The pie charts show information about energy production in two countries in 2015.
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The pie charts show information about energy production in two countries in 2015.
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The pie charts illustrate the data about energy production in USA and Canada in the year 2015.
Overall, in the both nations the highest percentage of energy production on coal, whereas the least portion of energy consumption on other factors. However, gas production holds majority of percentage in both countries.
According to the USA, coal created more likely energy production at 29.80%, and the figure was little bit increase in Canada at 30.93%. Moreover, 29.63% of energy produced on gas at 29.63%, which was around 1% higher than that in Canada. Furthermore, in petro ,USA people prefer produce at 29.27%, while Canada was less likely of energy production at 19.55%.
Conversely, nuclear production produced 10.10% energy in Canada, which was followed by USA people at 6.40%. Lastly, The lowest number of energy production on other to the USA, however, Canada produced 9,10% of energy.
Original:
The pie charts illustrate the data about energy production in USA and Canada in the year 2015.
Correction:
The pie charts illustrate information about energy production in the USA and Canada in the year 2015.
Mistakes:
“the data about” → use “information about” (more natural in IELTS)
Missing “the” before “USA”
Original:
Overall, in the both nations the highest percentage of energy production on coal, whereas the least portion of energy consumption on other factors.
Correction:
Overall, in both nations, the highest percentage of energy was produced from coal, whereas the smallest share came from other sources.
Mistakes:
“in the both nations” → remove “the”
“energy production on coal” → incorrect preposition, should be “produced from coal”
“least portion of energy consumption” → wrong meaning (it’s about production, not consumption)
“other factors” → unclear, should be “other sources”
Original:
However, gas production holds majority of percentage in both countries.
Correction:
However, gas also accounted for a significant proportion in both countries.
Mistakes:
“holds majority of percentage” → incorrect phrasing
Missing “a” before “majority”
Word choice “holds” unnatural here — use “accounted for”
Original:
According to the USA, coal created more likely energy production at 29.80%, and the figure was little bit increase in Canada at 30.93%.
Correction:
In the USA, coal accounted for 29.8% of energy production, and this figure was slightly higher in Canada at 30.93%.
Mistakes:
“According to the USA” → wrong phrase (not a source)
“created more likely energy production” → incorrect structure
“little bit increase” → should be “slightly higher”
Original:
Moreover, 29.63% of energy produced on gas at 29.63%, which was around 1% higher than that in Canada.
Correction:
Moreover, gas accounted for 29.63% of energy production in the USA, which was about 1% higher than in Canada.
Mistakes:
Repetition of “29.63%”
“produced on gas” → wrong preposition; should be “produced from gas”
Missing subject (“gas accounted for”)
Original:
Furthermore, in petro ,USA people prefer produce at 29.27%, while Canada was less likely of energy production at 19.55%.
Correction:
Furthermore, petroleum made up 29.27% of energy production in the USA, while Canada produced a lower proportion at 19.55%.
Mistakes:
“petro” → incorrect; should be “petroleum”
“USA people prefer produce” → incorrect and informal phrasing
Missing prepositions and article consistency
Original:
Conversely, nuclear production produced 10.10% energy in Canada, which was followed by USA people at 6.40%.
Correction:
Conversely, nuclear energy accounted for 10.10% in Canada, compared with 6.40% in the USA.
Mistakes:
“nuclear production produced” → repetition error
“followed by USA people” → wrong expression
Sentence structure confusing
Original:
Lastly, The lowest number of energy production on other to the USA, however, Canada produced 9,10% of energy.
Correction:
Lastly, the lowest proportion of energy production in the USA came from other sources, while Canada generated 9.10% from them.
Mistakes:
“The” should not be capitalized mid-sentence
“lowest number” → use “lowest proportion” (energy not countable)
“on other” → wrong preposition
“9,10%” → incorrect comma (should be 9.10%)
Band…6
The given pie chart illustrate about energy manufacture in USA and CANADA in the year of 2015.
Overall, it is obvious that comparison of energy of production in USA and CANADA coal was highest, while in both countries other was lowest.
In USA coal was 29.80%, which was highest among all these power production. After that other and nuclear were 4.90% and 6.40% respectively. Moreover, comparison of energy manufacture petrol contributed 29.27%. Then the gas production which was also contributed
most at 29.63%.
In CANADA power production of others was 9.10%, which was lowest among other productions. Furthermore, coal and gas contributed most at 29.80% and 29.63% chronologically.
1️⃣ Original:
The given pie chart illustrate about energy manufacture in USA and CANADA in the year of 2015.
Correction:
The given pie charts illustrate energy production in the USA and Canada in 2015.
Mistakes:
“illustrate about” – “about” unnecessary after “illustrate.”
“energy manufacture” – wrong word choice; should be “energy production.”
“USA and CANADA” – should include “the” before country names.
“in the year of 2015” – “of” is unnecessary.
2️⃣ Original:
Overall, it is obvious that comparison of energy of production in USA and CANADA coal was highest, while in both countries other was lowest.
Correction:
Overall, it is clear that coal accounted for the highest proportion of energy production in both the USA and Canada, while the smallest share came from other sources.
Mistakes:
“comparison of energy of production” – incorrect and awkward phrase.
Missing prepositions and articles.
“coal was highest” – should be “coal accounted for the highest proportion.”
“other was lowest” – should be plural “other sources were the lowest.”
3️⃣ Original:
In USA coal was 29.80%, which was highest among all these power production.
Correction:
In the USA, coal made up 29.80%, which was the highest among all sources of energy production.
Mistakes:
Missing article “the” before “USA.”
“these power production” – grammatically incorrect; use “sources of energy production.”
4️⃣ Original:
After that other and nuclear were 4.90% and 6.40% respectively.
Correction:
After that, other and nuclear sources accounted for 4.90% and 6.40% respectively.
Mistakes:
Missing comma after “After that.”
Weak verb “were”; better to use “accounted for.”
5️⃣ Original:
Moreover, comparison of energy manufacture petrol contributed 29.27%.
Correction:
Moreover, petroleum contributed 29.27% of total energy production.
Mistakes:
Unnecessary phrase “comparison of energy manufacture.”
“petrol” – should be “petroleum.”
Missing “of total energy production.”
6️⃣ Original:
Then the gas production which was also contributedmost at 29.63%.
Correction:
Gas production also contributed significantly, at 29.63%.
Mistakes:
Sentence structure incorrect.
Missing spaces in “contributedmost.”
Should remove “Then” for clarity.
7️⃣ Original:
In CANADA power production of others was 9.10%, which was lowest among other productions.
Correction:
In Canada, energy production from other sources was 9.10%, the lowest among all categories.
Mistakes:
Missing comma after “Canada.”
“power production of others” – unnatural phrase.
“productions” – incorrect plural form.
8️⃣ Original:
Furthermore, coal and gas contributed most at 29.80% and 29.63% chronologically.
Correction:
Furthermore, coal and gas contributed the most, at 30.93% and 29.63% respectively.
Mistakes:
Missing “the” before “most.”
“chronologically” – wrong word, should be “respectively.”
Data slightly incorrect (coal = 30.93% in Canada).
Band 6
The pie charts compare the sources of energy production in the USA and Canada in the year 2015.
Overall, coal was the largest source of energy in both countries, while other sources contributed the least. however, the two countries showed noticeable differences in the proportions of petroleum and nuclear power .
In the USA , coal accounted for 29.80% of total energy production ,closely followed by gas and petroleum , which made up 29.63% and 29.27% respectively .Nuclear power contributed 8.08% ,while other sources represented only 3.2%
in Canada , coal was also the leading sources 30.93%. however, gas production was much higher than in the USA , standing at b29.9% .By contrast , petroleum made up a smaller share at 19.55%.
1️⃣ Original:
The pie charts compare the sources of energy production in the USA and Canada in the year 2015.
Correction:
The pie charts compare the sources of energy production in the USA and Canada in the year 2015.
Mistakes:
(Minor – no grammar error, just style improvement.)
2️⃣ Original:
Overall, coal was the largest source of energy in both countries, while other sources contributed the least. however, the two countries showed noticeable differences in the proportions of petroleum and nuclear power .
Correction:
Overall, coal was the main source of energy in both countries, while other sources contributed the least. However, the two nations showed noticeable differences in the proportions of petroleum and nuclear power.
Mistakes:
“however” → should be capitalized (“However”) because it starts a new sentence.
Space before period (.) should be removed.
“countries” → can replace with “nations” for variety.
3️⃣ Original:
In the USA , coal accounted for 29.80% of total energy production ,closely followed by gas and petroleum , which made up 29.63% and 29.27% respectively .Nuclear power contributed 8.08% ,while other sources represented only 3.2%
Correction:
In the USA, coal accounted for 29.80% of total energy production, closely followed by gas and petroleum, which made up 29.63% and 29.27% respectively. Nuclear power contributed 8.08%, while other sources represented only 3.2%.
Mistakes:
Unnecessary spaces before commas and periods.
“USA ,” → no space before comma.
Missing full stop at the end.
(Overall, this sentence is strong and clear.)
4️⃣ Original:
in Canada , coal was also the leading sources 30.93%. however, gas production was much higher than in the USA , standing at b29.9% .By contrast , petroleum made up a smaller share at 19.55%.
Correction:
In Canada, coal was also the leading source at 30.93%. However, gas production was slightly higher than in the USA, standing at 29.9%. By contrast, petroleum made up a smaller share at 19.55%.
Mistakes:
“in Canada” → should be capitalized (“In”).
“sources” → singular (“source”).
“b29.9%” → typo, remove “b.”
“much higher” → not accurate, it’s only slightly higher than USA; replaced with “slightly higher.”
Unnecessary spaces before commas and periods.
Summary of Mistakes:
Minor punctuation and spacing errors.
Occasional capitalization errors (“in Canada,” “however”).
Small word choice issues (“sources” → “source,” “much higher” → “slightly higher”).
One typo (“b29.9%”).
Band…6.5
The pie charts illustrates comparison of energy production in two nations in the year of 2015.
Overall, in two nations Canada produce energy most. In Canada, they produce large amount of coal (30.93%). Which was followed by the USA produce coal (29.80%).
In the USA, 29.80% coal they produce which was most energy production in 2015.In nuclear, the USA produce 6.40% which was lowest production in the USA, however Canada produce 10.10% nuclear in
1️⃣ Original:
The pie charts illustrates comparison of energy production in two nations in the year of 2015.
Correction:
The pie charts illustrate a comparison of energy production in two nations in the year 2015.
Mistakes:
“illustrates” → should be “illustrate” (plural subject “charts”).
Missing article “a” before “comparison.”
“in the year of 2015” → remove “of”; correct is “in the year 2015” or simply “in 2015.”
2️⃣ Original:
Overall, in two nations Canada produce energy most.
Correction:
Overall, between the two nations, Canada produced the most energy.
Mistakes:
Missing preposition “between.”
“produce” → should be past tense “produced” (since referring to 2015).
“energy most” → unnatural; correct form is “the most energy.”
3️⃣ Original:
In Canada, they produce large amount of coal (30.93%). Which was followed by the USA produce coal (29.80%).
Correction:
In Canada, a large amount of coal (30.93%) was produced, followed by the USA with 29.80%.
Mistakes:
“they produce” → incorrect tense; should be “was produced.”
“large amount” → should be “a large amount.”
“Which was followed by…” → sentence fragment; combine with previous sentence.
“the USA produce” → should be “the USA produced.”
4️⃣ Original:
In the USA, 29.80% coal they produce which was most energy production in 2015.
Correction:
In the USA, 29.80% of energy was produced from coal, which was the highest source in 2015.
Mistakes:
“29.80% coal they produce” → wrong word order and tense.
Missing “of” after percentage.
“which was most energy production” → incorrect phrase; should be “the highest source of energy production.”
5️⃣ Original:
In nuclear, the USA produce 6.40% which was lowest production in the USA, however Canada produce 10.10% nuclear in
Correction:
In terms of nuclear energy, the USA produced 6.40%, which was the lowest figure in the country. However, Canada produced 10.10% from nuclear sources.
Mistakes:
“In nuclear” → incomplete; should be “In terms of nuclear energy.”
“produce” → should be “produced.”
“lowest production” → better as “the lowest figure.”
“however” → should start a new sentence with a capital letter.
“produce 10.10% nuclear in” → incomplete sentence and wrong tense.
Band 5
The pie charts illustrates comparison of energy production in two nations in the year 2015.
Overall, the majority of Canada news through gas ,while USA get their Petro . However, Canada has a higher proportion in four sectors as opposed to USA .
In Canada, 30.93% of the total uses coal ,which is 1% greater than that of USA . Gas is used by 30.31%and the figure in USA 1%. Moreover, the category of other 9.10% and 4.90% in Canada and USA respectively.
Conversely, in USA PETRO is chosen by more half of the total 29.27%, which is the highest proportion between two countries .while 19.55% in Canada use that nuclear is popular among 10.10% in Canada, whereas only 6.40% of USA use the nuc
1️⃣ Original:
The pie charts illustrates comparison of energy production in two nations in the year 2015.
Correction:
The pie charts illustrate a comparison of energy production in two nations in the year 2015.
📝 Mistakes:
“illustrates” → should be “illustrate” (plural subject “charts”).
Missing article: “a comparison”.
2️⃣ Original:
Overall, the majority of Canada news through gas ,while USA get their Petro . However, Canada has a higher proportion in four sectors as opposed to USA .
Correction:
Overall, the majority of Canada’s energy came from gas, while the USA produced most of its energy from petroleum. However, Canada had a higher proportion in four sectors compared to the USA.
📝 Mistakes:
“news” → incorrect word; should be “energy”.
“get their Petro” → wrong form; should be “produced most of its energy from petroleum.”
“has” → should be past tense “had.”
“as opposed to USA” → missing article → “compared to the USA.”
3️⃣ Original:
In Canada, 30.93% of the total uses coal ,which is 1% greater than that of USA . Gas is used by 30.31%and the figure in USA 1%. Moreover, the category of other 9.10% and 4.90% in Canada and USA respectively.
Correction:
In Canada, 30.93% of total energy came from coal, which was about 1% higher than that in the USA. Gas accounted for 30.31%, compared to 29.63% in the USA. Moreover, the share of other sources was 9.10% in Canada and 4.90% in the USA.
📝 Mistakes:
“uses” → should be “came from.”
“that of USA” → should be “that in the USA.”
“and the figure in USA 1%” → unclear, missing comparison.
Missing article “the” before “USA.”
Missing prepositions and punctuation.
4️⃣ Original:
Conversely, in USA PETRO is chosen by more half of the total 29.27%, which is the highest proportion between two countries .while 19.55% in Canada use that nuclear is popular among 10.10% in Canada, whereas only 6.40% of USA use the nuc
Correction:
Conversely, in the USA, petroleum accounted for the highest proportion at 29.27%, while in Canada it was lower at 19.55%. Nuclear energy was more popular in Canada (10.10%) than in the USA (6.40%).
📝 Mistakes:
“in USA” → missing “the.”
“PETRO is chosen by more half of the total 29.27%” → incorrect phrasing; should be “petroleum accounted for 29.27%.”
“between two countries” → should be “between the two countries.”
“while 19.55% in Canada use that nuclear…” → unclear and grammatically incorrect.
“nuc” → incomplete word; should be “nuclear energy.”
Band 5.5
The pie chart illustrate the information about two nations -USA and Canada energy production in 2015.
Overall, the highest energy production in both country on coal.The USA was lowest energy on other production. Moreover,USA nations more energy than the Canada.
In USA, the highest rations of coal 29.80% coal production .while followed the petrol and gas -29.27% and 29.63%.
1️⃣ Original:
The pie chart illustrate the information about two nations -USA and Canada energy production in 2015.
Correction:
The pie charts illustrate information about energy production in two countries, the USA and Canada, in 2015.
📝 Mistakes:
“chart” → should be “charts” (plural).
“illustrate the information about” → wordy → “illustrate information about”.
“two nations -USA and Canada energy production” → incorrect structure → “energy production in two countries, the USA and Canada.”
Missing commas and article “the.”
2️⃣ Original:
Overall, the highest energy production in both country on coal.The USA was lowest energy on other production. Moreover,USA nations more energy than the Canada.
Correction:
Overall, coal was the main source of energy in both countries, while other sources accounted for the lowest share in the USA. Moreover, the USA produced slightly more energy than Canada.
📝 Mistakes:
“in both country” → should be “in both countries.”
“on coal” → wrong preposition → “was from coal.”
“The USA was lowest energy on other production” → incorrect → “other sources accounted for the lowest share in the USA.”
“USA nations more energy than the Canada” → grammar error → “the USA produced more energy than Canada.”
Missing punctuation.
3️⃣ Original:
In USA, the highest rations of coal 29.80% coal production .while followed the petrol and gas -29.27% and 29.63%.
Correction:
In the USA, coal accounted for the highest proportion of energy production at 29.80%, followed by petroleum and gas at 29.27% and 29.63%, respectively.
📝 Mistakes:
“rations” → wrong word → “proportion” or “percentage.”
“In USA” → missing article → “In the USA.”
“coal 29.80% coal production” → repetition → “coal accounted for 29.80%.”
“while followed the petrol and gas” → incorrect structure → “followed by petroleum and gas.”
Missing linking word (“respectively” at the end helps clarity).
Band 5