The table illustrate the percentage of the people who rode bicycle in one town by age group in the year 2012.
Overall, children’s at the age group of (0-9) rode cycle most .Notably, 0-9 ages children’s had used bicycle at almost same ratio .there was a major difference in the age group of teenagers ,where as females led in the ratio ,males had less proneness on this field at that age .
In terms of the age group of (0-9), girls and boys both share the stage almost equally, the figure is approximately 52%. Among the teenagers ,female was used bicycle the most with 43.6%,while male used this with a lower figure at 25.1%.Middle aged people rode bicycle especially for maintain their fitness, the females were more concerned that the males, the ratio ranging between 18.2% for females and 10,8 % for males.
In the age group of 45-59, they loved to ride bicycle in the early morning and here also females stand with the highest at 13.7% and males was T 9.35
Original:
The table illustrate the percentage of the people who rode bicycle in one town by age group in the year 2012.
Correction:
The table illustrates the percentage of people who rode bicycles in one town by age group in the year 2012.
Mistakes:
“illustrate” → should be illustrates (subject-verb agreement: singular subject “table”).
“the people” → unnecessary article “the”.
“bicycle” → should be bicycles (plural form for general statement).
2️⃣ Sentence
Original:
Overall, children’s at the age group of (0-9) rode cycle most .Notably, 0-9 ages children’s had used bicycle at almost same ratio .there was a major difference in the age group of teenagers ,where as females led in the ratio ,males had less proneness on this field at that age .
Correction:
Overall, children in the age group of (0-9) rode cycles the most. Notably, 0–9-year-old children used bicycles at almost the same ratio. There was a major difference in the teenage group, whereas females led in the ratio and males had less proneness to ride bicycles at that age.
Mistakes:
“children’s” → incorrect; use children (no apostrophe).
“rode cycle most” → missing article; should be rode cycles the most.
“0-9 ages children’s” → wrong word order; should be 0–9-year-old children.
“.there” → new sentence should start with a capital letter (There).
“where as” → should be one word: whereas.
3️⃣ Sentence
Original:
In terms of the age group of (0-9), girls and boys both share the stage almost equally, the figure is approximately 52%.
Correction:
In terms of the age group of (0–9), girls and boys both shared the stage almost equally; the figure was approximately 52%.
Mistakes:
“share” → wrong tense; should be shared (past).
“is” → should be was (past tense for 2012 data).
Comma splice (two sentences joined by a comma) → use semicolon or full stop.
4️⃣ Sentence
Original:
Among the teenagers ,female was used bicycle the most with 43.6%,while male used this with a lower figure at 25.1%.
Correction:
Among the teenagers, females used bicycles the most with 43.6%, while males used them with a lower figure at 25.1%.
Mistakes:
“female was used bicycle” → incorrect structure; should be females used bicycles.
“male used this” → unclear pronoun; should be males used them (refers to bicycles).
Missing plural forms (female → females, male → males).
5️⃣ Sentence
Original:
Middle aged people rode bicycle especially for maintain their fitness, the females were more concerned that the males, the ratio ranging between 18.2% for females and 10,8 % for males.
Correction:
Middle-aged people rode bicycles especially to maintain their fitness; females were more concerned than males, with the ratio ranging between 18.2% for females and 10.8% for males.
Mistakes:
“Middle aged” → should be Middle-aged (hyphenated).
“for maintain” → incorrect; should be to maintain (infinitive form).
“that the males” → should be than the males (comparison).
“10,8 %” → comma instead of a decimal point; should be 10.8%.
Comma splice → should use a semicolon or split into two sentences.
6️⃣ Sentence
Original:
In the age group of 45-59, they loved to ride bicycle in the early morning and here also females stand with the highest at 13.7% and males was T 9.35
Correction:
In the age group of 45–59, they loved to ride bicycles in the early morning, and here also females stood at the highest at 13.7%, while males were at 9.35%.
Mistakes:
The table chart provides data of the population who rode bicycles in one town by age group in the year 2012.
Overall, all the age of group spent most population in town both male and female .Most are female age of group 0-9(52.5%) are mostly populated. At the age of male group 0-9(51.2%) range between ae probably similar. There are major difference between both male and female rider in the age of group 10-19.
in terms of group of female 0-9 spent the most at 52.5%. The expenditure was also higher in male group (52.5%).In the age of male group 40-59 which expended the least (9.3).
Original:
The table chart provides data of the population who rode bicycles in one town by age group in the year 2012.
Correction:
The table provides data about the percentage of people who rode bicycles in one town by age group in the year 2012.
Mistakes:
“table chart” → redundant; just “table” or “chart” is enough.
“data of” → should be data about.
“population” → unclear; should be people or percentage of people (since it’s about proportions, not total population).
“bicycles” → plural for general meaning.
2️⃣ Sentence
Original:
Overall, all the age of group spent most population in town both male and female .Most are female age of group 0-9(52.5%) are mostly populated. At the age of male group 0-9(51.2%) range between ae probably similar. There are major difference between both male and female rider in the age of group 10-19.
Correction:
Overall, all age groups included both males and females who rode bicycles, but the highest proportion was among females aged 0–9 (52.5%). Males of the same age group (51.2%) showed a similar rate. However, there was a major difference between male and female riders in the 10–19 age group.
Mistakes:
“all the age of group spent most population” → incorrect meaning; should be all age groups included both genders.
“Most are female age of group” → incorrect structure; should be the highest proportion was among females aged 0–9.
“range between ae probably similar” → unclear phrase; correct is showed a similar rate.
“There are” → should be There was (past tense for 2012).
“rider” → should be plural riders.
Punctuation missing after sentences.
3️⃣ Sentence
Original:
in terms of group of female 0-9 spent the most at 52.5%. The expenditure was also higher in male group (52.5%).In the age of male group 40-59 which expended the least (9.3).
Correction:
In terms of age groups, females aged 0–9 recorded the highest figure at 52.5%. The percentage for males of the same age group was also high at 51.2%. By contrast, males aged 40–59 showed the lowest proportion at 9.3%.
Mistakes:
“in terms of group of female” → awkward; should be In terms of age groups, females aged 0–9.
“spent the most” → wrong word; should be recorded the highest figure (no money is spent here).
“The expenditure was also higher” → wrong word; expenditure refers to spending money.
“male group (52.5%)” → should be males of the same age group (51.2%).
“which expended the least” → wrong word; should be showed the lowest proportion.
Missing subject in “In the age of male group 40–59” → incomplete sentence.
The table compares the data about the population rode bicycles in one town by age group in the year 2012.
Overall, Female has the highest percentage of the population rode bicycles. However, Male has lowest percentage of the population rode bicycles.
Age group 0-9, the highest percentage of Female 52.5% . the expenditure has higher in male 51.2%,compared to age group 10-19 which expended the 43.6%.at least 25.1% age group 20-39 Female percentage 13.7%and Male 10.8 respectively .
in contrast , Age group 40-59 had spent comparatively less 13.7% and 9.3 respectively .Meanwhile age group 60+Female group percentage 19.8 and Male 14.6 .Regarding the table Female was 5 sectors was the highest percentage of population rode bicycles .
Original:
The table compares the data about the population rode bicycles in one town by age group in the year 2012.
Correction:
The table compares the percentage of people who rode bicycles in one town by age group in the year 2012.
Mistakes:
“data about the population rode” → grammatically wrong; should be percentage of people who rode.
“population” → unnecessary since it’s about percentage, not total population.
2️⃣ Sentence
Original:
Overall, Female has the highest percentage of the population rode bicycles. However, Male has lowest percentage of the population rode bicycles.
Correction:
Overall, females had the highest percentage of bicycle riders, while males recorded the lowest proportions across all age groups.
Mistakes:
“Female has” → wrong tense; should be females had (past).
“the population rode bicycles” → incorrect structure; should be percentage of bicycle riders.
“Male has lowest” → should be males recorded the lowest (plural noun + correct tense).
Repetition of “population rode bicycles” – needs paraphrasing.
3️⃣ Sentence
Original:
Age group 0-9, the highest percentage of Female 52.5% . the expenditure has higher in male 51.2%,compared to age group 10-19 which expended the 43.6%.at least 25.1% age group 20-39 Female percentage 13.7%and Male 10.8 respectively .
Correction:
In the 0–9 age group, females had the highest proportion at 52.5%, while males showed a similar figure at 51.2%. Among teenagers (10–19), females made up 43.6%, whereas males accounted for only 25.1%. In the 20–39 age group, female and male rates were 13.7% and 10.8% respectively.
Mistakes:
Missing prepositions (“In the 0–9 age group”).
“the expenditure has higher” → wrong word and tense; use while males showed a similar figure.
“expended” → wrong; “made up” or “accounted for.”
“At least 25.1% age group 20–39 Female percentage 13.7%and Male 10.8” → confusing structure; needs proper sentence separation and punctuation.
Missing commas and conjunctions.
4️⃣ Sentence
Original:
in contrast , Age group 40-59 had spent comparatively less 13.7% and 9.3 respectively .Meanwhile age group 60+Female group percentage 19.8 and Male 14.6 .Regarding the table Female was 5 sectors was the highest percentage of population rode bicycles .
Correction:
In contrast, the 40–59 age group recorded lower figures, at 13.7% for females and 9.3% for males. Meanwhile, among those aged 60 and above, 19.8% of females and 14.6% of males rode bicycles. Overall, females had the highest percentage of bicycle users in all five age groups.
Mistakes:
“had spent” → incorrect (no spending); should be recorded or showed.
“comparatively less 13.7% and 9.3 respectively” → missing “at” before numbers.
“Meanwhile age group 60+Female group percentage 19.8 and Male 14.6” → poor structure; needs “Among those aged 60 and above…”
“Regarding the table Female was 5 sectors was the highest percentage” → unclear; should be females had the highest percentage in all five groups.
The table describes the ratio of the population who rode bicycles in one town by age group in the year 2012.
Overall, in the age group of 0-9, the ratio of both male and female who rode bicycle is similar. Notably, the highest amount of bicycle rider was in the age group of 0-9. The age group of 40-59 had the least interest in riding bicycle. There was a major difference in the both male and female rider in the age group of 10-19.
In terms of age group of 0-9, the ratio of people who rode bicycle was highest in both gender-female and male , at 52.5% and 51.2%. However, in the next age group(10-19) the interest to ride bicycle started to fall, at 43.6% female and 25.1% male. Therefore, in the age group of 20-39 the ratio the lowest among all age group, at 13.7% female and 9.3% male.
In the last age group, all people over 60 were not physically fit enough to ride a bike. Therefore, the ratio was low , at 19.8% female and 14.6% male.
Original:
The table describes the ratio of the population who rode bicycles in one town by age group in the year 2012.
Correction:
The table illustrates the percentage of people who rode bicycles in one town, categorized by age group, in the year 2012.
Mistakes:
“describes” → better replaced with illustrates or shows (more formal for IELTS Task 1).
“ratio of the population” → wrong phrasing; should be percentage of people.
2️⃣ Sentence
Original:
Overall, in the age group of 0-9, the ratio of both male and female who rode bicycle is similar. Notably, the highest amount of bicycle rider was in the age group of 0-9. The age group of 40-59 had the least interest in riding bicycle. There was a major difference in the both male and female rider in the age group of 10-19.
Correction:
Overall, in the 0–9 age group, the proportions of both males and females who rode bicycles were similar. Notably, this group had the highest rate of bicycle use, while those aged 40–59 showed the least interest. There was a significant gender gap among teenagers aged 10–19.
Mistakes:
“ratio” → not suitable when referring to percentages; use proportion or percentage.
“is similar” → tense error; should be were similar (past).
“amount of bicycle rider” → incorrect; should be number of bicycle riders.
“in the both male and female rider” → redundant “the” and wrong plural; should be between males and females.
Sentence structure needed tightening for fluency and accuracy.
3️⃣ Sentence
Original:
In terms of age group of 0-9, the ratio of people who rode bicycle was highest in both gender-female and male , at 52.5% and 51.2%. However, in the next age group(10-19) the interest to ride bicycle started to fall, at 43.6% female and 25.1% male. Therefore, in the age group of 20-39 the ratio the lowest among all age group, at 13.7% female and 9.3% male.
Correction:
In the 0–9 age group, the percentage of people who rode bicycles was highest for both genders—52.5% for females and 51.2% for males. However, in the 10–19 group, interest in cycling declined to 43.6% for females and 25.1% for males. The 20–39 group recorded the lowest figures overall, at 13.7% and 9.3% respectively.
Mistakes:
“in terms of age group of 0-9” → awkward phrasing; use in the 0–9 age group.
“both gender-female and male” → plural needed; both genders—female and male.
Missing articles (“the ratio the lowest” → should be the ratio was the lowest).
Missing commas and hyphens between numbers.
“Therefore” is misused; better linkers are however or meanwhile.
4️⃣ Sentence
Original:
In the last age group, all people over 60 were not physically fit enough to ride a bike. Therefore, the ratio was low , at 19.8% female and 14.6% male.
Correction:
Among people aged 60 and above, the proportions were relatively low, at 19.8% for females and 14.6% for males.
Mistakes:
“all people over 60 were not physically fit enough” → inaccurate and subjective (IELTS Task 1 should be factual, not opinion-based).
“Therefore” → unnecessary since no cause-effect is shown.
Missing prepositions (“at 19.8% female” → should be for females).
The table demonstrates the proportion of people who interested with rode bicycles in a city in the different age group in the year 2012.
Overall, the majority of female population keen to rode bicycle on 0-9 age group, whereas in the male of 40-59 age group was leas number. Notably, in all age group of female favored to rode bicycles, compared to male people.
According to the female, 52.5% of cycling in the 0-9 age group was liking, while 10-19 age around 9% less than that. Furthermore, the both age of 20-39 and 60+ was the similar portion at 19% in the given period, however, this figure nearly 6% less than of 40-59 age group.
Conversely, the highest number of male people spent on rode bicycles at 51.2%, whereas the 10-19 age was half folded on it. The male population was the least number on 20-39 and 40-59 age group at about 10.8% and 9.3% respectively. Lastly, 60+ male people praper considerably lower number at 14.6 age group.
Original:
The table demonstrates the proportion of people who interested with rode bicycles in a city in the different age group in the year 2012.
Correction:
The table demonstrates the proportion of people who rode bicycles in a city across different age groups in the year 2012.
Mistakes:
“who interested with rode bicycles” → incorrect structure; should be who rode bicycles.
“in the different age group” → should be across different age groups (plural).
2️⃣ Sentence
Original:
Overall, the majority of female population keen to rode bicycle on 0-9 age group, whereas in the male of 40-59 age group was leas number. Notably, in all age group of female favored to rode bicycles, compared to male people.
Correction:
Overall, the majority of the female population was keen to ride bicycles in the 0–9 age group, whereas males aged 40–59 recorded the lowest figures. Notably, females in all age groups were more likely to ride bicycles compared to males.
Mistakes:
“keen to rode” → incorrect verb form; should be keen to ride.
“on 0-9 age group” → wrong preposition; use in the 0–9 age group.
“male of 40-59 age group was leas number” → grammar and word errors; should be males aged 40–59 recorded the lowest figures.
“all age group of female favored to rode” → wrong structure; should be females in all age groups were more likely to ride.
“leas” → spelling error, should be least.
3️⃣ Sentence
Original:
According to the female, 52.5% of cycling in the 0-9 age group was liking, while 10-19 age around 9% less than that. Furthermore, the both age of 20-39 and 60+ was the similar portion at 19% in the given period, however, this figure nearly 6% less than of 40-59 age group.
Correction:
Among females, 52.5% in the 0–9 age group rode bicycles, while the figure for those aged 10–19 was about 9% lower. Furthermore, the 20–39 and 60+ groups showed similar proportions, at around 19%, though both were nearly 6% higher than the 40–59 group.
Mistakes:
“According to the female” → incorrect phrase; should be Among females.
“was liking” → incorrect verb form; should be rode bicycles.
“10-19 age around 9% less” → missing verb and preposition; should be was about 9% lower.
“the both age of 20-39 and 60+ was the similar portion” → wrong word order and agreement; should be the 20–39 and 60+ groups showed similar proportions.
“less than of 40-59 age group” → unnecessary “of”; should be than the 40–59 age group.
Logical data confusion: 19% is higher than 13.7% (40–59), so “less” is wrong; corrected to “higher”.
4️⃣ Sentence
Original:
Conversely, the highest number of male people spent on rode bicycles at 51.2%, whereas the 10-19 age was half folded on it. The male population was the least number on 20-39 and 40-59 age group at about 10.8% and 9.3% respectively. Lastly, 60+ male people praper considerably lower number at 14.6 age group.
Correction:
Conversely, the highest percentage of males who rode bicycles was 51.2% in the 0–9 age group, whereas the 10–19 group had nearly half that rate. The male population recorded the lowest figures in the 20–39 and 40–59 groups, at 10.8% and 9.3% respectively. Lastly, males aged 60 and above accounted for a slightly higher proportion, at 14.6%.
Mistakes:
“spent on rode bicycles” → incorrect; should be who rode bicycles.
“half folded” → incorrect expression; should be about half that.
“the least number on 20-39 and 40-59” → wrong preposition; should be in the 20–39 and 40–59 groups.
“praper” → spelling error, unclear; likely meant “prepared” or “appear”; corrected for meaning.
“14.6 age group” → missing “%” and wrong phrasing; should be at 14.6%.
The table compares the data about the population who road bicycles in one town by age group in 2012.
Overall, Female has the highest ratio of the population road bicycles. However, Male has lowest ratio of the population road bicycles.
Age group 0-9, the highest ratio of Female 52.5%. The expense has higher in male 51.2%, compared to age group 10-19 expended the 43.6% at least 25%age group 20-39 Female percentage 13.7% and male 10.8% respectively
In contrast, age group 40-59 had spent comparatively less 13.7% and 9.3% respectively. Meanwhile age 60+ female was 19.8% and Male was 14.6% Regarding.
Original:
The table compares the data about the population who road bicycles in one town by age group in 2012.
Correction:
The table compares the percentage of people who rode bicycles in a town by age group in 2012.
Mistakes / Feedback:
“population who road bicycles” → incorrect verb form; should be “who rode bicycles.”
“data about the population” → wordy and slightly unclear; “percentage of people” is clearer for a statistics report.
“in one town” → better phrased as “in a town.”
Original:
Overall, Female has the highest ratio of the population road bicycles. However, Male has lowest ratio of the population road bicycles.
Correction:
Overall, females had a higher proportion of the population riding bicycles, while males had a lower proportion.
Mistakes / Feedback:
“Female” → should be plural (“females”).
“ratio of the population road bicycles” → awkward and grammatically incorrect; “proportion of the population riding bicycles” is correct.
“However, Male has lowest ratio” → same issues: “male” → “males,” “has” → past tense “had,” article missing (“the lowest proportion”).
Original:
Age group 0-9, the highest ratio of Female 52.5%. The expense has higher in male 51.2%, compared to age group 10-19 expended the 43.6% at least 25%age group 20-39 Female percentage 13.7% and male 10.8% respectively
Correction:
In the 0-9 age group, females had the highest proportion at 52.5%, while males were slightly lower at 51.2%. In the 10-19 age group, the percentage of females was 43.6%, compared to males at 25%. For the 20-39 age group, females accounted for 13.7% and males 10.8%.
Mistakes / Feedback:
“The expense has higher in male” → unclear, incorrect word; should be “males were slightly lower” or “males accounted for 51.2%.”
“expended the 43.6% at least 25%age group 20-39” → very confusing; numbers need clear reference to age groups.
“Female percentage 13.7% and male 10.8% respectively” → fine, but combine in one clear sentence for flow.
Original:
In contrast, age group 40-59 had spent comparatively less 13.7% and 9.3% respectively. Meanwhile age 60+ female was 19.8% and Male was 14.6% Regarding.
Correction:
In contrast, in the 40-59 age group, females accounted for 13.7% and males 9.3%. Meanwhile, for those aged 60 and above, the figures were 19.8% for females and 14.6% for males.
Mistakes / Feedback:
“had spent comparatively less” → wrong verb; should be “accounted for less.”
“Meanwhile age 60+ female was 19.8% and Male was 14.6% Regarding” → grammatical errors and awkward phrasing; “regarding” is unnecessary.
The given table illustrates the proportion of who rode bicycles in one city through age group in the year 2012.
Overall, it is obvious that the percentage of population rode bicycle in one area female and male in age group in 0-9 were the most, while ratio of population who rode bicycle in specific area male and female in age group 20-39 were the lowest.
In terms of, age group 0-9 ratio of male and female were 51.2 and 52.5, which were the highest among all these proportions. Then age group 10-19 were 43.6 and 23.1 chronologically. After that, age group 20-39 percentages of rode bicycles has not major difference between them.
According to, ratio of rode bicycle in age group 40-59 was the lowest at 13.8 as well as 9.3. Finally, age group 60 plus contributed female and male were 19.8 and 14.6.
The given table illustrates the proportion of who rode bicycles in one city through age group in the year 2012.
Corrected:
The given table illustrates the proportion of people who rode bicycles in one city across different age groups in the year 2012.
Mistakes / Explanations:
“proportion of who rode bicycles” → incorrect grammar. Should be “proportion of people who rode bicycles.”
“through age group” → awkward and incorrect. Use “across different age groups.”
Sentence 2
Original:
Overall, it is obvious that the percentage of population rode bicycle in one area female and male in age group in 0-9 were the most, while ratio of population who rode bicycle in specific area male and female in age group 20-39 were the lowest.
Corrected:
Overall, it is clear that the percentage of males and females who rode bicycles was highest in the 0-9 age group, while it was lowest in the 20-39 age group.
Mistakes / Explanations:
“percentage of population rode bicycle” → missing “who” and singular/plural agreement. Should be “percentage of population who rode bicycles.”
“in one area female and male in age group in 0-9” → unclear and grammatically incorrect. Corrected to “males and females … in the 0-9 age group.”
“ratio of population who rode bicycle in specific area male and female in age group 20-39” → overly complicated and awkward. Simplified.
Verb agreement: “were the most/lowest” → changed to “was highest/lowest” because “percentage” is singular.
Sentence 3
Original:
In terms of, age group 0-9 ratio of male and female were 51.2 and 52.5, which were the highest among all these proportions.
Corrected:
In the 0-9 age group, the percentages of males and females who rode bicycles were 51.2% and 52.5%, the highest among all age groups.
Mistakes / Explanations:
“In terms of,” → unnecessary comma and incorrect usage. Use “In the 0-9 age group,”
“ratio of male and female were” → “percentages of males and females were” is correct.
Numbers should include % to indicate percentages.
“among all these proportions” → simplified to “among all age groups.”
Sentence 4
Original:
Then age group 10-19 were 43.6 and 23.1 chronologically.
Corrected:
In the 10-19 age group, the percentages were 43.6% for males and 23.1% for females.
Mistakes / Explanations:
“Then age group 10-19 were” → grammatically incorrect. Corrected to “In the 10-19 age group, the percentages were.”
“chronologically” → incorrect usage. Percentages are not chronological. Removed.
Numbers should specify gender to avoid confusion.
Sentence 5
Original:
After that, age group 20-39 percentages of rode bicycles has not major difference between them.
Corrected:
In the 20-39 age group, there was no significant difference between males and females in the percentages of people who rode bicycles.
Mistakes / Explanations:
“percentages of rode bicycles” → missing “who”. Correct: “percentages of people who rode bicycles.”
“has not major difference” → wrong grammar. Should be “there was no significant difference.”
Subject-verb agreement corrected: “percentages … were” or rephrased to “there was no significant difference.”
Sentence 6
Original:
According to, ratio of rode bicycle in age group 40-59 was the lowest at 13.8 as well as 9.3.
Corrected:
In the 40-59 age group, the percentages of males and females who rode bicycles were the lowest, at 13.8% and 9.3%, respectively.
Mistakes / Explanations:
“According to,” → incorrect; remove.
“ratio of rode bicycle” → grammatically wrong. Correct: “percentages of males and females who rode bicycles.”
“as well as” → unclear; use “respectively” for clarity.
Missing % symbols.
Sentence 7
Original:
Finally, age group 60 plus contributed female and male were 19.8 and 14.6.
Corrected:
Finally, in the 60+ age group, the percentages for females and males were 19.8% and 14.6%, respectively.
Mistakes / Explanations:
“age group 60 plus contributed female and male” → incorrect structure. Correct: “in the 60+ age group, the percentages for females and males.”
Missing % symbols.
“respectively” clarifies which number belongs to which gender.
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Sentence 1
Original:
The given table illustrates the proportion of who rode bicycles in one city through age group in the year 2012.
Corrected:
The given table illustrates the proportion of people who rode bicycles in one city across different age groups in the year 2012.
Mistakes / Explanations:
“proportion of who rode bicycles” → incorrect grammar. Should be “proportion of people who rode bicycles.”
“through age group” → awkward and incorrect. Use “across different age groups.”
Sentence 2
Original:
Overall, it is obvious that the percentage of population rode bicycle in one area female and male in age group in 0-9 were the most, while ratio of population who rode bicycle in specific area male and female in age group 20-39 were the lowest.
Corrected:
Overall, it is clear that the percentage of males and females who rode bicycles was highest in the 0-9 age group, while it was lowest in the 20-39 age group.
Mistakes / Explanations:
“percentage of population rode bicycle” → missing “who” and singular/plural agreement. Should be “percentage of population who rode bicycles.”
“in one area female and male in age group in 0-9” → unclear and grammatically incorrect. Corrected to “males and females … in the 0-9 age group.”
“ratio of population who rode bicycle in specific area male and female in age group 20-39” → overly complicated and awkward. Simplified.
Verb agreement: “were the most/lowest” → changed to “was highest/lowest” because “percentage” is singular.
Sentence 3
Original:
In terms of, age group 0-9 ratio of male and female were 51.2 and 52.5, which were the highest among all these proportions.
Corrected:
In the 0-9 age group, the percentages of males and females who rode bicycles were 51.2% and 52.5%, the highest among all age groups.
Mistakes / Explanations:
“In terms of,” → unnecessary comma and incorrect usage. Use “In the 0-9 age group,”
“ratio of male and female were” → “percentages of males and females were” is correct.
Numbers should include % to indicate percentages.
“among all these proportions” → simplified to “among all age groups.”
Sentence 4
Original:
Then age group 10-19 were 43.6 and 23.1 chronologically.
Corrected:
In the 10-19 age group, the percentages were 43.6% for males and 23.1% for females.
Mistakes / Explanations:
“Then age group 10-19 were” → grammatically incorrect. Corrected to “In the 10-19 age group, the percentages were.”
“chronologically” → incorrect usage. Percentages are not chronological. Removed.
Numbers should specify gender to avoid confusion.
Sentence 5
Original:
After that, age group 20-39 percentages of rode bicycles has not major difference between them.
Corrected:
In the 20-39 age group, there was no significant difference between males and females in the percentages of people who rode bicycles.
Mistakes / Explanations:
“percentages of rode bicycles” → missing “who”. Correct: “percentages of people who rode bicycles.”
“has not major difference” → wrong grammar. Should be “there was no significant difference.”
Subject-verb agreement corrected: “percentages … were” or rephrased to “there was no significant difference.”
Sentence 6
Original:
According to, ratio of rode bicycle in age group 40-59 was the lowest at 13.8 as well as 9.3.
Corrected:
In the 40-59 age group, the percentages of males and females who rode bicycles were the lowest, at 13.8% and 9.3%, respectively.
Mistakes / Explanations:
“According to,” → incorrect; remove.
“ratio of rode bicycle” → grammatically wrong. Correct: “percentages of males and females who rode bicycles.”
“as well as” → unclear; use “respectively” for clarity.
Missing % symbols.
Sentence 7
Original:
Finally, age group 60 plus contributed female and male were 19.8 and 14.6.
Corrected:
Finally, in the 60+ age group, the percentages for females and males were 19.8% and 14.6%, respectively.
Mistakes / Explanations:
“age group 60 plus contributed female and male” → incorrect structure. Correct: “in the 60+ age group, the percentages for females and males.”
Missing % symbols.
“respectively” clarifies which number belongs to which gender.
The table chart provide the data of the different age group people who
use the most road bicycles in the city in the 2012 year.
overall, the highest using the cycles in female age group while , the lowest using the bicycle in male .Moreover 0-9 age group using about simillar .
In 0-9 age group the highest number of using bicycle 52.5 female. while this followed by 10-19 and 60+ age group number at 43.6 and 19.8. moreover in 20-39 age group at 18.2highest number using female compare the 40-59 age group.
In the male age group the highest number inabout same age group 0-9 at 51
The table chart provide the data of the different age group people whouse the most road bicycles in the city in the 2012 year.
Corrected:
The table provides data on the number of people in different age groups who rode bicycles in a city in 2012.
Mistakes / Explanations:
“table chart” → redundant; just “table” is enough.
“provide” → subject-verb agreement: “provides.”
“the different age group people whouse the most road bicycles” → very awkward. Corrected to “people in different age groups who rode bicycles.”
“in the 2012 year” → wrong article; correct: “in 2012.”
Sentence 2
Original:
overall, the highest using the cycles in female age group while , the lowest using the bicycle in male .Moreover 0-9 age group using about simillar .
Corrected:
Overall, cycling was highest among females, while it was lowest among males. In the 0-9 age group, the percentages for both genders were almost the same.
Mistakes / Explanations:
“the highest using the cycles in female age group” → ungrammatical; should be “cycling was highest among females.”
“while , the lowest using the bicycle in male” → wrong grammar and punctuation; corrected to “while it was lowest among males.”
“0-9 age group using about simillar” → incorrect structure; correct: “the percentages for both genders were almost the same.”
“simillar” → spelling mistake.
Sentence 3
Original:
In 0-9 age group the highest number of using bicycle 52.5 female. while this followed by 10-19 and 60+ age group number at 43.6 and 19.8. moreover in 20-39 age group at 18.2highest number using female compare the 40-59 age group.
Corrected:
In the 0-9 age group, the percentage of females who rode bicycles was 52.5%. This was followed by 43.6% in the 10-19 age group and 19.8% in the 60+ group. In the 20-39 age group, 18.2% of females rode bicycles, higher than in the 40-59 age group.
Mistakes / Explanations:
“the highest number of using bicycle 52.5 female” → grammatically incorrect; should be “the percentage of females who rode bicycles was 52.5%.”
“while this followed by 10-19 and 60+ age group number at 43.6 and 19.8” → incorrect connectors; corrected to “This was followed by 43.6% in 10-19 and 19.8% in 60+.”
“moreover in 20-39 age group at 18.2highest number using female compare the 40-59 age group” → ungrammatical; corrected to “In the 20-39 age group, 18.2% of females rode bicycles, higher than in the 40-59 age group.”
Sentence 4
Original:
In the male age group the highest number inabout same age group 0-9 at 51
Corrected:
For males, the highest percentage was also in the 0-9 age group, at 51%.
Mistakes / Explanations:
“inabout same age group” → spelling/grammar mistake; corrected to “also in the 0-9 age group.”
The table illustrate the percentage of the people who rode bicycle in one town by age group in the year 2012.
Overall, children’s at the age group of (0-9) rode cycle most .Notably, 0-9 ages children’s had used bicycle at almost same ratio .there was a major difference in the age group of teenagers ,where as females led in the ratio ,males had less proneness on this field at that age .
In terms of the age group of (0-9), girls and boys both share the stage almost equally, the figure is approximately 52%. Among the teenagers ,female was used bicycle the most with 43.6%,while male used this with a lower figure at 25.1%.Middle aged people rode bicycle especially for maintain their fitness, the females were more concerned that the males, the ratio ranging between 18.2% for females and 10,8 % for males.
In the age group of 45-59, they loved to ride bicycle in the early morning and here also females stand with the highest at 13.7% and males was T 9.35
1️⃣ Sentence
Original:
The table illustrate the percentage of the people who rode bicycle in one town by age group in the year 2012.
Correction:
The table illustrates the percentage of people who rode bicycles in one town by age group in the year 2012.
Mistakes:
“illustrate” → should be illustrates (subject-verb agreement: singular subject “table”).
“the people” → unnecessary article “the”.
“bicycle” → should be bicycles (plural form for general statement).
2️⃣ Sentence
Original:
Overall, children’s at the age group of (0-9) rode cycle most .Notably, 0-9 ages children’s had used bicycle at almost same ratio .there was a major difference in the age group of teenagers ,where as females led in the ratio ,males had less proneness on this field at that age .
Correction:
Overall, children in the age group of (0-9) rode cycles the most. Notably, 0–9-year-old children used bicycles at almost the same ratio. There was a major difference in the teenage group, whereas females led in the ratio and males had less proneness to ride bicycles at that age.
Mistakes:
“children’s” → incorrect; use children (no apostrophe).
“rode cycle most” → missing article; should be rode cycles the most.
“0-9 ages children’s” → wrong word order; should be 0–9-year-old children.
“.there” → new sentence should start with a capital letter (There).
“where as” → should be one word: whereas.
3️⃣ Sentence
Original:
In terms of the age group of (0-9), girls and boys both share the stage almost equally, the figure is approximately 52%.
Correction:
In terms of the age group of (0–9), girls and boys both shared the stage almost equally; the figure was approximately 52%.
Mistakes:
“share” → wrong tense; should be shared (past).
“is” → should be was (past tense for 2012 data).
Comma splice (two sentences joined by a comma) → use semicolon or full stop.
4️⃣ Sentence
Original:
Among the teenagers ,female was used bicycle the most with 43.6%,while male used this with a lower figure at 25.1%.
Correction:
Among the teenagers, females used bicycles the most with 43.6%, while males used them with a lower figure at 25.1%.
Mistakes:
“female was used bicycle” → incorrect structure; should be females used bicycles.
“male used this” → unclear pronoun; should be males used them (refers to bicycles).
Missing plural forms (female → females, male → males).
5️⃣ Sentence
Original:
Middle aged people rode bicycle especially for maintain their fitness, the females were more concerned that the males, the ratio ranging between 18.2% for females and 10,8 % for males.
Correction:
Middle-aged people rode bicycles especially to maintain their fitness; females were more concerned than males, with the ratio ranging between 18.2% for females and 10.8% for males.
Mistakes:
“Middle aged” → should be Middle-aged (hyphenated).
“for maintain” → incorrect; should be to maintain (infinitive form).
“that the males” → should be than the males (comparison).
“10,8 %” → comma instead of a decimal point; should be 10.8%.
Comma splice → should use a semicolon or split into two sentences.
6️⃣ Sentence
Original:
In the age group of 45-59, they loved to ride bicycle in the early morning and here also females stand with the highest at 13.7% and males was T 9.35
Correction:
In the age group of 45–59, they loved to ride bicycles in the early morning, and here also females stood at the highest at 13.7%, while males were at 9.35%.
Mistakes:
“bicycle” → should be plural bicycles.
“stand” → wrong tense; should be stood (past).
“males was” → should be males were (plural).
“T 9.35” → unclear; probably a typo → at 9.35%.
Missing punctuation at end.
Band…6.0
The table chart provides data of the population who rode bicycles in one town by age group in the year 2012.
Overall, all the age of group spent most population in town both male and female .Most are female age of group 0-9(52.5%) are mostly populated. At the age of male group 0-9(51.2%) range between ae probably similar. There are major difference between both male and female rider in the age of group 10-19.
in terms of group of female 0-9 spent the most at 52.5%. The expenditure was also higher in male group (52.5%).In the age of male group 40-59 which expended the least (9.3).
1️⃣ Sentence
Original:
The table chart provides data of the population who rode bicycles in one town by age group in the year 2012.
Correction:
The table provides data about the percentage of people who rode bicycles in one town by age group in the year 2012.
Mistakes:
“table chart” → redundant; just “table” or “chart” is enough.
“data of” → should be data about.
“population” → unclear; should be people or percentage of people (since it’s about proportions, not total population).
“bicycles” → plural for general meaning.
2️⃣ Sentence
Original:
Overall, all the age of group spent most population in town both male and female .Most are female age of group 0-9(52.5%) are mostly populated. At the age of male group 0-9(51.2%) range between ae probably similar. There are major difference between both male and female rider in the age of group 10-19.
Correction:
Overall, all age groups included both males and females who rode bicycles, but the highest proportion was among females aged 0–9 (52.5%). Males of the same age group (51.2%) showed a similar rate. However, there was a major difference between male and female riders in the 10–19 age group.
Mistakes:
“all the age of group spent most population” → incorrect meaning; should be all age groups included both genders.
“in town” → unnecessary repetition (already mentioned earlier).
“Most are female age of group” → incorrect structure; should be the highest proportion was among females aged 0–9.
“range between ae probably similar” → unclear phrase; correct is showed a similar rate.
“There are” → should be There was (past tense for 2012).
“rider” → should be plural riders.
Punctuation missing after sentences.
3️⃣ Sentence
Original:
in terms of group of female 0-9 spent the most at 52.5%. The expenditure was also higher in male group (52.5%).In the age of male group 40-59 which expended the least (9.3).
Correction:
In terms of age groups, females aged 0–9 recorded the highest figure at 52.5%. The percentage for males of the same age group was also high at 51.2%. By contrast, males aged 40–59 showed the lowest proportion at 9.3%.
Mistakes:
“in terms of group of female” → awkward; should be In terms of age groups, females aged 0–9.
“spent the most” → wrong word; should be recorded the highest figure (no money is spent here).
“The expenditure was also higher” → wrong word; expenditure refers to spending money.
“male group (52.5%)” → should be males of the same age group (51.2%).
“which expended the least” → wrong word; should be showed the lowest proportion.
Missing subject in “In the age of male group 40–59” → incomplete sentence.
Band…5.5
The table compares the data about the population rode bicycles in one town by age group in the year 2012.
Overall, Female has the highest percentage of the population rode bicycles. However, Male has lowest percentage of the population rode bicycles.
Age group 0-9, the highest percentage of Female 52.5% . the expenditure has higher in male 51.2%,compared to age group 10-19 which expended the 43.6%.at least 25.1% age group 20-39 Female percentage 13.7%and Male 10.8 respectively .
in contrast , Age group 40-59 had spent comparatively less 13.7% and 9.3 respectively .Meanwhile age group 60+Female group percentage 19.8 and Male 14.6 .Regarding the table Female was 5 sectors was the highest percentage of population rode bicycles .
1️⃣ Sentence
Original:
The table compares the data about the population rode bicycles in one town by age group in the year 2012.
Correction:
The table compares the percentage of people who rode bicycles in one town by age group in the year 2012.
Mistakes:
“data about the population rode” → grammatically wrong; should be percentage of people who rode.
“population” → unnecessary since it’s about percentage, not total population.
2️⃣ Sentence
Original:
Overall, Female has the highest percentage of the population rode bicycles. However, Male has lowest percentage of the population rode bicycles.
Correction:
Overall, females had the highest percentage of bicycle riders, while males recorded the lowest proportions across all age groups.
Mistakes:
“Female has” → wrong tense; should be females had (past).
“the population rode bicycles” → incorrect structure; should be percentage of bicycle riders.
“Male has lowest” → should be males recorded the lowest (plural noun + correct tense).
Repetition of “population rode bicycles” – needs paraphrasing.
3️⃣ Sentence
Original:
Age group 0-9, the highest percentage of Female 52.5% . the expenditure has higher in male 51.2%,compared to age group 10-19 which expended the 43.6%.at least 25.1% age group 20-39 Female percentage 13.7%and Male 10.8 respectively .
Correction:
In the 0–9 age group, females had the highest proportion at 52.5%, while males showed a similar figure at 51.2%. Among teenagers (10–19), females made up 43.6%, whereas males accounted for only 25.1%. In the 20–39 age group, female and male rates were 13.7% and 10.8% respectively.
Mistakes:
Missing prepositions (“In the 0–9 age group”).
“the expenditure has higher” → wrong word and tense; use while males showed a similar figure.
“expended” → wrong; “made up” or “accounted for.”
“At least 25.1% age group 20–39 Female percentage 13.7%and Male 10.8” → confusing structure; needs proper sentence separation and punctuation.
Missing commas and conjunctions.
4️⃣ Sentence
Original:
in contrast , Age group 40-59 had spent comparatively less 13.7% and 9.3 respectively .Meanwhile age group 60+Female group percentage 19.8 and Male 14.6 .Regarding the table Female was 5 sectors was the highest percentage of population rode bicycles .
Correction:
In contrast, the 40–59 age group recorded lower figures, at 13.7% for females and 9.3% for males. Meanwhile, among those aged 60 and above, 19.8% of females and 14.6% of males rode bicycles. Overall, females had the highest percentage of bicycle users in all five age groups.
Mistakes:
“had spent” → incorrect (no spending); should be recorded or showed.
“comparatively less 13.7% and 9.3 respectively” → missing “at” before numbers.
“Meanwhile age group 60+Female group percentage 19.8 and Male 14.6” → poor structure; needs “Among those aged 60 and above…”
“Regarding the table Female was 5 sectors was the highest percentage” → unclear; should be females had the highest percentage in all five groups.
Capitalization and punctuation errors.
Band… 5.5
The table describes the ratio of the population who rode bicycles in one town by age group in the year 2012.
Overall, in the age group of 0-9, the ratio of both male and female who rode bicycle is similar. Notably, the highest amount of bicycle rider was in the age group of 0-9. The age group of 40-59 had the least interest in riding bicycle. There was a major difference in the both male and female rider in the age group of 10-19.
In terms of age group of 0-9, the ratio of people who rode bicycle was highest in both gender-female and male , at 52.5% and 51.2%. However, in the next age group(10-19) the interest to ride bicycle started to fall, at 43.6% female and 25.1% male. Therefore, in the age group of 20-39 the ratio the lowest among all age group, at 13.7% female and 9.3% male.
In the last age group, all people over 60 were not physically fit enough to ride a bike. Therefore, the ratio was low , at 19.8% female and 14.6% male.
1️⃣ Sentence
Original:
The table describes the ratio of the population who rode bicycles in one town by age group in the year 2012.
Correction:
The table illustrates the percentage of people who rode bicycles in one town, categorized by age group, in the year 2012.
Mistakes:
“describes” → better replaced with illustrates or shows (more formal for IELTS Task 1).
“ratio of the population” → wrong phrasing; should be percentage of people.
2️⃣ Sentence
Original:
Overall, in the age group of 0-9, the ratio of both male and female who rode bicycle is similar. Notably, the highest amount of bicycle rider was in the age group of 0-9. The age group of 40-59 had the least interest in riding bicycle. There was a major difference in the both male and female rider in the age group of 10-19.
Correction:
Overall, in the 0–9 age group, the proportions of both males and females who rode bicycles were similar. Notably, this group had the highest rate of bicycle use, while those aged 40–59 showed the least interest. There was a significant gender gap among teenagers aged 10–19.
Mistakes:
“ratio” → not suitable when referring to percentages; use proportion or percentage.
“is similar” → tense error; should be were similar (past).
“amount of bicycle rider” → incorrect; should be number of bicycle riders.
“in the both male and female rider” → redundant “the” and wrong plural; should be between males and females.
Sentence structure needed tightening for fluency and accuracy.
3️⃣ Sentence
Original:
In terms of age group of 0-9, the ratio of people who rode bicycle was highest in both gender-female and male , at 52.5% and 51.2%. However, in the next age group(10-19) the interest to ride bicycle started to fall, at 43.6% female and 25.1% male. Therefore, in the age group of 20-39 the ratio the lowest among all age group, at 13.7% female and 9.3% male.
Correction:
In the 0–9 age group, the percentage of people who rode bicycles was highest for both genders—52.5% for females and 51.2% for males. However, in the 10–19 group, interest in cycling declined to 43.6% for females and 25.1% for males. The 20–39 group recorded the lowest figures overall, at 13.7% and 9.3% respectively.
Mistakes:
“in terms of age group of 0-9” → awkward phrasing; use in the 0–9 age group.
“both gender-female and male” → plural needed; both genders—female and male.
Missing articles (“the ratio the lowest” → should be the ratio was the lowest).
Missing commas and hyphens between numbers.
“Therefore” is misused; better linkers are however or meanwhile.
4️⃣ Sentence
Original:
In the last age group, all people over 60 were not physically fit enough to ride a bike. Therefore, the ratio was low , at 19.8% female and 14.6% male.
Correction:
Among people aged 60 and above, the proportions were relatively low, at 19.8% for females and 14.6% for males.
Mistakes:
“all people over 60 were not physically fit enough” → inaccurate and subjective (IELTS Task 1 should be factual, not opinion-based).
“Therefore” → unnecessary since no cause-effect is shown.
Missing prepositions (“at 19.8% female” → should be for females).
Band 6.5
The table demonstrates the proportion of people who interested with rode bicycles in a city in the different age group in the year 2012.
Overall, the majority of female population keen to rode bicycle on 0-9 age group, whereas in the male of 40-59 age group was leas number. Notably, in all age group of female favored to rode bicycles, compared to male people.
According to the female, 52.5% of cycling in the 0-9 age group was liking, while 10-19 age around 9% less than that. Furthermore, the both age of 20-39 and 60+ was the similar portion at 19% in the given period, however, this figure nearly 6% less than of 40-59 age group.
Conversely, the highest number of male people spent on rode bicycles at 51.2%, whereas the 10-19 age was half folded on it. The male population was the least number on 20-39 and 40-59 age group at about 10.8% and 9.3% respectively. Lastly, 60+ male people praper considerably lower number at 14.6 age group.
1️⃣ Sentence
Original:
The table demonstrates the proportion of people who interested with rode bicycles in a city in the different age group in the year 2012.
Correction:
The table demonstrates the proportion of people who rode bicycles in a city across different age groups in the year 2012.
Mistakes:
“who interested with rode bicycles” → incorrect structure; should be who rode bicycles.
“in the different age group” → should be across different age groups (plural).
2️⃣ Sentence
Original:
Overall, the majority of female population keen to rode bicycle on 0-9 age group, whereas in the male of 40-59 age group was leas number. Notably, in all age group of female favored to rode bicycles, compared to male people.
Correction:
Overall, the majority of the female population was keen to ride bicycles in the 0–9 age group, whereas males aged 40–59 recorded the lowest figures. Notably, females in all age groups were more likely to ride bicycles compared to males.
Mistakes:
“keen to rode” → incorrect verb form; should be keen to ride.
“on 0-9 age group” → wrong preposition; use in the 0–9 age group.
“male of 40-59 age group was leas number” → grammar and word errors; should be males aged 40–59 recorded the lowest figures.
“all age group of female favored to rode” → wrong structure; should be females in all age groups were more likely to ride.
“leas” → spelling error, should be least.
3️⃣ Sentence
Original:
According to the female, 52.5% of cycling in the 0-9 age group was liking, while 10-19 age around 9% less than that. Furthermore, the both age of 20-39 and 60+ was the similar portion at 19% in the given period, however, this figure nearly 6% less than of 40-59 age group.
Correction:
Among females, 52.5% in the 0–9 age group rode bicycles, while the figure for those aged 10–19 was about 9% lower. Furthermore, the 20–39 and 60+ groups showed similar proportions, at around 19%, though both were nearly 6% higher than the 40–59 group.
Mistakes:
“According to the female” → incorrect phrase; should be Among females.
“was liking” → incorrect verb form; should be rode bicycles.
“10-19 age around 9% less” → missing verb and preposition; should be was about 9% lower.
“the both age of 20-39 and 60+ was the similar portion” → wrong word order and agreement; should be the 20–39 and 60+ groups showed similar proportions.
“less than of 40-59 age group” → unnecessary “of”; should be than the 40–59 age group.
Logical data confusion: 19% is higher than 13.7% (40–59), so “less” is wrong; corrected to “higher”.
4️⃣ Sentence
Original:
Conversely, the highest number of male people spent on rode bicycles at 51.2%, whereas the 10-19 age was half folded on it. The male population was the least number on 20-39 and 40-59 age group at about 10.8% and 9.3% respectively. Lastly, 60+ male people praper considerably lower number at 14.6 age group.
Correction:
Conversely, the highest percentage of males who rode bicycles was 51.2% in the 0–9 age group, whereas the 10–19 group had nearly half that rate. The male population recorded the lowest figures in the 20–39 and 40–59 groups, at 10.8% and 9.3% respectively. Lastly, males aged 60 and above accounted for a slightly higher proportion, at 14.6%.
Mistakes:
“spent on rode bicycles” → incorrect; should be who rode bicycles.
“half folded” → incorrect expression; should be about half that.
“the least number on 20-39 and 40-59” → wrong preposition; should be in the 20–39 and 40–59 groups.
“praper” → spelling error, unclear; likely meant “prepared” or “appear”; corrected for meaning.
“14.6 age group” → missing “%” and wrong phrasing; should be at 14.6%.
Band…5.5
The table compares the data about the population who road bicycles in one town by age group in 2012.
Overall, Female has the highest ratio of the population road bicycles. However, Male has lowest ratio of the population road bicycles.
Age group 0-9, the highest ratio of Female 52.5%. The expense has higher in male 51.2%, compared to age group 10-19 expended the 43.6% at least 25%age group 20-39 Female percentage 13.7% and male 10.8% respectively
In contrast, age group 40-59 had spent comparatively less 13.7% and 9.3% respectively. Meanwhile age 60+ female was 19.8% and Male was 14.6% Regarding.
Original:
The table compares the data about the population who road bicycles in one town by age group in 2012.
Correction:
The table compares the percentage of people who rode bicycles in a town by age group in 2012.
Mistakes / Feedback:
“population who road bicycles” → incorrect verb form; should be “who rode bicycles.”
“data about the population” → wordy and slightly unclear; “percentage of people” is clearer for a statistics report.
“in one town” → better phrased as “in a town.”
Original:
Overall, Female has the highest ratio of the population road bicycles. However, Male has lowest ratio of the population road bicycles.
Correction:
Overall, females had a higher proportion of the population riding bicycles, while males had a lower proportion.
Mistakes / Feedback:
“Female” → should be plural (“females”).
“ratio of the population road bicycles” → awkward and grammatically incorrect; “proportion of the population riding bicycles” is correct.
“However, Male has lowest ratio” → same issues: “male” → “males,” “has” → past tense “had,” article missing (“the lowest proportion”).
Original:
Age group 0-9, the highest ratio of Female 52.5%. The expense has higher in male 51.2%, compared to age group 10-19 expended the 43.6% at least 25%age group 20-39 Female percentage 13.7% and male 10.8% respectively
Correction:
In the 0-9 age group, females had the highest proportion at 52.5%, while males were slightly lower at 51.2%. In the 10-19 age group, the percentage of females was 43.6%, compared to males at 25%. For the 20-39 age group, females accounted for 13.7% and males 10.8%.
Mistakes / Feedback:
“The expense has higher in male” → unclear, incorrect word; should be “males were slightly lower” or “males accounted for 51.2%.”
“expended the 43.6% at least 25%age group 20-39” → very confusing; numbers need clear reference to age groups.
“Female percentage 13.7% and male 10.8% respectively” → fine, but combine in one clear sentence for flow.
Original:
In contrast, age group 40-59 had spent comparatively less 13.7% and 9.3% respectively. Meanwhile age 60+ female was 19.8% and Male was 14.6% Regarding.
Correction:
In contrast, in the 40-59 age group, females accounted for 13.7% and males 9.3%. Meanwhile, for those aged 60 and above, the figures were 19.8% for females and 14.6% for males.
Mistakes / Feedback:
“had spent comparatively less” → wrong verb; should be “accounted for less.”
“Meanwhile age 60+ female was 19.8% and Male was 14.6% Regarding” → grammatical errors and awkward phrasing; “regarding” is unnecessary.
Band…5.5
The given table illustrates the proportion of who rode bicycles in one city through age group in the year 2012.
Overall, it is obvious that the percentage of population rode bicycle in one area female and male in age group in 0-9 were the most, while ratio of population who rode bicycle in specific area male and female in age group 20-39 were the lowest.
In terms of, age group 0-9 ratio of male and female were 51.2 and 52.5, which were the highest among all these proportions. Then age group 10-19 were 43.6 and 23.1 chronologically. After that, age group 20-39 percentages of rode bicycles has not major difference between them.
According to, ratio of rode bicycle in age group 40-59 was the lowest at 13.8 as well as 9.3. Finally, age group 60 plus contributed female and male were 19.8 and 14.6.
Sentence 1
Original:
The given table illustrates the proportion of who rode bicycles in one city through age group in the year 2012.
Corrected:
The given table illustrates the proportion of people who rode bicycles in one city across different age groups in the year 2012.
Mistakes / Explanations:
“proportion of who rode bicycles” → incorrect grammar. Should be “proportion of people who rode bicycles.”
“through age group” → awkward and incorrect. Use “across different age groups.”
Sentence 2
Original:
Overall, it is obvious that the percentage of population rode bicycle in one area female and male in age group in 0-9 were the most, while ratio of population who rode bicycle in specific area male and female in age group 20-39 were the lowest.
Corrected:
Overall, it is clear that the percentage of males and females who rode bicycles was highest in the 0-9 age group, while it was lowest in the 20-39 age group.
Mistakes / Explanations:
“percentage of population rode bicycle” → missing “who” and singular/plural agreement. Should be “percentage of population who rode bicycles.”
“in one area female and male in age group in 0-9” → unclear and grammatically incorrect. Corrected to “males and females … in the 0-9 age group.”
“ratio of population who rode bicycle in specific area male and female in age group 20-39” → overly complicated and awkward. Simplified.
Verb agreement: “were the most/lowest” → changed to “was highest/lowest” because “percentage” is singular.
Sentence 3
Original:
In terms of, age group 0-9 ratio of male and female were 51.2 and 52.5, which were the highest among all these proportions.
Corrected:
In the 0-9 age group, the percentages of males and females who rode bicycles were 51.2% and 52.5%, the highest among all age groups.
Mistakes / Explanations:
“In terms of,” → unnecessary comma and incorrect usage. Use “In the 0-9 age group,”
“ratio of male and female were” → “percentages of males and females were” is correct.
Numbers should include % to indicate percentages.
“among all these proportions” → simplified to “among all age groups.”
Sentence 4
Original:
Then age group 10-19 were 43.6 and 23.1 chronologically.
Corrected:
In the 10-19 age group, the percentages were 43.6% for males and 23.1% for females.
Mistakes / Explanations:
“Then age group 10-19 were” → grammatically incorrect. Corrected to “In the 10-19 age group, the percentages were.”
“chronologically” → incorrect usage. Percentages are not chronological. Removed.
Numbers should specify gender to avoid confusion.
Sentence 5
Original:
After that, age group 20-39 percentages of rode bicycles has not major difference between them.
Corrected:
In the 20-39 age group, there was no significant difference between males and females in the percentages of people who rode bicycles.
Mistakes / Explanations:
“percentages of rode bicycles” → missing “who”. Correct: “percentages of people who rode bicycles.”
“has not major difference” → wrong grammar. Should be “there was no significant difference.”
Subject-verb agreement corrected: “percentages … were” or rephrased to “there was no significant difference.”
Sentence 6
Original:
According to, ratio of rode bicycle in age group 40-59 was the lowest at 13.8 as well as 9.3.
Corrected:
In the 40-59 age group, the percentages of males and females who rode bicycles were the lowest, at 13.8% and 9.3%, respectively.
Mistakes / Explanations:
“According to,” → incorrect; remove.
“ratio of rode bicycle” → grammatically wrong. Correct: “percentages of males and females who rode bicycles.”
“as well as” → unclear; use “respectively” for clarity.
Missing % symbols.
Sentence 7
Original:
Finally, age group 60 plus contributed female and male were 19.8 and 14.6.
Corrected:
Finally, in the 60+ age group, the percentages for females and males were 19.8% and 14.6%, respectively.
Mistakes / Explanations:
“age group 60 plus contributed female and male” → incorrect structure. Correct: “in the 60+ age group, the percentages for females and males.”
Missing % symbols.
“respectively” clarifies which number belongs to which gender.
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Sentence 1
Original:
The given table illustrates the proportion of who rode bicycles in one city through age group in the year 2012.
Corrected:
The given table illustrates the proportion of people who rode bicycles in one city across different age groups in the year 2012.
Mistakes / Explanations:
“proportion of who rode bicycles” → incorrect grammar. Should be “proportion of people who rode bicycles.”
“through age group” → awkward and incorrect. Use “across different age groups.”
Sentence 2
Original:
Overall, it is obvious that the percentage of population rode bicycle in one area female and male in age group in 0-9 were the most, while ratio of population who rode bicycle in specific area male and female in age group 20-39 were the lowest.
Corrected:
Overall, it is clear that the percentage of males and females who rode bicycles was highest in the 0-9 age group, while it was lowest in the 20-39 age group.
Mistakes / Explanations:
“percentage of population rode bicycle” → missing “who” and singular/plural agreement. Should be “percentage of population who rode bicycles.”
“in one area female and male in age group in 0-9” → unclear and grammatically incorrect. Corrected to “males and females … in the 0-9 age group.”
“ratio of population who rode bicycle in specific area male and female in age group 20-39” → overly complicated and awkward. Simplified.
Verb agreement: “were the most/lowest” → changed to “was highest/lowest” because “percentage” is singular.
Sentence 3
Original:
In terms of, age group 0-9 ratio of male and female were 51.2 and 52.5, which were the highest among all these proportions.
Corrected:
In the 0-9 age group, the percentages of males and females who rode bicycles were 51.2% and 52.5%, the highest among all age groups.
Mistakes / Explanations:
“In terms of,” → unnecessary comma and incorrect usage. Use “In the 0-9 age group,”
“ratio of male and female were” → “percentages of males and females were” is correct.
Numbers should include % to indicate percentages.
“among all these proportions” → simplified to “among all age groups.”
Sentence 4
Original:
Then age group 10-19 were 43.6 and 23.1 chronologically.
Corrected:
In the 10-19 age group, the percentages were 43.6% for males and 23.1% for females.
Mistakes / Explanations:
“Then age group 10-19 were” → grammatically incorrect. Corrected to “In the 10-19 age group, the percentages were.”
“chronologically” → incorrect usage. Percentages are not chronological. Removed.
Numbers should specify gender to avoid confusion.
Sentence 5
Original:
After that, age group 20-39 percentages of rode bicycles has not major difference between them.
Corrected:
In the 20-39 age group, there was no significant difference between males and females in the percentages of people who rode bicycles.
Mistakes / Explanations:
“percentages of rode bicycles” → missing “who”. Correct: “percentages of people who rode bicycles.”
“has not major difference” → wrong grammar. Should be “there was no significant difference.”
Subject-verb agreement corrected: “percentages … were” or rephrased to “there was no significant difference.”
Sentence 6
Original:
According to, ratio of rode bicycle in age group 40-59 was the lowest at 13.8 as well as 9.3.
Corrected:
In the 40-59 age group, the percentages of males and females who rode bicycles were the lowest, at 13.8% and 9.3%, respectively.
Mistakes / Explanations:
“According to,” → incorrect; remove.
“ratio of rode bicycle” → grammatically wrong. Correct: “percentages of males and females who rode bicycles.”
“as well as” → unclear; use “respectively” for clarity.
Missing % symbols.
Sentence 7
Original:
Finally, age group 60 plus contributed female and male were 19.8 and 14.6.
Corrected:
Finally, in the 60+ age group, the percentages for females and males were 19.8% and 14.6%, respectively.
Mistakes / Explanations:
“age group 60 plus contributed female and male” → incorrect structure. Correct: “in the 60+ age group, the percentages for females and males.”
Missing % symbols.
“respectively” clarifies which number belongs to which gender.
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The table chart provide the data of the different age group people who
use the most road bicycles in the city in the 2012 year.
overall, the highest using the cycles in female age group while , the lowest using the bicycle in male .Moreover 0-9 age group using about simillar .
In 0-9 age group the highest number of using bicycle 52.5 female. while this followed by 10-19 and 60+ age group number at 43.6 and 19.8. moreover in 20-39 age group at 18.2highest number using female compare the 40-59 age group.
In the male age group the highest number inabout same age group 0-9 at 51
Sentence 1
Original:
The table chart provide the data of the different age group people whouse the most road bicycles in the city in the 2012 year.
Corrected:
The table provides data on the number of people in different age groups who rode bicycles in a city in 2012.
Mistakes / Explanations:
“table chart” → redundant; just “table” is enough.
“provide” → subject-verb agreement: “provides.”
“the different age group people whouse the most road bicycles” → very awkward. Corrected to “people in different age groups who rode bicycles.”
“in the 2012 year” → wrong article; correct: “in 2012.”
Sentence 2
Original:
overall, the highest using the cycles in female age group while , the lowest using the bicycle in male .Moreover 0-9 age group using about simillar .
Corrected:
Overall, cycling was highest among females, while it was lowest among males. In the 0-9 age group, the percentages for both genders were almost the same.
Mistakes / Explanations:
“the highest using the cycles in female age group” → ungrammatical; should be “cycling was highest among females.”
“while , the lowest using the bicycle in male” → wrong grammar and punctuation; corrected to “while it was lowest among males.”
“0-9 age group using about simillar” → incorrect structure; correct: “the percentages for both genders were almost the same.”
“simillar” → spelling mistake.
Sentence 3
Original:
In 0-9 age group the highest number of using bicycle 52.5 female. while this followed by 10-19 and 60+ age group number at 43.6 and 19.8. moreover in 20-39 age group at 18.2highest number using female compare the 40-59 age group.
Corrected:
In the 0-9 age group, the percentage of females who rode bicycles was 52.5%. This was followed by 43.6% in the 10-19 age group and 19.8% in the 60+ group. In the 20-39 age group, 18.2% of females rode bicycles, higher than in the 40-59 age group.
Mistakes / Explanations:
“the highest number of using bicycle 52.5 female” → grammatically incorrect; should be “the percentage of females who rode bicycles was 52.5%.”
“while this followed by 10-19 and 60+ age group number at 43.6 and 19.8” → incorrect connectors; corrected to “This was followed by 43.6% in 10-19 and 19.8% in 60+.”
“moreover in 20-39 age group at 18.2highest number using female compare the 40-59 age group” → ungrammatical; corrected to “In the 20-39 age group, 18.2% of females rode bicycles, higher than in the 40-59 age group.”
Sentence 4
Original:
In the male age group the highest number inabout same age group 0-9 at 51
Corrected:
For males, the highest percentage was also in the 0-9 age group, at 51%.
Mistakes / Explanations:
“inabout same age group” → spelling/grammar mistake; corrected to “also in the 0-9 age group.”
“at 51” → missing % sign.
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