smartphones is the lowest in news at 3%.
On the other hand, 57% is the highest for games in tablets, while social networking, music and videos and other and news percentage at 15%, 13% and 8% respectively. Moreover, time spent news is lowest at 4% at the utilities is the lowest for tablets at 3% .
THE BAR CHART COMPARES TIME SPENT ON SMARTPHONES AND TABLET BY CATEGORY.
OVERALL, BOTH OF CATEGORY SPENT HIGHEST TIME ON GAMES WAS 35% AND 57% RESPECTIVELY EXPECT OTHERS. OTHERS CATEGORY SPENT TIME A LITTLE LOW THAN GAMES .
IN TERMS OF SMARTPHONES, SPENDING TIME WAS HIGHESTV ON GAMES BY CATEGORY, AS CATEGORY SPENT TIME WAS 35% ON THIS. BESIDES , SPENDING TIME BY SMARTPHONES ON OTHER ,MUSIC AND MUSIC AND VIDEOS WAS LOWEST 5%,3% AND 8% RESPECTIVELY. IN ADDITION, UTILITIES USED UP BY SMARTPHONES WAS 20% , ALTHOUGH SPENDING TIME ON SOCIAL NETWORKING BY SMARTPHONES WAS 9 % HIGHER THAN THAT.
HOWEVER, SPENDING TIME ON GAMES BY TABLETS WAS HIGHLY DEMANDABLE , AS CATEGORY SPENT TIME WAS 57% ON THIS . MOREOVER, THE AMOUNT OF PERCENTAGE WHICH WAS SPENT TIME ON SOCIAL NETWORKING BT TABLETS WAS 15%, WHILE SPENDING TIME ON MUSIC AND VIDEOS WAS FOLLOWED THAT. LASTLY, TABLETS SPENT TIME ON OTHER ,UTILITIES AND NEWS A MOST LOWER WAS 8%, 3% AND 4% RESPECTIVELY.
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2. The pie chart illustrates the proportion of time spent on gadgets by categories such as, games, social networking, utilities, music and videos, news and other activities in secondary school students in two different cities in the year of 2017.
Overall, the greater number of students expended their time on playing games both in smartphones and tablets whereas watching news was the least popular in smartphones and utilities was in the tablets.
It is noticeable that, in smartphones 35% students played games which was the most significant number of time for smartphones whereas social networking and using utility were about 29% and 20%. On the contrary, Music and videos were in the fourth list with 8% , other activity was in the fifth position with 5% and holding 3% proportion, news was in the least position.
Although, 57% students played games in tablets which was the most highest time in tablets, whereas social networking was 15% and Music and videos were in the third list with 13% , other activity on tablets was in the fourth position with 8% and holding 4% news was in the fifth in list. However, utilities was the least used time in tablets with proportion of 3%.
The pie chart below depicts the time spent on smartphones and tablets in different fields.
As evident the most amount of time spent both on Smartphones and tablets was by games. social networking being the second on the list. And Music and videos, utilities, news, and other things taking the rest of the total amount of time spent both on smartphones and tablets.
As for smartphones, the people played games in it for about 35 percent of the time. Social networking followed games by total 29 percent. 20 percent of the total time included utilities. 8 percent of the total time was spend on music and videos. On the other hand a very little amount of time was spend on news and other things by the amount of three and five percent.
And in terms of tablets, Games took more than half of the total amount of time spent on tablets, while social networking, music and videos took only 15 and 13 percent of the total time. On the other hand the time spent on news and utilities were merely 4 and 3 percent. On the contrary, 8 percent of the total time as spend on the other stuff.
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The pie chart provide information about spending time on smartphones and tablets, in various category.
Overall, both device had the highest number of time spent on games ,while the time of using utilities in Smartphone and Tablets had a difference. However, news took the least time in both device.
In terms of Smartphone, time spent of games was higher, which was 35%, while it was followed by the category of social networking by 7%. About 20% times of utilities , which were 12% higher than music and videos. In contrast, the proportion of time spent was others and news were 5% and 3% respectively, whereas news took the least amount.
Regarding Tablets, the amount of playing games was the most popular category, with 57%. However, music and videos had 13% amount, which is less than social networking by 2%. 8% time spent on others category, which was double of the time of news. On the contrary, utilities was the lower category , just holding 3%.
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The pie chart displays the time spent on smartphones and tablets in six particular sectors.
It is clear that, people were used smartphones and tablets for gaming in comparison to others categories . Inhabitants were invest very little time for reading news by smartphone and by using tablets they passes very short for utilities .
In terms of smartphones ,most of the people spend their time by games and the ratio of inhabitants is 35% on this ,while they spend into social networking is followed by less than 29%. 20% people consume their time for utilities purposes .Passing time by music and videos,news,others and here spending time on music and videos is leading 8% while for news they spent 3% time and also for others activities they passes 5%.
Regarding tablets, people also spend most of their times for games and this ratio is 57 on this .Though the inhabitants spend their 15% of time for social networking which is followed by music and videos less 2%.The inhabitants passes 8% of their time by doing others activities where its 4% higher than spending on news. In purposes of utilities the people spent very mere portion that is 3%.
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The pie chart displays the time spent on smartphone and tablets in six different sector.
Overall, people spent on smartphones and tablets were the large number of games, social networking expect others, news, music and videos and utilities. While both product were used by people playing games, on the other hand, utilities and news were very short rate of the graph.
In the terms of smartphone, games were the highly demandable of the chart around 35% on this, social networking was followed by games , the small difference was 6%. The time spent on Music and videos almost 8%,however,12% better than people spent on utilities. On contrary, spent on others were approximately 5%,3% respectively.
On the other hand, spent on games, social networking and music and videos were the most significant proportion, by the people used ,where the led of the list rate of 57% and spent on music and videos and social networking were almost 13%, 15% respectively. People spent on others 8%,conversely, 4% less than spent on reading news .On contrast, utilities was the least in the chart the rate of 3%.
The pic charts compare the percentage of people spent time on Smartphones and Tablets .
It is clear that the highest number of people spent time to play games on both categories. The lowest proportion of people read news on Mobile phones , whereas utilities was done by people on Tablets.
In terms of Smartphones, people played games on Tablets by 22% compared to Smartphones. 29 % of individuals spent time on social networking on mobile phones, while 15 percentage of people spent time on Tablets.
Looking at the charts in more details, people consume least time on news, other, and music as well as videos in both categories. On Smartphones utilities were consume time by individuals 20 %, however, 3 % time spent on Tablets.
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This pie chart compare people spent the time on smartphones and tablets.
Overall, in both charts we can see that people spent more time on games. And 2ndly more priority was on social networking. In smartphone people less interested on news, music and videos , utilities and other . On the other hand in tablets people spent less time in utilities , news and other was slightly higher than utilities and news not only higher but also lower than music and videos.
In terms of Samartphones , games was more popular number at 35% , social networking took the second position 29% . Utilities was slightly less than social networking was 20% and higher than music and videos took 8%. In other took 5%, and news was toked the less time people spent 3%.
In respect of tablets , games is most popular that people spent time in number of 57%. Social networking is toked 15%, and music and videos ,news ,other was under the percentage of 10%. Such as others toked 8%,news took 4% and utilities percentage 8%.
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the given pie chart displayed the expense of time on smartphone and tablets by the sector .
overall, smartphone and tablets were highly used on the game purpose . smartphone
was used least on the news . on the other hand utilities is least in tablets .
in terms of smartphone , game was played highest number at 35%.social networking was the higher then the utiltise while the difference between social networking and utilitise by around 9% .the expenditure of time in music and videos at8%.which is followed by the others and news respectively by 3% . news was the lowest percentage at that time .
in respect of tablets utilitise is the lowest percentage in that period at 3%.news was slightly upper than the utiliesby 1%. moreover people used tablets on other and music and videos respectively8%and 13%. in addition social networking was upper than music and videos by 2% . while it was 2nd highest at tablets . In tablets was significant used on the game at 57%.
The provided pie chart demonstrate the the expense the time in the six segments of the smartphones and tablets.
overall, using smart phone and tablet are take peak time and games and social network is responsible for spending times the most. whereas others consume a moderate time.
in terms of smartphones, games consume a significant amount of time which is 35% and social networking follows the games and make 29% of time to using. additionally utilities responsible a moderate time consuming which is exact 20%.
others, news, music, and videos consume range between 10%.
concerning the tablets, games experienced a higher amount of time and responsible for more than half 57%.i n addition, social networking and music videos take a moderate proportion which is 15% and 13% respectively. however, others followed a slight amount of time which is around 10%.
The pie chart illustrate the time spent on smartphone and tablet in six various sector.
Overall , people time spent on smartphone and tablet the most popular user games and social network without other sector news , music and video , utilities . While both consumer user were very lowest value.
In terms of smartphone games were user highest on the almost 35 percentage and social network was followed very nearly different 6 proportion on this. However, the peoples were user 3rd position of utilities almost 20%. People spending on other items 8%, 3%, 5% respectively were quite similar.
On other hand, tablet games user most popular on the approximately 57%, while other users very lowest .
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The pie chart compares the proportion of second language classes taken by Australian secondary school students in two different cities during 2017.
It is evident that both Mandarin as well as Japanese were the most highly learned languages as a second language in the two major urban area such as Melbourne and Sydney in Australia. Indonesian and Italian were least popular languages to learn in Sydney, while Indonesian and other languages were in Melbourne.
In terms of Melbourne, Mandarin was learned as a second language by the 40% of the secondary school students, which was highest compared to other languages. However, Japanese was second highest in the concern of learning it as a second language, which was 25%.Conversely, 15% students learned Italian, where Indonesian and other languages were quite similar with the number of students, which was 10%.
In contrast, 45% of the total secondary students population of Sydney were learning Mandarin as a second language, while 30% students were taught Japanese as their second language. On the contrary, both Indonesian and Italian were quite same with the ratio of students who were learning, which was 5%.However, 15% students were focused on other languages.
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The pie chart below depicts the second language classes taken by the Australian secondary school students in two different cities in 2017.
It’s evident that the students took the highest amount of classes in the Mandarin language in both cities. Japanese follows Mandarin as the second most learned second language by the students in these cities.
In terms of Melbourne, the students took more classes in Mandarin compared to the other languages. Japanese followed Mandarin just by fifteen percent. On the contrary the number of students that took classes in Italian, Indonesian and other languages were merely 15,10 and 10 percent.
On the other hand, the most learned language in Sydney by the students was Mandarin, followed by Japanese by 10 percent. Unlike in Melbourne the number of students studied Italian in Sydney was merely 5 percent. Indonesian followed Italian by the same numbers. contrary, the number of students learned other languages was pretty much high than in Melbourne.
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THE BAR CHART COMPARES THE PERCENTAGE OF SECOND LANGUAGE CLASSES BY AUSTRALIAN SECONDARY SCHOOL STUDENTS IN TWO DIFFERENT CITIES IN THE YEAR 2017.
OVARALL, BOTH OF CITIES TAKEN MOST SIGNIFICANT PERCENTAGE BY STUDENTS ON MANDARIN WAS 40% AND 45% RESPECTIVELY. ALONGSIDE, BOTH OF THEM TAKING A LITTLE LOW PERCENTAGE ON ITALIAN,INDONESIAN AND OTHERS. LASTLY, BOTH OF CITIES TAKEN A LITTLE MEDIUM PERCENTAGE ON JAPANESE.
IN TERMS OF MELBOURNE, THE AMOUNT OF PERCENTAGE WHICH WAS TAKEN BY MELBOURNE ON INDONESIAN WAS 10%, WHILE TAKING ON OTHER WAS QUITE SIMILAR ,AND THERE ARE NO DIFFERENCE HERE. BESIDES, MARDARIN USED UP 40% BY MELBOURNE ,WEHERAS TAKING ON JAPANESE WAS 15% LOWER THAN THAT. IN ADDITION, TAKING ON ITALIAN A LITTLE MEDIUM WAS 15%.
HOWEVER, SYDNEY TAKEN MOST LOWEST SIGNIFICANT PERCENTAGE ON OTHER ,INDONESIAN AND ITALIAN BY SYDNEY WHICH WAS 15% ,5% AND 5% RESPECTIVELY. FURTHERMORE, TAKING ON MANDARIN BY SYDNEY WAS ALMOST 45% , THOUGH TAKING ON JAPANESE WAS 15% LOWER THAN THAT.
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1. The pie chart compares the proportion of second language classes of secondary school students from two different areas of Australia such as Melbourne and Sydney in the year of 2017.
Overall, Mandarin was the highest taken language both in Melbourne and Sydney while Indonesian and other was in the bottom list in Melbourne, and Italian and Indonesian was the least spoken in Sydney.
It is cleared that, Mandarin was taken by most of the students in both areas and its percentages were 40% and 45% for Melbourne and Sydney respectfully. However, about 25% and 30% students chose Japanese as their language in Melbourne and Sydney whereas 15% Italian and 15% other languages were also taken in both of the cities.
In Melbourne, Indonesian and other languages proportion was 10% and 10% separately . In the contrary, in Sydney 5% Italian and 5% Indonesian was noticeable between the students.
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The pie charts compare the proportion of second language classes taken by Australian secondary school students in two different cities in the 2017.
Overall, Sydney were the greater than Melbourne was demandable class in Australia, while mandarin was the highest in Sydney than Melbourne. However, Sydney was lowest for Indonesian than Melbourne.
In tarms of, Mandarin was the most popular for second language classes in Sydney at 45% , while Japanese and other classes students at 30% and 15% respectively. However, Italian and Indonesian was the same percentage in Sydney at 5% and 5% .
On the other hand, 40% was the highest for mandarin from Melbourne , while Indonesian and other students are same 10% respectively. Moreover, Japanese language classes was 25% and Italian 15% .
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The pie chart compares the proportion of second language classes taken by Australian secondary school students in Melbourne and Sydney in the year 2017.
overall, the number of students in both cities were higher in Mandarin, while Indonesian had the least student. However, the proportion of Indonesian and other were same in Melbourne, Sydney had the same number of student in Italian and Indonesian.
In terms of Melbourne, Mandarin students had the significant number, which was 40% , while the members of Japanese were 15% less than it. However, 15% students were Italian whereas, Indonesian and other had the similar number of student , with only 10%.
In respect of Sydney, around 45% student were in Mandarin , which is 15% greater than Japanese student. Moreover ,Sydney had the similar number of student in Italian and Indonesian , holding only 5%, while other members were 15%.
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The given pie chart displayed the number of second language classes taken by Australian secondary school students in the city of Melboure and the Sydney in the year of 2017.
Overall, both of city taked class on mandaen was highest. Indonesian and Itallian were the least for the the city of Sydney .Not only Indonesian but also mandarin was lowest for the Melbourne .
in terms of Melbourne ,Mandarin was the highly teaching subject in that year .at 40%.while japansese the 2nd highest in the Melbourne.at 25%. Moreover, the students were teached the l Italian language by the teacher it was 15%. other and Indonesian were the lowest in the given chart . and both were similar position at 10%
in respect of Sydney , indonesian and Italian language was the lowest number in that city which was at 5% .other was stand on at 15% . japanese was the 2nd higest for that city in that period at 30%. moreover Madarin was the highest in that time at 45%.
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The pie chart compares the proportion of second language classes taken by Australian scondray schools lerner in two different town in the year 2017.
Overall, in Melbourne and sydney cities lerners greater amount of mandarin and Japanese expect Italian,others and Indonesian. While mandarin was the demandable rate of the Australian students came from Sydney ,however, the lowest amount of Italian come from Sydney compared to Melbourne Indonesian and other.
In the terms of Melbourne, secondary school students language mandarin was the most of the demandable amount of 40% on this, while japanese language was followed that, a mere deference was 15% observerd . Other was learn on language quite similar the indonesian language almost 10%. On contrary the least of the learner study on Italian almost 15%.
In contrast, learn on mandarin language in the Sydney cities people was highly demandable to the Australian came from 45%.Moreover,30% students of the Australian country learn on Japanese language by 30%,however,15% less than comes from others . Conversely, Italian and Indonesian were quite similar around 5% also which were the lowest amount of entire char.
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In this pie chart shows the percentage of second language classes taked by Australian secondary school students between two different cities (Melbourne and Sydney) in 2017.
Overall, in both city Mandarin was the highest percentage and Indonesian was the lowest. Japanese was the 2nd percentage position in both country. Not only Japanese lower than Mandarin but also higher than Italian and Other.
In terms of , Melbourne was took the highest teaching subject Mandarin 40%, and Sydney also took 45%. Than Japanese took the 2nd position in both city 25% and 30%. IN Melbourne Italian took 15% and IN Sydney it toked 5% that is similar with Indonesian .In Melbourne Italian took 15% and other toked 10% similar with Indonesian. Lastly Sydneys Other toked 15% .
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The pie charts compare the proportion of second language classes taken by Australian secondary students in two different cities such as Melbourne and Sydney in the year 2017.
overall, it is clear that Mandarin language was learned by highest percentage of students in both Melbourne as well as Sydney cities. Indonesian language was least popular among both urban areas.
Looking at the graphs in more details, Mandarin was learned by higher percentage of students in both cities ,Melbourne was 40 % and Sydney was 45 % respectively. The second highest class taken language was Japanese which was learned by students 25% in Melbourne and 30 % in Sydney.
Regarding of Melbourne, Indonesian and other languages were taught by students was similar proportion, whereas Italian and Indonesian were taught in Sydney
followed a similar trend. Other language were taught in Sydney at 15 % , while, 15 %of Italian language was taught in Melbourne.
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The provided pie chart illustrates the proportion of a another language classes provided an Australian high school pupils in Melbourne and Sydney in the year of 2017.
Overall, the percentage of Mandarin learners were the highest in the both cities. while Indonesians and others were a minimal proportion in Sydney. additionally in Melbourne were a average pupils who learns second language in the same as Sydney.
Concerning the Mandarin and Japanese in both city, Mandarin follows a great amount of leaners which was 40% in Melbourne and 45% in Sydney.
japanese were almost same and medium proportion around 25%amd 30% in Melbourne and Sydney respectively.
Regarding the three other languages , first of all Italian in Melbourne 15% and others in Sydney 15% were same learners who are interested to learn.
In Melbourne the Indonesian and Others were same 15%, while Italian and Indonesian were 5% in both in Sydney. The Melbourne were experienced same proportion in Indonesian and Others 10%.
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The pie charts display the time was spent by people on smartphones and tablets in six different sectors.
It is evident that people waste their time on both smartphones and tablets by playing games, whereas social networking is the second way of spending time. Conversely, people use least amount of time on smartphones for reading news, where people use their time on tablets for utilities.
Regarding smartphones, 35% people spend their time by playing games, which is highest amount of time people spend on smartphones. On the contrary, social networking consumes 29% of the people’s time. However, 20% of the time people spend on smartphones is because of their utilities purpose, while only 8% of the time is spent for listening music and watching videos. People spent least amount of their time to read news, where 5% of their is consumed by other stuffs.
In terms of tablets, games take the most of their time , which is 57%, while social networking wastes 15% of the inhabitants’ time. Many spend their time by hearing music and seeing videos, which take 13% of their time. Moreover, both utilities and news consume 3% and 4% of their time respectively. At last, 8% of the time need for other things.
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The pie charts compare time spent on mobile phones and tablets .
Overall, tablets were the greater than smartphones is most popular games, while the highest proportion of category is games than utilities in tablets. However, smartphones is highest for games than lowest news.
In terms of, smartphones is most popular for games at 35% is the highest than social networking at 29% , while the utilities, music and videos and other is average of smartphones at 20%,8% and 5% respectively. However, smartphones is the lowest in news at 3%.
On the other hand, 57% is the highest for games in tablets, while social networking, music and videos and other and news percentage at 15%, 13% and 8% respectively. Moreover, time spent news is lowest at 4% at the utilities is the lowest for tablets at 3% .
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THE BAR CHART COMPARES TIME SPENT ON SMARTPHONES AND TABLET BY CATEGORY.
OVERALL, BOTH OF CATEGORY SPENT HIGHEST TIME ON GAMES WAS 35% AND 57% RESPECTIVELY EXPECT OTHERS. OTHERS CATEGORY SPENT TIME A LITTLE LOW THAN GAMES .
IN TERMS OF SMARTPHONES, SPENDING TIME WAS HIGHESTV ON GAMES BY CATEGORY, AS CATEGORY SPENT TIME WAS 35% ON THIS. BESIDES , SPENDING TIME BY SMARTPHONES ON OTHER ,MUSIC AND MUSIC AND VIDEOS WAS LOWEST 5%,3% AND 8% RESPECTIVELY. IN ADDITION, UTILITIES USED UP BY SMARTPHONES WAS 20% , ALTHOUGH SPENDING TIME ON SOCIAL NETWORKING BY SMARTPHONES WAS 9 % HIGHER THAN THAT.
HOWEVER, SPENDING TIME ON GAMES BY TABLETS WAS HIGHLY DEMANDABLE , AS CATEGORY SPENT TIME WAS 57% ON THIS . MOREOVER, THE AMOUNT OF PERCENTAGE WHICH WAS SPENT TIME ON SOCIAL NETWORKING BT TABLETS WAS 15%, WHILE SPENDING TIME ON MUSIC AND VIDEOS WAS FOLLOWED THAT. LASTLY, TABLETS SPENT TIME ON OTHER ,UTILITIES AND NEWS A MOST LOWER WAS 8%, 3% AND 4% RESPECTIVELY.
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2. The pie chart illustrates the proportion of time spent on gadgets by categories such as, games, social networking, utilities, music and videos, news and other activities in secondary school students in two different cities in the year of 2017.
Overall, the greater number of students expended their time on playing games both in smartphones and tablets whereas watching news was the least popular in smartphones and utilities was in the tablets.
It is noticeable that, in smartphones 35% students played games which was the most significant number of time for smartphones whereas social networking and using utility were about 29% and 20%. On the contrary, Music and videos were in the fourth list with 8% , other activity was in the fifth position with 5% and holding 3% proportion, news was in the least position.
Although, 57% students played games in tablets which was the most highest time in tablets, whereas social networking was 15% and Music and videos were in the third list with 13% , other activity on tablets was in the fourth position with 8% and holding 4% news was in the fifth in list. However, utilities was the least used time in tablets with proportion of 3%.
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The pie chart below depicts the time spent on smartphones and tablets in different fields.
As evident the most amount of time spent both on Smartphones and tablets was by games. social networking being the second on the list. And Music and videos, utilities, news, and other things taking the rest of the total amount of time spent both on smartphones and tablets.
As for smartphones, the people played games in it for about 35 percent of the time. Social networking followed games by total 29 percent. 20 percent of the total time included utilities. 8 percent of the total time was spend on music and videos. On the other hand a very little amount of time was spend on news and other things by the amount of three and five percent.
And in terms of tablets, Games took more than half of the total amount of time spent on tablets, while social networking, music and videos took only 15 and 13 percent of the total time. On the other hand the time spent on news and utilities were merely 4 and 3 percent. On the contrary, 8 percent of the total time as spend on the other stuff.
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The pie chart provide information about spending time on smartphones and tablets, in various category.
Overall, both device had the highest number of time spent on games ,while the time of using utilities in Smartphone and Tablets had a difference. However, news took the least time in both device.
In terms of Smartphone, time spent of games was higher, which was 35%, while it was followed by the category of social networking by 7%. About 20% times of utilities , which were 12% higher than music and videos. In contrast, the proportion of time spent was others and news were 5% and 3% respectively, whereas news took the least amount.
Regarding Tablets, the amount of playing games was the most popular category, with 57%. However, music and videos had 13% amount, which is less than social networking by 2%. 8% time spent on others category, which was double of the time of news. On the contrary, utilities was the lower category , just holding 3%.
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The pie chart displays the time spent on smartphones and tablets in six particular sectors.
It is clear that, people were used smartphones and tablets for gaming in comparison to others categories . Inhabitants were invest very little time for reading news by smartphone and by using tablets they passes very short for utilities .
In terms of smartphones ,most of the people spend their time by games and the ratio of inhabitants is 35% on this ,while they spend into social networking is followed by less than 29%. 20% people consume their time for utilities purposes .Passing time by music and videos,news,others and here spending time on music and videos is leading 8% while for news they spent 3% time and also for others activities they passes 5%.
Regarding tablets, people also spend most of their times for games and this ratio is 57 on this .Though the inhabitants spend their 15% of time for social networking which is followed by music and videos less 2%.The inhabitants passes 8% of their time by doing others activities where its 4% higher than spending on news. In purposes of utilities the people spent very mere portion that is 3%.
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The pie chart displays the time spent on smartphone and tablets in six different sector.
Overall, people spent on smartphones and tablets were the large number of games, social networking expect others, news, music and videos and utilities. While both product were used by people playing games, on the other hand, utilities and news were very short rate of the graph.
In the terms of smartphone, games were the highly demandable of the chart around 35% on this, social networking was followed by games , the small difference was 6%. The time spent on Music and videos almost 8%,however,12% better than people spent on utilities. On contrary, spent on others were approximately 5%,3% respectively.
On the other hand, spent on games, social networking and music and videos were the most significant proportion, by the people used ,where the led of the list rate of 57% and spent on music and videos and social networking were almost 13%, 15% respectively. People spent on others 8%,conversely, 4% less than spent on reading news .On contrast, utilities was the least in the chart the rate of 3%.
The pic charts compare the percentage of people spent time on Smartphones and Tablets .
It is clear that the highest number of people spent time to play games on both categories. The lowest proportion of people read news on Mobile phones , whereas utilities was done by people on Tablets.
In terms of Smartphones, people played games on Tablets by 22% compared to Smartphones. 29 % of individuals spent time on social networking on mobile phones, while 15 percentage of people spent time on Tablets.
Looking at the charts in more details, people consume least time on news, other, and music as well as videos in both categories. On Smartphones utilities were consume time by individuals 20 %, however, 3 % time spent on Tablets.
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This pie chart compare people spent the time on smartphones and tablets.
Overall, in both charts we can see that people spent more time on games. And 2ndly more priority was on social networking. In smartphone people less interested on news, music and videos , utilities and other . On the other hand in tablets people spent less time in utilities , news and other was slightly higher than utilities and news not only higher but also lower than music and videos.
In terms of Samartphones , games was more popular number at 35% , social networking took the second position 29% . Utilities was slightly less than social networking was 20% and higher than music and videos took 8%. In other took 5%, and news was toked the less time people spent 3%.
In respect of tablets , games is most popular that people spent time in number of 57%. Social networking is toked 15%, and music and videos ,news ,other was under the percentage of 10%. Such as others toked 8%,news took 4% and utilities percentage 8%.
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the given pie chart displayed the expense of time on smartphone and tablets by the sector .
overall, smartphone and tablets were highly used on the game purpose . smartphone
was used least on the news . on the other hand utilities is least in tablets .
in terms of smartphone , game was played highest number at 35%.social networking was the higher then the utiltise while the difference between social networking and utilitise by around 9% .the expenditure of time in music and videos at8%.which is followed by the others and news respectively by 3% . news was the lowest percentage at that time .
in respect of tablets utilitise is the lowest percentage in that period at 3%.news was slightly upper than the utiliesby 1%. moreover people used tablets on other and music and videos respectively8%and 13%. in addition social networking was upper than music and videos by 2% . while it was 2nd highest at tablets . In tablets was significant used on the game at 57%.
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The provided pie chart demonstrate the the expense the time in the six segments of the smartphones and tablets.
overall, using smart phone and tablet are take peak time and games and social network is responsible for spending times the most. whereas others consume a moderate time.
in terms of smartphones, games consume a significant amount of time which is 35% and social networking follows the games and make 29% of time to using. additionally utilities responsible a moderate time consuming which is exact 20%.
others, news, music, and videos consume range between 10%.
concerning the tablets, games experienced a higher amount of time and responsible for more than half 57%.i n addition, social networking and music videos take a moderate proportion which is 15% and 13% respectively. however, others followed a slight amount of time which is around 10%.
The pie chart illustrate the time spent on smartphone and tablet in six various sector.
Overall , people time spent on smartphone and tablet the most popular user games and social network without other sector news , music and video , utilities . While both consumer user were very lowest value.
In terms of smartphone games were user highest on the almost 35 percentage and social network was followed very nearly different 6 proportion on this. However, the peoples were user 3rd position of utilities almost 20%. People spending on other items 8%, 3%, 5% respectively were quite similar.
On other hand, tablet games user most popular on the approximately 57%, while other users very lowest .
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