Some people think technology development decreases crime, while others believe it actually encourages crime.
Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
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Some people think technology development decreases crime, while others believe it actually encourages crime.
Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
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Many individual believe that the technology reduces crime by the technology development, whereas other groups of people thought that it engage with crime. I believe it may encourage some public with crime through the hacking and biometric.
On the one hand ,by the technology many people hacking personal documents and accounts .hacking flexibility not only creating problem for the groups but also can ruined their life. For example , hackers can stole all amount of money using the technology from their accounts as well as they capable to encourage with several crime. The technology able to create a crime society because of hacking system.
On the other hand, using a technology is good method for people key
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It is believed by some individuals that technological development are declining crime rate, while others think it motivates criminal to commit crime more .In my perspective , for the technological advancement various, kinds of criminal offences are been decreased dramatically.
On the one hand, according to some people, technologies are playing significant rules like, creating very strong defense mechanism for the criminals , whom are willing to commit crime .There are different kinds of digital processes such as ,cyber security , CCTV , Tracking system ,biometrics , facial AI recognizer and lots of other gadgets .Those are use to prevent various kind of cyber crimes .This will not only safe our private information but also relocate the attackers and completely secure the life of general peoples from them. in addition the very intensive high-end information of Bangladesh military defense systems are been secured by the technology . So, in todays world I truly believe that technologies are helping humane kind from the grasp of bad peoples .
On the other hand ,according to some other individuals many dishonest people are using this blessings as a curse . Because of that many technical things are been misused recently .For example some black hackers are stealing peoples personal identity by sending them some short of code or email . Many banks are been digitally robbed by those types of black hackers , they often access people personal bank account by using some methods also harasses peoples or blackmail them . Consequently ,for using the technology in bad way criminal are commuting cyber crimes.
To conclude ,I think people must be more conscious about the write uses of technology apart from that I completely agree that the advancement of technology is really helped us to prevent many dangerous criminal offences .
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Nowadays, technology has make our life easy by various way. However, some individuals believe that the development of technology decline crime. Others, however, consider that It motivate crime. From my perspective, technology assist to reduce crime by various way, such as smart access in door, cc tv camera and so on. In this essay, I will discuss both view and my opinion.
On the one hand, modern tools helps to solve any kinds of problem during our life. In this present time, most of the people are addicted on different types of technology like computer, pc, cc tv, and also tracker and so on, which assist to reduce crime. If anyone want to protect their house or other think that time they can setup a cc tv camera access in their house. Therefore any thief can not entry in his house easily. Moreover, smart access like biomatric access, if anyone fix a finger lock in his enternce door so that theif can not stole any think from their home. Another key think is mobile tracker, in this time, when we go outside or hang out with family that time if we lost our phone then we can find this by a tracker. Hence, technology decline crime.
On the other hand, in this contemporary era, there are plenty of social platform where crimer can get motivate about their crime as there has some people who contineously making video about crime. As a result, they are thinking that crime is good because most of the nation they reveile their bio data in online. Secondly, there has some hacker in online who hack individuals channel. So, technology can provide any informations about anyone in a second that is why it encourage them to do crime.
To sum up, although, modern technology motivating to attamp crime but I think it also has many advantages outweigh disadvantage and also decreasing ofenciency.
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I think that, technology development encouraging crime day by day for its hacking and AI system.
In this modern era, everyone are secured by high technology system. If a thief wants to heist a bank he has to break down all of the security system. But it is impossible now. For an example, recently our neighbors have been heisted. But luckily they got a footage of the heist and quickly they caught the thief with police. Another key consideration is tracking. When a thief steal a mobile phone or a transport like bike and car, we can easily catch him up. And by using google assistant or other online web browser we can find any questions answer here easily.
In contrast, others believe it actually encourages crime by separate ways like hacking. Hacking is the most popular cyber crime. By hacking hackers can find here the persons full personal information, bank account and so on. In my experience, recently I am facing some problems in social apps. Specially in Facebook, where I found that my phone number and password is changing daily and then my account got hacked. Many of us are using AI. Using AI the criminal can do anything in online. They can easily make any news or data wrong into right and right into wrong. Here we can face online frauds and scams with those who are using fake accounts. Many of criminals are misleading in online dark webs.
In conclusion, I think that, technology development is encouraging crime day by day.
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It is considered by some people that technology improvement determine the rate of crimes, however, other argue that its actually help to connect with crimes. From my perspective, I think development of technology is increased dramatically engaged with crime.
On the one hand, according to some people that technology helps to reduce crimes. Because, in this modern era easy to arrest a mobile robber due to tracking system by mobile IMEI number.As a consequence, this technology system reduce mobile theft significantly.In addition, biometric system helps to decrease the ratio of visa violation. It is often saw that in some European nations continuously trying to decrement visa violation by police or immigration officers,however, they can not. Then, Europe administration decided they will use electronic gates in airport with biometrics to caught a visa misuse holder.
On the other hand, the large number of individuals argued that technology improvement help to make relation with crime because of hacking system are quite easy right now. Everyday we can see in newspaper or TV that bank accounts , mobile banking hacked by cyber hacker. As a result, people are facing so many problems to utilise online or mobile banking. In addition, nowadays blackmail is one of the most common crime specially for women. Some people make nude photo with using artificial intelligence and make harassment with sending this kind of photo in social media. In outcome, there are large quantity of girls oblige to suicide for blackmail. For example, a recent survey conducted by SOMOY (Tv channel) of Bangladesh, everyday approximately 3 girls take the path of suicide due to social media harassment or blackmail.
To conclude, although there have some beneficial way to reduce the rate of crime with using technology. I, however, think technology helps to engaged with crimes for misuse of technology.
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It is believed by some people technology advancement can decline crime which is happened in society .Other, however, are concerned that crime is enhanced using technological sources. I firmly agree with the second statement that people are inspired to do crime.
There is various reason, why technology can remove crime to develop in a country At first people can save their various types of data in the a website giving a secret pass key .In back people used to memory card to save their photo but in the modern, people can not waste money to buy this thing ;as a result they would be use these money to learn other skills .Another key consideration when they use few sensor device as a protector they can able to preserve their company from those people who involved crime.
On the other hand , there is no doubt that excessive use of technology is the impact of crime .For instance , some people who are addicted to watch some movies that are related to crime . afterward , they are affected by actors or anti-hero so they try to imitate him ;as a consequence, they do not feel that it is crime ,they apply it in the real life .therefore general have to face this types of issues .More over children want to copy some dangerous things which is made using thechnology.
In conclusion there are benefits and drawbacks in the use of technology in the case of crime .
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