The three pie charts below show the changes in annual spending by local authorities in Someland in 1980, 1990 and 2000.
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The three pie charts below show the changes in annual spending by local authorities in Someland in 1980, 1990 and 2000.
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The three pie charts compare the amount of changes in yearly expenditure by local authorities in some land in 1980, 1990 and 2000.
It is clear that, the expenditure of authorities increased on Higher education, Transportation, Environmental services. On the other hand, this figure decreased om K-12 Education, Health and human resources. Additionally higher education was always higher then others.
In terms of Higher education, starting at 35% in 1980, then it was upward trend slightly in 1990 at 45%, which was gradually decrease at 40% end of the period. Moreover, in 1980 transportation spending was downward trend from 16% to 6% between 1980 and 1990, after that, in the following year it was significantly grow at 22%. furthermore, Environmental services was 4% in 1980, it was 9% increased in 2000.
In contrast, K-12 Education expenditure decreased from 25% to 18% between 1980 and 2000. afterwards, starting at 14% in 1980, then it was slightly groom in 1990 at 20%, after that it was again decline in half in 2000. lastly, other expenditure was downwards trend from 6% to 1% between 1980 and 2000.
Labib sir, here are the things you should work on. If any issues, feel free to reach out for feedbacks.
“amount of changes” → “changes”
“some land” → “a certain area”
Extra comma after “It is clear that”
“expenditure of authorities increased on” → “spending increased on”
“om” → “on”
“then” → “than”
“was always higher then others” → “was always higher than others”
Missing subjects (e.g., “starting at 35%” → “spending started at 35%”)
“was upward trend slightly” → “rose slightly”
“was gradually decrease” → “fell gradually”
“was downward trend” → “fell”
“grow at” → “rose to”
“in the following year” (wrong time reference; should be “by 2000”)
“was 9% increased” → “increased to 9%”
“groom” → “grew”
“was again decline” → “fell again”
“was downwards trend” → “declined steadily”
Inconsistent capitalization (e.g., “higher education”, “environmental services”)
Misuse of connectors (“afterwards”, “moreover”)
Some unnecessary commas
The pie charts compare data about the changes in annual spending by local authorities in Someland in the year 1980,1990 and 2000.
It is clear that, higher education had the highest proportion of the changes in annual spending. On the other hand, others changes in annual spending recorded the least.
In 1980, higher education changes in annual spending by local had 35%, while in 1990 higher education changes increased 10%.In the next higher education changes by local decreased 2% in 2000. However, in the same year k-12 changes in annual spending by local, which was 25% and in 1990 it decreased 5%.Moreover, in 2000, k-12 education had 18%,which was the lowest portion in this sector.
In terms of health and human resources, the changes in annual spending was 14%,which war third highest in 1980,while the changes climbed 6% in 1990.However, the changes decreased 2% in the year 2000. In other sector, the changes in annual spending by local recorded the least, which was 6% in 1980, 4% in 1990 and 1% in 2000.On the other hand environment service changes had similar portion between 1980 and 1990,but in the next year it increased 4%.
Here are the things you should work on ………….
“the year 1980,1990 and 2000” → “the years 1980, 1990, and 2000”
Unnecessary comma after “It is clear that”
“higher education had the highest proportion of the changes” → “Higher Education accounted for the highest proportion of spending”
“others changes” → “other categories” or “other sectors”
Repetition of “changes in annual spending” (too frequent; reduce repetition)
“higher education changes in annual spending by local had 35%” → “spending on Higher Education was 35%”
Missing prepositions (“increased by 10%”, not “increased 10%”)
“In the next higher education changes by local decreased 2%” → unclear; should be “In 2000, it decreased by 2%”
Inconsistent capitalization (“higher education”, “k-12”, “environment service”)
“k-12 changes in annual spending by local” → awkward phrasing;
use “spending on K–12 Education”
“which war third highest” → “which was the third highest” (spelling error)
“in the next year it increased 4%” → should be “by 4%”
Missing commas between clauses (e.g., after “In 1980”, “However,” “Moreover,”)
The three pie charts illustrates the changes in annual spending by local authorities in Someland in 1980, 1990, and 2000.
Overall, the data reveals a significant shift in Higher education over the decades, while in other things had lesser increased through out the period. However, Health and human resources had a great fluctuation in the three decades.
Beginning with the top, Higher education sector starting with higher position (35%) and rapidly increased in 1990 with 45% before witnessed a sudden fell in 2000 (40%). In Health and human resources through out the period decreased with steady fluctuation. In contrast, transportation started with 16% after facing a unexpected fell in 1990 (6%), where in 2000 gradually increased and hit at 22%.
In environmental services, starting with the least portion (4%), while end of the period with 9% in 2000. The K-12 Education, By contrast, starting from high with a minimal decline through out the period at 18% in 2000. Generally, Other expenditure thing had the least increased from 1980 to 2000 and hit the last position at 1%.
Here are the mistakes you should work on …………….
“illustrates” → “illustrate” (plural subject: “charts”)
“in 1980, 1990, and 2000.” → add comma before “and” correctly spaced
“the data reveals” → “the data reveal” (plural noun “data”)
“while in other things had lesser increased” → unclear; should be “while other categories saw smaller increases”
“through out” → “throughout” (one word)
“Health and human resources” → capitalize consistently: “Health and Human Resources”
“had a great fluctuation” → “fluctuated considerably” (better phrasing)
“Beginning with the top” → awkward; replace with “Starting with Higher Education”
“starting with higher position (35%)” → “started at 35%”
“rapidly increased in 1990 with 45%” → “rose to 45% in 1990”
“before witnessed a sudden fell” → “before falling slightly” or “before it fell to 40%”
“In Health and human resources through out the period decreased with steady fluctuation.” → grammatically incorrect; should be “Spending on Health and Human Resources fluctuated slightly but generally decreased over the period.”
“unexpected fell” → “unexpected fall” or “unexpected decline”
“hit at 22%” → “rose to 22%”
“starting with the least portion (4%), while end of the period with 9%” → “started at 4% and rose to 9% by 2000”
“By contrast” → misused capitalization (should not start mid-sentence)
“starting from high with a minimal decline through out the period at 18%” → “started high at 25% and declined gradually to 18%”
“Other expenditure thing” → incorrect phrasing; should be “Other expenditures”
“had the least increased” → “showed the smallest share” or “decreased slightly”
Missing commas after linking words (“Overall,” “However,” “In contrast,” etc.)
The three pie chart compares the changes in yearly expenditure by local authorities in Someland in three different years.
Overall, environmental services had a upward trend in the meantime, whereas K-12 Education and other annual spending portion were fall continually till 2000. However, other three sectors had a fluctuation in that period.
In terms of environmental services expenditure, local authorities spent around 5% more than 1980,what was 9% at peak. Moreover, local authorities had a less priority on k-12 education and other expenditure , where both had downfall by 7% and 5% respectively.
On the other hand, higher education introduced as highest portion of expenditure always, which had a ups and downs, it was at peak in 1990 with 45% and at least with 35% in 1980.Following this, local authorities spent a similar kind of trend like higher education, where they spent much in 1990 with 20% and in 1980 it was only 14%. Similarly, transportation also made a fluctuation, what was topped with 22% in 2000,and at least with 6% in 1980 which was 10% more in 1980 year.
Shadin, here the mistakes you should work on ………….
“The three pie chart compares” → “The three pie charts compare” (plural + verb agreement)
“in three different years” → better as “in 1980, 1990, and 2000” (more specific)
“a upward trend” → “an upward trend” (article error)
“in the meantime” → incorrect usage; should be “over the period” or “during this time”
“were fall continually” → “fell continuously” (verb form)
“till 2000” → “until 2000” (formal writing)
“other three sectors had a fluctuation” → “the other three sectors fluctuated” (simplify and fix grammar)
“5% more than 1980,what was 9% at peak” → missing space and wrong structure → “5% more than in 1980, reaching a peak of 9%”
“less priority on k-12 education” → “gave less priority to K–12 Education” (correct preposition and capitalization)
“and other expenditure , where both had downfall” → remove comma; “both decreased by 7% and 5%, respectively” (grammar and clarity)
“introduced as highest portion of expenditure always” → “consistently accounted for the largest share of spending” (unnatural phrasing)
“had a ups and downs” → “had ups and downs” (remove article “a”)
“at least with 35% in 1980” → “lowest at 35% in 1980”
“local authorities spent a similar kind of trend” → incorrect phrase → “showed a similar trend”
“where they spent much in 1990” → “spending peaked at 20% in 1990” (word choice)
“it was only 14%” → should be “it was only 14% in 1980” (missing context)
“what was topped with 22% in 2000” → “which peaked at 22% in 2000” (relative clause correction)
“and at least with 6% in 1980 which was 10% more in 1980 year” → redundant/confusing; should be “and was lowest at 6% in 1990, after being 16% in 1980”
Missing commas after linking words (“Overall,” “On the other hand,” “Moreover,” “Following this,”)
Inconsistent capitalization (e.g., “environmental services,” “k-12 education”)
The three pie charts compares data about the changes in annual spending by local authorities in Someland in the year 1980, 1990 and 2000.
Overall, In the three years annual spending by local authorities in Someland Higher Education was highest ratio 35%, 45%, 40% . On the other hand, in the three years annual spending by local authorities in Someland Environmental services , other was lowest.
In trams of 1980 annual spending by local authorities in Someland had highest in Higher Education it ratio 35% , while 1980 annual spending by local authorities in Someland lowest was Environmental services at ratio 45 . On the other hand , In 1990 annual spending by local authorities in Someland was highest in Higher Education ratio 45% , while lowest was Other it ratio 4%.
In 2000, annual spending by local authorities in Someland Higher Education was highest ratio 40% and Other lowest was 1%.But in three years annual spending by local authorities in Someland the Higher Education highest in 1990 (45%) and the lowest other in 2000 (1%).
Fahmida ma’am, here are the things you should work on………..
“The three pie charts compares” → “The three pie charts compare” (subject–verb agreement)
“data about the changes” → unnecessary “data”; just “show the changes” is better
“in the year 1980, 1990 and 2000” → “in the years 1980, 1990, and 2000” (plural + commas)
Unnecessary capitalization after commas (“In,” “Higher Education,” “Environmental”)
“was highest ratio 35%, 45%, 40%” → incorrect phrasing → “accounted for the highest proportion, at 35%, 45%, and 40%, respectively”
“Environmental services , other was lowest” → missing conjunction and plural issue → “Environmental Services and Other categories had the lowest proportions”
“In trams of” → spelling error → “In terms of”
“had highest in Higher Education it ratio 35%” → incorrect grammar → “spending on Higher Education was highest, at 35%”
“lowest was Environmental services at ratio 45” → incorrect data (should be 4%, not 45%) and wrong phrase → “the lowest was Environmental Services, at 4%”
“On the other hand , In 1990 …” → comma and capitalization errors (no capital after comma)
“was highest in Higher Education ratio 45%” → “spending on Higher Education was highest at 45%”
“while lowest was Other it ratio 4%” → “while the lowest was Other, at 4%”
“Higher Education was highest ratio 40%” → “was highest, at 40%”
“Other lowest was 1%” → “Other was the lowest at 1%”
“But in three years annual spending …” → avoid starting with “But” in formal writing; use “Overall,”
“the Higher Education highest in 1990 (45%) and the lowest other in 2000 (1%)” → awkward; should be “Higher Education peaked at 45% in 1990, while Other spending was lowest at 1% in 2000.”
Repetitive use of “annual spending by local authorities in Someland” — reduce repetition; mention once per paragraph.
Missing or incorrect articles (“the,” “an,” “a”)
Missing commas after introductory phrases (“Overall,” “In 2000,” “On the other hand,”)
Inconsistent capitalization (e.g., “Other,” “Environmental services”)
Shan Sir.
The data demonstrates the changes in annual spending by local authorities in Someland in the years 1980,1990 and 2000.
Overall, the proportion of education was following an upward trend over the period , however , transportation , k-12 education experienced fluctuation . It is clear that , the ratio of k-12 education was decreasing over the years .
In 1980 , the increased ratio was education , which was 35% , while the least portion was environmental services , which was 4% . Conversely , the ratio of education increased over the years , on the other hand , the proportion of other sector decreased over the period. the percentage of transportation did not received a particular trend , in 1980 it was increased afterwards in 1990 the ratio was decreased then it increased again , which was a fluctuation trend , similarly , health and human resources .
It is clear that , in those three years the increased ratio was similar , but it was not similar the decreased trend , in 1980 the least percentage was transportation , while other sector was the decreased one in 1990 , which was followed by 2000 year , but the decreased proportion was 1% in other categories .
Alif ma’am, here are the things you should work on ……..
“The data demonstrates” → “The data demonstrate” (plural noun “data”)
Missing commas after years → “in the years 1980, 1990, and 2000”
“the proportion of education was following an upward trend” → “spending on education showed an upward trend” (verb tense and clarity)
Unnecessary commas after “period” and “however” (punctuation misuse)
“transportation , k-12 education experienced fluctuation” → missing “and”; should be “transportation and K–12 education experienced fluctuations”
“It is clear that , the ratio of k-12 education” → remove comma and use “proportion” instead of “ratio” (word choice)
“the increased ratio was education , which was 35%” → awkward → “spending on education was highest, at 35%”
“the least portion was environmental services , which was 4%” → should be “the smallest portion was Environmental Services, at 4%”
“the ratio of education increased over the years , on the other hand , the proportion of other sector decreased” → redundant “on the other hand”; better phrasing: “spending on education rose, while other sectors declined”
“the percentage of transportation did not received” → wrong verb form → “did not receive” → better: “did not follow a clear trend”
“increased afterwards in 1990 the ratio was decreased then it increased again” → run-on sentence; should be separated or joined with connectors properly
“fluctuation trend” → “fluctuating trend” or simply “fluctuated”
“similarly , health and human resources” → incomplete clause → “A similar pattern was seen in Health and Human Resources”
“in those three years the increased ratio was similar , but it was not similar the decreased trend” → unclear; needs rephrasing → “the sectors that increased were similar across the years, while the ones that decreased varied”
“in 1980 the least percentage was transportation , while other sector was the decreased one in 1990” → unclear and grammatically incorrect → “in 1980, transportation had the lowest share, while Other was the lowest in 1990”
“followed by 2000 year” → should be “followed by 2000” (no need for “year”)
“the decreased proportion was 1% in other categories” → should be “the proportion of Other categories fell to 1%”
Overuse of commas throughout sentences (comma splices)
Inconsistent capitalization (“environmental services,” “other sector”)
Shan sir
The three pie charts compared the changes in annual costs spending by local authorities like higher education, Transportation, K-12 education, environment services, other and health and human resources in Someland in 1980, 1990 and 2000.
Overall, in higher education the proportion among the three years were increased, though it was downward between1990 and 2000 but it was increased. The environmental services was also increased with maximum ratio throughout the years more then two time was increased among the years.
In terms of higher education, It was initially increased though it decreased but overall it was higher than 1980 in 2000 by 5%. Similarly, transportation was also increased like higher education it was 16% in the starting and ended with portion of 22%, though it was less than 10% and it was 6% in the year of 1990. On the other hand, the environmental services was increased by more than twice among the three years it was 4%, 5% and 9% respectively.
Moreover, Health and human resources was decreased by 4% from 1980, like 14% in 1980 ,20% in 1990 and 10% in 2000 so, overall it was decreased. K-12 education was steadily decreased from 25% to 18% between 1980 and 2000. In contrast, other annual spending was also decreased by 5% from beginning contributing 6%, 4% and 1% respectively among the years.
Here are the things you should work on……..
“The three pie charts compared” → should be “The three pie charts compare” (present tense for describing visuals).
“annual costs spending” → redundant → use “annual spending” or “annual expenditure”.
Missing commas → “1980, 1990, and 2000”.
“like higher education, Transportation, K-12 education…” → inconsistent capitalization and wording → use “such as Higher Education, Transportation, K–12 Education, Environmental Services, Other, and Health and Human Resources.”
“in higher education the proportion among the three years were increased” → subject–verb error → “the proportion increased over the three years”.
“though it was downward between1990 and 2000 but it was increased” → awkward and contradictory → “although it fell slightly between 1990 and 2000, it remained higher overall than in 1980.”
“was also increased with maximum ratio throughout the years more then two time was increased among the years” → grammatically incorrect and repetitive → “also rose steadily, more than doubling over the period.”
“In terms of higher education, It was initially increased though it decreased but overall it was higher than 1980 in 2000 by 5%.” → unclear; better phrasing → “Spending on Higher Education rose initially and, despite a later decline, remained 5% higher in 2000 than in 1980.”
“Similarly, transportation was also increased like higher education it was 16% in the starting and ended with portion of 22%” → run-on and incorrect phrasing → “Similarly, spending on Transportation rose from 16% in 1980 to 22% in 2000.”
“though it was less than 10% and it was 6% in the year of 1990.” → grammatically wrong → “though it fell to just 6% in 1990.”
“the environmental services was increased by more than twice among the three years it was 4%, 5% and 9% respectively.” → should be “Environmental Services spending more than doubled, from 4% in 1980 to 9% in 2000.”
“Health and human resources was decreased by 4% from 1980, like 14% in 1980 ,20% in 1990 and 10% in 2000” → wordy and confusing → “Health and Human Resources fluctuated, rising from 14% in 1980 to 20% in 1990, before dropping to 10% in 2000.”
“so, overall it was decreased.” → informal → “overall, it showed a decline.”
“K-12 education was steadily decreased” → wrong verb form → “K–12 Education steadily decreased”.
“other annual spending was also decreased by 5% from beginning contributing 6%, 4% and 1% respectively among the years.” → unclear → “Other spending also declined, from 6% in 1980 to 1% in 2000.”
Inconsistent capitalization (e.g., “Transportation,” “Health and human resources,” “other”).
Shaan sir
The three pie charts illustrate the changes in annual spending by local authorities in someland in 1980,1990 &2000,
Overall ,the percentage of education was following a upward trend over the period ,while transportation and other experienced fluctation .on the other hand ,the portion of K-12 education was increased in the first year ,which was followed by 1990 & 2000.
In 1980 , the highest proportion in higher education at 35%,which was lowest portion on environmental services at 4% ,Moreover, 1990 and 2000 had the higher education was increased .In concern of , the k-12 education was high ratio in 1980 ,which was 25%,which other years was followed respectively . moreover the other education was
Ananya Ma’am,
Here are the mistakes yo should work on…..
“illustrate” → correct verb, but use proper punctuation: “in Someland in 1980, 1990, and 2000.” (capitalize Someland and add commas).
“&” → avoid ampersand in formal writing → use “and.”
Capitalization: “Overall,” “On the other hand,” “In 1980,” should start with capital letters.
“a upward trend” → article error → “an upward trend.”
“fluctation” → spelling error → “fluctuation.”
“the portion of K-12 education was increased in the first year” → unclear and wrong tense → “spending on K–12 Education decreased over time.”
“which was followed by 1990 & 2000” → grammatically incorrect → “which was followed by decreases in 1990 and 2000.”
“the highest proportion in higher education at 35%,which was lowest portion on environmental services at 4%” → missing verb and articles → “the highest proportion was for Higher Education at 35%, while the lowest was for Environmental Services at 4%.”
“Moreover, 1990 and 2000 had the higher education was increased” → ungrammatical → “Moreover, spending on Higher Education increased further in 1990 and 2000.”
“In concern of , the k-12 education was high ratio in 1980 ,which was 25%,which other years was followed” → awkward and incomplete sentence → “In contrast, spending on K–12 Education was relatively high in 1980 at 25%, but it declined in the following years.”
Inconsistent capitalization (e.g., “higher education,” “environmental services,” “k-12 education”).
Shaan sir
The pie charts provides data about the changes in annual expenditure by regional authorities in Someland in three years (1980, 1990 and 2000).
Overall, the local authorities spent the highest portion on higher education with a fluctuation between 1980 and 2000, while the least proportion was spent on other sector.
In 1980, higher educational field recorded the maximum amount of expenditure at 35%, which increased noticeably in 1990 at 45%, and decreased slightly at 40%. However, in terms of K-12 Education, there was a significant decline from 25% to 18% between 1990 and 2000, whereas the spending on transportation sector fluctuated remarkably and reached its highest at 22%.
In terms of health and human resources, the local authorities expended the highest ratio in 1990, and there was a rapid changes in percentages over the years. However, the least percentages was spent on other sectors
Here are the mistakes you should work on…..
Grammar & Sentence Structure
“The pie charts provides” → subject–verb agreement error → “The pie charts provide.”
“in three years (1980, 1990 and 2000)” → punctuation → add commas correctly: “in the years 1980, 1990, and 2000.”
“while the least proportion was spent on other sector” → missing article → “on the other sector.”
“higher educational field recorded the maximum amount of expenditure” → wordy → better: “spending on higher education was the highest.”
“and decreased slightly at 40%” → missing time marker → “and then decreased slightly to 40% in 2000.”
“there was a significant decline from 25% to 18% between 1990 and 2000” → data mismatch → decline started from 1980 not 1990.
“transportation sector fluctuated remarkably and reached its highest at 22%” → missing final year → should add “in 2000.”
“the local authorities expended the highest ratio in 1990” → “expended” sounds unnatural → use “spent the highest proportion.”
“there was a rapid changes” → singular/plural error → “there were rapid changes.”
“the least percentages was spent” → number agreement → “the lowest percentage was spent.”
Word Choice & Style
Replace “maximum amount of expenditure” → “the highest proportion of spending.”
Avoid repeating “in terms of” too often; use variety like “regarding,” “when it comes to,” or “for.”
Replace “other sector” → “the Other category” (consistent with chart labels).
“Rapid changes in percentages” sounds vague — specify if it “rose then fell” or “fluctuated.”
Punctuation & Capitalization
Add commas after introductory phrases (e.g., “Overall,” “In 1980,” “However,”).
Capitalize sector names consistently if used as categories (e.g., Higher Education, Transportation, K–12 Education).
Avoid comma splices (e.g., use semicolons or separate sentences when connecting two independent clauses).
Shaan sir
The three pie charts compares data about the changes in annual expenditure by local authorities between 1980 and 2000 in Someland.
Overall, the high education recorded the highest proportion through over the period, while K-12 was the second highest from beginning to end. However, others followed a slightly downwards trend over the period.
In terms of higher education, it was the highest proportion in every year, and it was 35% in the beginning, while it increased barely in 1990, and than it fell 5% in 2000. By contrast, others followed a downward trend and it decreased from 6% to 1% between 1980 and 2000. On the other hand, environmental services had a upward trend till the end.
The transportation was 16% in the beginning, however, it was increased noticeably (22%) from 1980 to 2000. moreover health and human resources followed an downward trend with a fluctuation which was 14-10 from 1980 to 2000.
Shourov sir, here are the mistakes you should work on….
Grammar & Sentence Structure
“The three pie charts compares” → subject–verb disagreement → should be “compare.”
“data about the changes” → redundant → better: “show the changes.”
“between 1980 and 2000 in Someland” → clearer placement: “in Someland between 1980 and 2000.”
“the high education” → incorrect phrase → should be “Higher Education.”
“through over the period” → redundant → choose one → “throughout the period.”
“K-12 was the second highest from beginning to end” → missing noun → “K–12 Education was the second highest.”
“others followed a slightly downwards trend” → plural/singular mismatch → “the Other category followed a slight downward trend.”
“it increased barely in 1990” → awkward phrasing → “it increased slightly in 1990.”
“and than it fell 5%” → wrong word → “then” not “than.”
“environmental services had a upward trend” → article error → “an upward trend.”
“The transportation was 16%” → unnecessary “the” → “Transportation was 16%.”
“moreover health and human resources followed an downward trend with a fluctuation which was 14-10 from 1980 to 2000” →
Capitalize “Moreover,”
Article correction → “a downward trend”
Range should include “%” → “which fluctuated between 14% and 10% from 1980 to 2000.”
Word Choice & Style
Replace “recorded the highest proportion” → more natural: “accounted for the highest proportion.”
Replace “barely increased” with “slightly increased.”
Avoid repeating “trend” too often — vary with “pattern,” “movement,” “change,” etc.
Use precise data phrasing (e.g., “rose by 10 percentage points” instead of “increased noticeably”).
Punctuation & Capitalization
Add commas after introductory words (e.g., “Overall,” “In terms of higher education,” “By contrast,” “Moreover,”).
Capitalize category names consistently (Higher Education, Transportation, Environmental Services, etc.).
Avoid commas before “and” when clauses are short.
Shaan sir
The three pie charts illustrate the changes in annual spending by local authorities in someland in 1980,1990,and 2000.
overall, In the three years annual spending by local authorities in someland highest Education was highest ratio 35%, 45%,40%. on yhe other hand, in the three years annual spendin by local authorites in someland environmental other was lowest.
in tarms of 1980,in annual spending by local authorites in someland had highest in Higher Education in 35%.in annual spending by local authorites in someland had lowest in environmental service. in 4%.on the other hand ,in annual spending by local authorites in someland had highest in higher education in 45%.in annual spending by local authorites in someland had lowest in other 4%.1980 and 1990 in annual spending by local authorites in someland smilar in 4%.
in 2000,annual spending by local authorites in someland Higher Educaton was highest ratio 40%.transportation was 22%.environmental service was 95. k-12 education almost 95. health and human resourses was 10%.and other in annual local authorites had lowest in 1%.
Ayesha Ma’am, here are the mistakes you should work on….
Grammar & Structure Errors
“The three pie charts illustrate” → ✅ correct verb, but capitalize proper nouns → “in Someland in 1980, 1990, and 2000.”
“overall, In the three years…” → capitalization error → “Overall, in the three years…”
“highest Education was highest ratio 35%, 45%,40%.” → unclear and redundant → should be “spending on Higher Education accounted for the highest proportions, at 35%, 45%, and 40%, respectively.”
“on yhe other hand” → spelling → “On the other hand.”
“annual spendin by local authorites” → spelling → “annual spending by local authorities.”
“environmental other was lowest” → unclear → should be “Environmental Services and Other categories had the lowest proportions.”
“in tarms of 1980” → spelling → “In terms of 1980.”
Repetitive phrasing: You repeat “in annual spending by local authorities in Someland” many times — mention once per paragraph only.
“had highest in Higher Education in 35%” → wrong structure → “spending on Higher Education was highest at 35%.”
“had lowest in environmental service. in 4%.” → wrong punctuation → “the lowest was Environmental Services, at 4%.”
Missing linking words: sentences should connect smoothly (e.g., “In 1980…, while in 1990…”).
“environmental service was 95. k-12 education almost 95.” → numerical errors → should be “Environmental Services was 9%, and K–12 Education was about 18%.”
“and other in annual local authorites had lowest in 1%.” → incorrect structure → “and the Other category was lowest at 1%.”
Spelling & Capitalization Errors
“someland” → Someland
“yhe” → the
“spendin” → spending
“authorites” → authorities
“tarms” → terms
“Educaton” → Education
“resourses” → resources
Always capitalize category names consistently: Higher Education, Transportation, Environmental Services, K–12 Education, Health and Human Resources, Other.
Punctuation Errors
Missing commas after introductory words: “Overall,” “In terms of 1980,” “On the other hand,” etc.
Missing spaces after commas in numbers (e.g., “1980,1990,and 2000” → “1980, 1990, and 2000”).
Don’t start every sentence with “in annual spending…” — combine ideas into smooth sentences.
Shaan sir